Fresh Coat of Paint · 4:08am May 6th, 2012
I'm feeling much better about the whole story tonight... I just finished a huge round of overhauls and touch-ups throughout the whole thing. Every chapter was touched to clarify, correct, format, and improve.
For those that have already read the early chapters and have no desire to re-read them, don't worry. There weren't any plot changes that will trip you up later. Details were added, phrasing was changed, and one scene was given slightly more believable innards, though the beginning and end remain the same. (When Rainbow Dash and Soarin are talking near the end of chapter 2.)
I've also got the story-so-far ready for full editorial review on ponychan. Here's hoping these self-performed edits make their job even easier!
Then again, if I fix all the easy stuff, all they'll have to report on are the harder things to change. Like, perhaps the present tense that I use... I like it. I think it helps draw the reader into the tension. But it can be jarring for someone that reads a lot and rarely encounters it. I can only hope that I've done it well enough (now that I've cleaned up some of its messes) that no one really notices that oddity. I don't plan to change it here, but then, I don't plan to use it again, either. :)
To help with the editing, I've created a Google Docs version as well. If anyone wanted to kill some trees to have an unfinished hardcopy, that's probably the place to get it - It's better formatted than the FIMFiction versions.
If anyone DOES happen to re-read the whole thing now that I've cleaned it up, I'd love to hear what they think.
Heck, I love to hear what EVERYONE things ALL THE TIME. (You wouldn't believe how often I check for activity!)
Till later,
~ Nonsanity
