Dec
21st
2014
Sorry for the confusion on the encounter · 1:23am Dec 21st, 2014
What I had meant when I put the chapter as non canon what I meant was that AB's encounter would no longer happen in the story. It was more of a what would have happened. The premise stays the same. Also sorry for the poor excuse of a chapter I posted yesterday, I guess that happens when you force something. I felt that I needed to update something due to not having anything for two months and went with just showing how he got there. Like I said sorry for all the confusion
The scene with AB was alright, I liked that scene. Don't know why you want to get rid of it.
2666984 It's not that i want to get rid of it, it's just that it wouldn't fit in the story. Maybe I'll figure out a way to incorporate it later on.
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Can you explain why it no longer fits?
So what are you looking to do with the story now?
The initial chapter was a standout gem because you did some really interesting things. And the extreme shift was not just jarring, but disorienting. You might consider revising your approach and keeping it as the start, while the new chapter is him looking back on how he wound up where he did. You already had him demonstrated as thoughtful enough to do some heavy pondering.
The nice thing about fiction is you are free to do ANYTHING! I found myself feeling painted into a corner of sorts where I either had to do some chapter rewriting to cover things I forgot to touch on or wanted earlier in the story. I also had found myself in a power stacking overreach without noticing. After a flash of inspiration, I played off the term 'rose-colored glasses' to not just slip out of the quasi-trap, but do something interesting within the story. Some of the stuff it lead me to come up with was even more fun. Now I get to branch in a new direction that gives me even more freedom to do what I'm working towards in both near and long term within my story. Writing mostly free form, I find great enjoyment in breaking rules when it feels right for the story.
Some of the issue is simply not having enough of the story yet after it looked so remarkable. Seriously, consider something like flashbacks or other approaches to fill in the 'how'd I get here?' details. Even anachronistic chapters. You had a VERY good start, after all. You would be quite remiss to divest yourself of just how good you started things out from a single first chapter.
I'm sure I'm not alone, speaking as a writer of my own fanfic, when I say I wish I got that kind of notice. Don't waste it.
2667065 Well for starters the wolves will no longer be there. The story was going to be a one shot, and after thinking of how to continue it their interaction wouldn't fit. But maybe I can find a way to make it fit.
2667071 I don't know right now. Maybe I'll stick to just showing what happened when they met cause that's one of the few things I have already planed out besides the ending.
2667334 Well as I have heard it said about writing, make sure you know where you're going. In other words, don't dig in until you know where you're ultimately trying to go. Once you have that, you go from start to end, looking it all over, and start drawing the connections that link them. And nothing says you can't go back and revise a chapter with additions, subtractions, or other substantial changes. I've done it so many times already myself. Including slipping in key points to a chapter when I've already gone several chapters further. New ideas sometimes necessitate retroactive enhancement.
I think you really should work from the first chapter you wrote that started this. It was excellent and a wonderful point to launch off of. You gave yourself all the necessary pieces for how he could start to befriend Applebloom and eventually meet more ponies. The fact he's wary and anxious about going near ponies was also an intriguing point. Personally, the wolves were an interesting thing to see, but you could just as easily have him running solo.
And don't worry about it all too much. If you're not having fun writing it, readers are quite likely to get the same impression. If you find it a fun story, you'll have little to worry about. Take all the time you need.
2667411 Thanks for the support man, If only you could see what I have thought in my head what happens. The only problem is that AB isn't involved in what in the story a lot as I have it planed, hence why I say that it doesn't happen. I wrote it to show how it could have gone. But oh well, when I get there I think more will see why exactly it wouldn't fit.
2667473 Well let me tell you, I've gotten tons of ideas for what to do in my story. I do mean tons, as I have over 30 pages of notes and conceptual ideas. And for the ideas intended for the storyline that's already been completed, you know how often I use them like I planned?
Less than 10%.
Come up with more ways to do something and then run with what feels like the most fun. Give thought to abandoning what felt interesting before but seems off now. Consider what Applebloom would like (it helps if you use her voice in your head, I'm serious). You might even consider a switch and do some focusing on Applebloom's side of things, or another pony's. Don't be afraid to completely redirect things if a new idea makes you giggle in delight privately. So long as you have fun, it should be just fine.
2667487 Every bit of reading i do on the site is with the character's voice. When it comes to writing this story I have to play it in my head to see if its good or not. I had the encounter swimming in my head like for a month before i started to actually write it. And just thinking about whats coming next has me smiling like a mad man.
2667492 Then go write it.