What am I doing wrong?

Okay, so I'd like to ask this simple question.

With Sweetie Belle Tastes Like Marshmallow, what is it I'm doing wrong? Can someone tell me?

Comments

[i_am_the_jam]

Could you be a bit more specific?

[Wiimeiser]

3471943
Mostly to do with the sudden influx of downvotes. I know it's my first fanfic and it's barely proofread, but still, I want to know if I'm doing something wrong.

[i_am_the_jam]

Maybe it's the way you suddenly shoe-horned in the events of "Crusaders of the Lost Mark". Didn't you have an outline all set up for the entire story, or were you making it up as you went along?

[Wiimeiser]

3472518 I did most of the initial draft within the first week. Morning and Melancholia and the next unpublished chapter I added later. I did add in the new cutie marks, but just as ship decoration, it has no major impact on the overall plot (more information on the ship will be trickled out later on)

[i_am_the_jam]

Not sure what's wrong, then, since I liked your story...

[Wiimeiser]

3472901 Thanks anyway...