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Budget_Player_Cadet


Expat American brony living in Germany. Occasionally, I write smut or read something that isn't smut.

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  • 313 weeks
    For anyone wondering what I've been up to lately...

    So... First of all, sorry I haven't put out much material lately. I've sorta drifted away from the Pony fandom as a whole, largely because I feel like I suffered my way through season 7 instead of enjoying it. Instead, I've been focusing on a different passion of mine: erotic hypnosis. If you read my story,

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  • 353 weeks
    On shitty ideas and obnoxious people

    The following list of PMs came after quite a few PMs from this same guy.

    I did think of another idea that might be fun, and it fits more in line with how you'd think the characters would act.

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  • 375 weeks
    Looking for proofreader/editor

    So I finally got my latest fic ready for editing. But my go-to editors are too busy/unreachable, so I might as well call out here. Trixie/Starlight clop, heavy focus on hypnosis.

    Thanks in advance,
    -BPC

    EDIT: I'm an idiot. I already made this post earlier and got a lot of responses. Sorry folks! XD

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  • 378 weeks
    The Human In Equestria Exposition Dump: Don't do it.

    Show, don't tell. This is writing 101.
    If you can cut it without taking anything away from the story, cut it. This is also writing 101.

    So why do I keep seeing HiE fics that start with entirely unnecessary exposition dumps, which frame the narrative in an inelegant way?

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  • 412 weeks
    Need a new editor

    I can't reach one of my old editors and the other one just doesn't have time.

    Any takers for editing and proofreading on the (nearly completed) last chapter?

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Feb
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2017

The Human In Equestria Exposition Dump: Don't do it. · 11:01am Feb 7th, 2017

Show, don't tell. This is writing 101.
If you can cut it without taking anything away from the story, cut it. This is also writing 101.

So why do I keep seeing HiE fics that start with entirely unnecessary exposition dumps, which frame the narrative in an inelegant way?

How your human character got to equestria usually doesn't matter. If the extent of your story is "anon (or "generic human who isn't anon") hooks up with a mare", chances are good that "how he got there" is really irrelevant. What matters is that he's there. Similarly, how he fits into ponyville/canterlot/whatever is probably at best an afterthought (unless it isn't, in which case it's still a bad idea to convey the information as an exposition dump. You should use the exposition dump as rarely as possible.

Show, don't tell.

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Comments ( 1 )

You can get away with large amounts of exposition if you somehow manage to fit it into the narrative. 99% of exposition chapters ever are forced, written in to explain backgrounds and events to the reader without having to actually put any effort into making the expostion matter to the story. Most of the time, like you said, what happened to your human and how they got to Equestra doen't usually matter too much. But in a story such as, lets say To Friend is To Human, the events before the human arrived in Equestria are actually relevant. There are characters from before the human gets to Equestria that matter to the plot. Like, main characters. In this case some exposition would actually be preferred. But you can't just dedicate one chapter to exposition then never mention it again, that would be what a dump of info that no one wants to read.

ARTICLE 2 is a story that does exposition well. It's spread out over the story and is contextual to the plot of what is happening in current time in the story. Backgrounds and history of the character are tied to events that happen in the plot, usually because they relate mildly to these events and the exposition comes up in conversation and is detailed. It gets mixed in with what is already happening to make the story flow rather than grind it's gears for 3k words then continue at a slower pace.

So yeah. Large amounts of exposition and/ or info can be good in a story if it matters to the plot. Like you said, if it doesn't matter then it doesn't have to be there. But I wouldn't say that they should be avoided at all costs, you just have to know when and how to use them if at all.

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