does this look like it might make a good story? · 7:57pm Jan 10th, 2014
i've been thinking ever since fred told me to write a story i'm putting it on the ttmaa so you comrades can correct my mistakes
I live my life one day at a time sure i have a happy life, good friends and an amazing girlfriend. my name Wolf because my friends tell me how obsessed i am with them. i get bullied at school for being a brony and my favorite pony is fluttershy. whenever i see that animal loving pegasus i just wanna reach through the screen and let her take me with her but everytime i'm stopped by my tv screen i also have a talent to see into future which always seem to happen in a year from now well i'm gonna stop my rambling and pick up where i am now
''Wolf where are you'' my best friend said
''over here shawn'' i said
''geez dude i was looking all over for you'' shawn said he saw my fluttershy plushie laying on my bed ''dude how can you love that little kids show''
''you have to watch it to understand'' i said ''whatever wolf hey wanna play some video games at my place?'' shawn spinned my fluttershy plushy in the air ''nah man i have to do something today do you mind um...'' i tried to find the right word to tell him to leave shawn put fluttershy down ''i understand you wanna watch my little pony'' he said ''yes and i'll call you when i'm available'' i said turning on my tv to watch a repeat of bats! i was all alone ''ugh it's kinda lon-'' before i could look away a bright light blinded me ''what the'' the next thing i know i was unconscious before you could say zoinks
5 hours later
''what is this wolf doing in our library spike'' a woman voice i've heard before but can't put my finger on it
''i don't know twilight maybe we should get somepony like fluttershy'' another little boy voice that sound familiar
i begain to open my eye ''ugh... what happened''
''Augh IT TALKS'' the woman voice said
''of course i can talk'' i tried to stand but noticed my hand have been turned into paws ''AUGH I'M A WOLF'' i grin ''um you wouldn't happen to be twilight sparkle and spike''
''how do you know my name'' twilght said with a surprised look on her face
''my name is...'' shiet need to think of a name ''Crimson you wouldn't happen to have a mirror''
''yeah here'' She used her magic to pick up a mirror and i got a good look at my self i had Black fur and red streaks my eyes we're also crimson but the part that surprised me that i had wings
''dang'' i said stunned ''um Twilight where are your friends''
''first how do you know my name after you tell me i'll go get them'' she asked
''ugh this might take a while'' i said in a groan so i told Twilight about how i knew her name and everything about how her and her friends defeats nightmare moon and turned her back into princess luna how they defeat discord and taught him the magic of friendship and how chrysalis tried to take over equestria as we we're chatting i've noticed that her friend we're listening to our conversation so i did the best known solution to get their attention i took a deep breath and noticed Twilight confused look and took a deep howl
AHOOOOOOOOOO
The door to the library opened and now the mane 6 is all her
''TWILIGHT WHY DOES A WOLF TALK AND KNOWS EVERYTHING ABOUT US TIMBER WOLVES AREN'T FRIENDLY'' Rainbow said ''calm down Rainbow i'm a friendly'' i said bowing before them but i noticed a little boy amoung them i walked towards him it can't be ''Mr. Mason it's nice to meet you my names Crimson i hope we become good friends''
The mane 6 look in shock and they're eyes shrink the pinprick Fluttershy the first to speak up ''How do you know my precious baby boy name'' She asked in a nervous voice
''It's hard to explain but let's just say i have a hunch'' i said ''Now who's up for a nice trip to the princesses'' i said just when i said that a bright light appeared in the center of the library
Princess luna and Celestia stood there shocked ''Well spike wasn't kidding when he said a wolf appeared out of in the library'' Luna said
I walked up to Luna and bowed ''I am honored to be in your presents teacher of the night'' i said Celestia chuckled ''looks like you have an admirer dear sister''
Do it. This is an awesome idea. Also here's some advice I got from our good (sane) friend Geo:
*Get an editor.
* Don't let anyone tell you that you can't write.
* Take all criticism to heart. Negative comments, when well written, can help you learn from your mistakes.
* Try not to rush things in your story (like I did with Twilight and Geo's three-day whirlwind romance).
1702869 Geo is as nuts as me.
I like the premise. I think it's interesting and could be well expanded upon.
The one thing that can undoubtedly drag your work down is if you don't have right grammar. Even small mistakes-not capitalizing letters, messing up commas (which, in the English language, is very easy to do) and misspelling words-can make your work unenjoyable to people. I suggest you get an editor.
1703442 Well at least he's a good writer
1703491 He's a great writer. That's why he'll get in the top 50 for a Shorty award.
1703541 While I'll be near the bottom for a time
I like this idea my friend. If I wasn't busy with all my other stories, I would help edit it and all, but I don't think I would be able to.
However, that is what you'll need is an editor for some of it, but I along with 
1702869 love the premise/idea, and I would like to see what grows from this.
1703588 yeah
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1703487 i appreciate the positive feedback but i did all that on my wii u until i get a laptop i doubt my story going anywhere
1704268 Well at least you have an idea that is good so when you get a chance you should write it
1704278 to tell you the truth i was gonna start this very dark with my death but i scrapted the idea and though i should add toby into the mix
1704296 good idea...wait did you get that from my fic?
1704345 from which fic?
1704885 The one I wrote An Angel, A Demon, and A Gentleman. The idea of you dying and heading to the Tobyverse is what happened in mine
1705753 well isn't that a stroke of luck
1706347 or is it? Nah I'm kidding. I'll only care if you take parts of my story and use it.
1706378 yeah i know but i haven't read your story yet i have to get caught up on many different stories that i'm dying to read
1707364 It needs improvement but I'm working on it
1707407 hmm i came up with an idea for my final draft for my story that i have no idea how many chapter it'll have but i'll give Crimson a katana that can feel his emotions
1707597 And it has a different effect for each emotion because that'll be awesome