I may not be the only Prince Solstice... · 5:35am Jan 9th, 2014
But there will always be me, and I think that's good fucking enough. Fucking green hyperlink text.
This author
>writes first pony story
>apologizes for writing it
This shit gets me every time.
Hey all, this will be my first fan-fic, a heads up and sorry for my bad gramma. this littel thing is northing more then too see what you think about it. tell me what you like and what you dont like about, so I know where to improve. Last but not least enjoy=)
You have no idea...
Behold, the almighty glory of the first comment and first review! I am Prince Solstice! My handle maybe of royalty, and my ego maybe a tad high, but my sweet sweet delicate touching words of wisdom will deliver a clear concise message that will aid you on your journey into writing. Please accept my generosity to leave a few words behind, and thank me for the time it takes me to actually type (and proof read) this... ya cock.
It was just another early morning in Equestria, the sun slowly light up the night sky.
Suddenly, things became too tense.
but Twilight had more important places to be today
Fucking bitch, can't even enjoy a god damn sunrise anymore. What's her problem?
should thy needed her presence.
Thou maketh no fucking sense.
The wind was could
-rubs temples- I maybe required by law to inform you, I've killed people for less.
This feeling of freedom was could not be described
Ever read something and immediately think 'hm I should stop and just walk away.' I have no idea what the fuck is going on, but all hell is about to break loose very quickly if this isn't fixed in the next sentence.
she closed her eyes for a few moments,
'as the sticky gooey mess strung from her eyelashes slowly made it's way down to her muzzle.'
She hadn’t been there for 3 years.
I'm tense... which by tense I mean my penis is. Words just fucking get me rock hard man.
It didn’t take twilight long to reach the Everfree forest was slowly starting to appear up in the horizon,
Here, let me write a short story, and show you how verb tense should look.
Twilight arrived at the stoop of her house, her mane soaking wet from the rain. Instantly she began to regret her decision to swallow the entire load, now she needed to expel the nasty gooey liquid from her nose.
'Dammit, Futashy really needs to take it easy next time. My throat is going to be bruised.' Twilight thought to herself. She swung her door open, and shut it with a gentle tap of her hind hoof. Quickly she found some tissue and blew out one big glob of snot and seamen. Gagging a little at the thought of the mixture, she decided to go record the experiments her and Futashy had done today.
Step one: grab partners hind hooves while laying on top, face to face with the large member
Step two: lick don't suck to full erection. There is more blood flow when being teased, therefore a more appropriate erection
Step three: Insert the member slowly while flexing your tongue the entire time, until you almost gag.
Step four: Widen your partners legs
Step five: Suck them dry
Okay, now that I've completely weirded you out, allow me to retort what the fuck I'm going on about. This story is absolutely a pile of... well words to be exact. Too many grammar issues really need to be addressed to begin with. It makes a story really confusing when your verb tense is all out of whack, not to mention several instances of just odd words being inserted. There are misspellings everywhere, and to top it off, you asked me to forgive you for it. Yeah...
That's a big fucking no.
I can't forgive someone for not properly proof reading their stories. Seriously, re-read what you wrote. Then you would see those mistakes and would have fixed them. You would have also fixed several scenes, and second guessed yourself on details, and where you want to take the story. Proof-reading can actually make a story better when you get good at it. You look at a certain paragraph and think to yourself 'wow that's is really shitty forced dialogue.' Fucking first timers and their damn rookie mistakes, oh well you at least got me to tell you what's up the first time.
As far as the story itself goes, can I be honest? I didn't even read it past the first paragraph so I can't really tell you if it's shit or not. I'm assuming it's probably a generic 'Princess Twilight's return home ends up being bittersweet and not what she was expecting' story. If it is, then that just proves my credibility even more as a review person.
So all in all, yeah fucking do something about this story. It's bad and not worth reading with all of the grammatical issues. Which is going to take a lot of time on your behalf. You could just start over too, which would be a good idea too.
Twilight realized that she had made an assumption, in fact the Pegasus was a few incises shorter than the earth pony.
Awe that must be embarrassing.
Final Verdict: Last time I measured, Futashy had a cock the literal size of my arm
Fucking Futashy is a rough bitch.
I laughed so hard I cried, Gods damn it did I cry
1698085 Tell me the thought of that short story didn't give you a little chubby.
1698147 Not really, yo bro are you an editor?
1698165 Um, I can be. I'm not a very reliable editor when it comes to anything except one shots and the first chapters. I'm also not a very good co-writer for anything other than one-shots. In fact I'm better at writing one shot stories than full stories.
1698171
That's perfectly fine brother, was wondering if you would not mind editing a really long fic I'm going to write soon but I can doubt you could be able to 
It's fine
Guess who's back?
Back again,
Solstice is back,
Tell a friend.
You have no idea how much I missed these fuckers and the awful stories.