Throwback Thursday: Sweet Sixteen (Thousand) · 12:53am Nov 3rd, 2017
Welcome to Throwback Thursday, the series in which I go back to my older stories, talk about the inner workings of the story, and then tell you if it's worth looking into. On this day, we get to take a look at the second part of my Coffee Trilogy, Sweet Sixteen (Thousand).
Sweet Sixteen (Thousand)
Chapters: 1
Length: ~6,600
Genre: Slice of Life, Comedy, EqG
Characters: The Dazzlings
Date of completion: 2/28/15
Time took to finish: ~6 weeks
Sweet Sixteen (Thousand) is what happens when you write a joke scene in a story and then try to explain how that scene came to be. For those of you who didn't read Coffee Break, there's a bit in which Sonata walks into Principal Celestia in the hallways, because she was blindfolded and looking for a pinata. After publishing that, I realized that it made no sense. And, to remedy that, I wrote SS(T)
SS(T) is the story about the Dazzlings' birthday and Sonata's desire to celebrate that fact. The other two don't care because they're broke, powerless, and over ten thousand years old, so who's really keeping track at this point? In fact, they get Sonata to admit that she doesn't even remember exactly how old they all are. So, after a quick scuffle with Aria, Sonata runs off in tears. Aria feels bad, and she and Adagio get together to throw Sonata her stupid birthday party.
The plot itself is unremarkable, and not super funny, but it does have its little gems. Particularly, a subplot about their parents and how much Aria misses them (her mother, particularly). Most of you probably know that I ship Aria and Sonata, but to explore their dynamic as sisters is fascinating in its own right. I wish I had the foresight to make the entire story focus around that relationship, rather than arguing over chores and Wheat Thins and the Dazzlings not owning a bed. It goes on for too long and ultimately goes nowhere. If it was half the length and more focused, I'd be more willing to recommend it.
Does it hold up? Meh... I'd say no, but only because of its potential. It could've been so much more than what it is, and that's kinda depressing. It's hard for me to go back and read it again.
