My Baby Sister (Progress and second scene smaple) · 10:50pm Mar 13th, 2014
I just finished writing the first half of the second scene of that new story I'm doing. It's now at 5000 words total, and still moving along nicely. Maybe I'll manage to finish the second scene today, but for now it's at least a nice excerise in writing adorable stuff while also keeping a focus on the padding and semi-foalish behaviour. It's honestly refreshing writing a story that focuses on this, because I haven't done nearly enough of it in my others.
So for now, have a bit from the second scene. I kept the hints that Ahuizotl is the major villain behind the diamond heists out, so there's no– What do you mean that's the wrong story?
Also, it's still only the first version, nobody looked over it and checked if anything's wrong with it. Anything technical and cosmetic that needs to be changed will probably be changed down the line.
Apple Bloom climbed on the bed as carefully as possible, biting her lips as she anticipated the sheer awesomeness that she was about to unleash. Applejack herself rested in a most awkward position, she lay horizontal to the bed, her legs dangling over the edge. Her sister was a pony who tended to fall asleep during work, and nowadays she only found calm nights when Apple Bloom goaded her into sharing the bed with her.
Apple Bloom’s eyes were fixated on her sister. She would scare her, and that would teach her for blowing a raspberry on Apple Bloom's stomach after that one diaper change, the one she had planned to forget about beforehand but now couldn’t. Surely, that had to be because of Applejack doing weird stuff and not the thing that made her want to forget that particular one so much. Apple Bloom stepped closer to Applejack, preparing herself for doing it. The filly tried to keep her imagination down, tried not to think of how Applejack would yelp and the kind of face she’d make, yet the image still sprung up in her mind, and caused a slight giggle.
Then she stood right by her sleeping sister’s side. Vengeance for one humiliation, and maybe even more. One, giant scare, just one.
She slowly leant in closer to Applejack, who took another soft breath –
Before the mare suddenly jumped up and pushed Apple Bloom on the sheets. The filly only managed a brief gasp before she erupted in a laughter so fierce that her pacifier fell out. Applejack brought down her muzzle on her little sister’s tummy, blowing a loud raspberry on it.
If this does not get downvoted (if it gets noticed by non padded people) then you are the king of writing padded stuff
Though it looks like its gonna be a good read!
Looks like Applejack sleeps with one eye open. Cause revenge is sweet.