Second chapter of Don't Fear The Storm rewritten

Added some 1000 words this time around. Didn't realize my writing was of such a low quality. No wonder Twilight-senpai never noticed me.

For an example of how things got changed, here's an old paragraph:

It was a diaper. If she was going to be honest, it might’ve felt a bit damp on the inside, and, of course, Twilight had seen immediately that she’d used it. She’d probably told the hospital staff to put her in one.

And here's the changed version:

Her own gaze was enraptured by the sole garment she wore. A bulky, plastic-backed beast that crinkled softly as she moved her legs ever so slightly, as if it wanted to announce itself to the whole hospital. Look at me. Look at Rainbow Dash, the most baby-ish pegasus in all of Ponyville, it practically screamed. Yet that it was there somehow wasn’t the worst part, no, of course not. It could’ve been white, it could’ve been green or some other sort of mono-color, instead childishly comical images of birds and flowers were printed on the frontal tape, while fading clouds and rainbows covered what lay beneath. Rainbow Dash would’ve just been embarrassed if it were a normal incontinence product, but what she wore looked like an oversized version of those diapers for actual foals. Yes, she was downright humiliated.

I think you might see a difference, hopefully this stuff will all be readable when I'm done.