So going to start the second chapter, hopefully tomorrow · 7:53pm Aug 15th, 2015
I wanted to get some opinions on a few things. First I'm going to state that with Ch.2:
- Don't expect much action like you did in Ch.1, mostly due to the nature of Ch.2
-Prepare for some backstory, also that it may come with some confusing choppy bits. This is mostly due to this being a short story that I can't exactly flesh out those portions.
-We're going to introduce a few more characters in this chapter, with one of them being a non-essential OC, Story-wise but not in the sense of character history.
As for other things I want to get an opinion:
-How'd you guys like my action scenes? I tried to at least give every character some form of momentum in it, mostly the Apples. Let me tell you that it was annoying having to go back and rewrite some scenes to give certain characters screen time. Namely Rarity, Spike and Fluttershy. Reasons in this order: I had trouble trying to decide what she could do, forgot about him for a moment and....Fluttershy, enough said.
-Dialogue. Was it good? Nothing too forced? Maybe the Pinkie to Twilight convo about Naruto's characteristics? The way certain characters speak? (this one I'm mostly concerned about)
-Naruto's character design. Thoughts?