The Return of the Raven Queen (and Breaking Dawn) · 5:48pm Jan 16th, 2015
Sunset´s question was cut off by a cracking sound and a flash of midnight blue light as a third pony appeared into the room. A golden unicorn, with a mane of red and white, stumbled around and dropped to the floor. The two present mares recognized her as Breaking Dawn, a former student of Celestia who had some months ago plotted against Twilight.
Twilight looked at her awestruck. What in equestria is going on? She was nearly dead! And that wasn't even her magic!!
"The...Raven Queen... " She took a long, painful breath before looking at twilight in the eye and adding " wants you… princess " she spat the last word and fainted.
I now have someone else using one of my OCs in their fanfic! I'm so proud to have something that the Albinocorn doesn't (apparently, no, he beat me to it. He is the Twilight Sparkle to my Sunset Shimmer).
The Return of the Raven Queen is a new fic by Lucius-Nomicon, a new author here on the site. It involves Dawny, Sunset (canon Sunset, that is), Twilight and two of the author's own OCs who revealed to be the rightful heirs to Celestia's power, and future chapters will doubtless explore the consequences of this revelation.
It is a Tyrantlestia fic, so if you don't like that sort of thing then this probably won't be your bag, but apart from that I found it a pretty good, exciting fic. The first chapter was pre-read by yours truly, and I have to say that Lucius' grammar is very good for someone whose first language isn't English, and his characterisation skills are also quite deft, getting across the character of Shining Noon, one of the author's own OCs, without ever calling attention to the subtle character work.
So please support a new author, and support Dawny, by giving Return of the Raven Queen a shot and hopefully leaving a kind word in the comments section.
Cool! I'll check that out
Actually... You're wrong. Artemis Lulamoon, who appears in Long Road to Friendship, appeared in Sunset Rekindled. Sorry.
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Dammit!
Ah, well, he deserves it.
It looks pretty good, judging from that quoted excerpt!