Slacking off... I mean, time used to make the story flow better

The next chapter will be later than usual. The reason for that is, I realised I pretty much rushed from comment to comment at some points in the other chapters. Now, in some it doesn't seem that way and it flows naturally, I don't have a problem with those.

But at some, like the campement in the Everfree, it really is very obvious and, actually, doesn't bother me that much. I could write that off to being pretty new to combining comments for a story. But that is exactly the point, isn't it?

I realised what I did wrong, and now I have to stop doing that. Please stay by while I figure out interesting, good-flowing ways to combine the comments.

Thank you.

Comments

[Hard Cider]

It could be a good idea to ask Down with Chrysalis for tips on writing your comment driven story. There's also the different groups that could help proof read your work.

[Solarkness]

3297082 Nu-uh, I know what I have to do. It's just, I'll most likely need more time for that part. I don't really like asking for help, I think it sticks better if I find it out myself, and point it out to myself. If I oversee something important,most likely someone would point it out to me, because people can be helpful like that

I have a rough outline of how to connect them, I just need more time to flesh out the scenes to correctly combine them without making it seem rushed.