Mental fogs

So, I dunno if you guys know about this phenomenon, but you probably do. If your body remains inactive for a long time, not only does your body atrophy, but your mind slows down as well. I've been exercising recently and going outside and doing stuff because I felt like it, and I began to get more alert and be able to think more clearly. When I started the story, i was just sitting around all day eating cheetos and pizza. Also, with a little bit of practice I think i've gotten better at writing a bit more clearly, but I still need some critiques and criticism. So if any of you like my story, but find things wrong with it, send me a message or leave a comment on the story, I'll be sure to read it (if not right away due to the fact i have to go to the library and whatnot, but regardless.)

Oh, and chapters 11-14 have the skeletal story set up, i'm just filling htem out. I'll probably release all 4 together, if not in very close proximity. I'm going to be trying to do a better job of proof reading so I don't have to go back and re-write the WHOLE FLIPPIN STORY BECAUSE I SUCK AT LIFE. K. Have a good day guys