Mid-January check in · 5:03pm Jan 14th, 2015
It's been sort of a hellish week for me but chapter 9 is coming along well and should be published just in time for the weekend. The draft I'm working on at the moment is coming in at just over 10k words and it will probably be finished at about the same size as chapter 8, which had 13k.
I've been getting a few messages regarding some elements of the story which I'd like to address. No spoilers below, just notes.
- "You tagged Lyra but she's barely had any scenes!" her parts are coming though I will reveal she only has a mention in chapter 9. I want to focus on Twilight, who is easier to write for because both her personality and mannerisms are already established whereas Lyra needs a personality developed before I can even write lines for her. I think I made an acceptable start on that with chapter 7, but I still need to flesh it out a bit further. Perhaps I can do a special Lyra-only scene in chapter 10? (no promises, but maybe I just need to dive in and force myself to write for her).
- "Titus is reciprocating Twilight's affections too quickly." It was planned to feel like this and Titus' reasoning is explained in chapter 9. Keep in mind Twilight is going to change drastically once her cycle is over and she reverts to her usual analytically-driven self, which I thought would be fun to have the sudden reversal that our human has to deal with.
- "Where's da clop?/I Came for the clop, none found. Zero out of Ten." I have no experience writing clop and, if/when I do put some in the story, I would prefer to take my time writing it so it doesn't come out lame lame like He stuck it in her and she liked it so she moaned and made sexy noises as she got super wet and then they humped. The "sex" tag will be toggled on when you can find some.
- "Why are chapters 1-7 so short?" I made them individual chapters because jamming all of that into a single chapter with a ton of breaks to divide them between the arcs/subjects/character PoVs looked messy.
- "The short chapters feel unnecessary and they should be deleted because I was able to come into the story just fine starting with chapter ___." It honestly doesn't take that long to read them and it adds to the story. You could skip them if you don't have an issue just accepting that Titus is there and having no back-story as to how he came to Equestria, but I personally do.
- "Why did you write Titus as using a blaster in the flash back/memory chapter?/What were those creatures from the flashback that Luna saw?" Those events took place after the Jedi Purge when he was operating as a mercenary and bounty hunter to hide from the Empire. Using a lightsaber at that point would have painted him as a giant target. They were mutants referred to as ghouls, which could be found in the Coruscant Undercity. I'll probably write about that later.
