Fantasia Archsage Reviews "Three Left Turns" · 8:22pm Apr 2nd, 2014
“Three Left Turns”
Written by SirTruffles
Reviewed by Fantasia Archsage
Hello again, and welcome to my second story review of the “Archsage Review Series”. It’s where I read a story and make a review on it. Thank you for all who read and for those that haven’t read any yet, enjoy.
Now this story was a really great read. It had great use of vocabulary. I was really hooked with whole story. The more I read it the more I wanted to figure what was going on inside the mind of the author when writing this. And the idea of her trying to find the future with her only having the passed to over at Bazaar was an idea that had me quite intrigued.
Now onto the reading the story itself the author described the beginning of the story with the atmosphere and the scene beautifully. I mean to me I find the only way it could’ve been clearer was through an animation itself.
Well it would be incorrect for me to say that it was not written with that amount of clarity throughout the whole story.
Reading from the beginning to the middle it kept me intrigued was the description of the place and how the author kept the vocabulary and the read smooth. I really want to know more about that place the dog was in.
There were one or two things that I kinda wanted to know more about but because it’s a one shot they could be left out, but I still want to know about the severely damaged battle suit that she had, like what caused it to have been damaged? But that wasn’t so much the main focus of the story, so I don’t think I will get answer. 
I find it to be an interesting question to answer, not leaving out the entire place at the “End Of Equestria”.
Towards the middle of the story got really nice with narration. I really loved how each sentence flowed in beautifully with well place descriptive words in my opinion. At first I got a little lost as to who was speaking at that point. But on my second read through I basically caught everything.
I always wanted to narrate on this level, just to have your readers hooked on every word you’re saying. I mean with this author’s great narration, he could risk putting nonsense he and there and still have me hooked to the reading.
The ending was very good but to me I feel the author through through in an ending cliffhanger just to leave me on my desk pulling my hair out as to what happened next beyond the usual. I really wanted to know what was actually going to happen ‘tomorrow’. Oh well, not all stories can be completed without questions like what happens next or what if, so… yeah.
What I really like about this story was definitely the characters even though they only had a moments say. In my stories, and even stories I have read from other authors there would be a side character sometimes a few that would not be written right within the said story and it makes me not want to find out more about them at all. Instead the opposite happens, I totally don’t like them or the story could better with maybe another character, etc. In this story, even though they were given a paragraph’s worth of dialogue or not even that for some but I still was intrigued and wanted to know more about them even though it was one shot.
But hey, that’s what I like most this story. Not forgetting the great description of the scenery.
Overall, I find this one shot to have been a great read. If you want any idea how to narrate a story good, I say read this story if you want the know, it shows how really well. The best part about it is that it isn’t a long read of course you might have to grab a dictionary, like me, because the author uses some good vocabulary words here and there throughout the story, but hey I loved reading through it and finding out its depth, which I don’t think even after reading it three times could not grasp everything. It was still worth the read and worth searching into depth of this story.
Heck, I’m gonna be using this story to improve my narrating. Hope I could improve soon...
Anyhow, thank you all for reading this review. I will certainly do another soon. Just remember if you guys have a story that you want me to review leave it in the comments. I’ll be sure to take a look at them except for epics because those take a while.
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Again, the story “Three Left Turns” was written by SirTruffles and reviewed by Fantasia Archsage.
Later to you all. 
Wow, I'm honored. I know I replied to your comment on the story, but thanks again for these kind words!
On the topic of narration, I found it incredibly helpful to picture a storyteller speaking the words as I wrote. By imagining how my words sounded, I was better able to understand how they would impact the reader, so I could tune them until they felt right. Keeping the voice straight also helped me define the atmosphere and keep it going throughout the story. I seem to recall the voice I chose was somewhat like this, but a bit softer and more detached to fit the tone I was going for:
Listening to a few professional readings with a similar tone to what you're going for is an excellent way to get ideas for your own narration. It doesn't have to be book/poem readings either: a comedy writer might listen to standup acts, news anchors might be good for a documentary, and so on.
And their you have it everyone, that's why you should give this guy 1977337 some love. Very helpful information this is for everyone, including me, who wants to have good narration for their story. Thank you for responding to this review. :)
Another fantastic review. You give us enough of the story to keep up interested, but not too much that you spoil it all. You give your thoughts on what you liked and what you thought you could improve on without it being mean-spirited. (Unlike some reviewers I know.
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Anyway, fantastic review. I look forward to seeing more of your reviews in the future.
1977680 Thank you very much. :D Hopefully this would get a great amount of readers in the near future.
Ooh, looks good! * w * I'll give this fic a look when I can!