Revision to part one of The Meaning of Balloons and more

I made some major revisions to the first part of my cutie mark story. I cleaned up the dialogue and many grammar errors as well extended a few parts of the story, attempting to overall make it more readable. I hope you all enjoy that and part two should be coming together shortly. I'm going to take a bit more time to make sure this one is a more polished product before sending it out to you guys. Also, on my pastebin are two unpublished stories which I would like some opinions and comments on to see if those are starting out in the right direction. That link can be found on my page. Hope you guys like what's out there so far!