I Cancelled A Guys Story On Fimfiction... · 12:18pm Nov 25th, 2013
Well, contrary to what I said. I'm planning on asking my friend if we can get this band shit together. I'll be asking him today at school, or tomorrow at least. Because we need to discuss and hammer the thing out.
Oh and three months off Coca-cola. 91 days to be exact.
But back to why I'm writing this:
I cancelled a guys story and I feel like shit, because despite how poorly it was made. It had potential, like real potential. I'm talking that his/hers idea was very unique in a sense, and my review on it completely dog-shitted all over it. I feel bad, but you know. What are you going to do, right?
My review was pretty funny. It was my first time reviewing, and I don't know. I think personally, I did an okay job. I pointed out the persons flaws and their screw-ups. But I can tell, (s)he was feeling disjointed about the whole ordeal...
Now that person told me that they cancelled their story. And I hate when that happens, do you hate it when someone does that? So much potential and ideas compressed in you're head. But they can never be fully explained in that way you wanted to explain it because of simple/pointless ideals stopping you from doing it.
Such a shame.
Well, here is the story and you can see my review and have a good day or night. It's 5:00 AM right now.
Oh and before you judge. I went to bed at 10:00 PM and woke up 2:30 AM. My issue with sleeping arrangements is that if I go to bed before 11:00, my body always (I don't know) forces itself to awake and suddenly I wake up at the usual time between 2:00-4:00 AM and I can't seem to sleep again. So I usually go on computer, think of story ideas, do homework, eat something or mediate. Now the last one is fairly new to me. I usually play some soft or heavy music and just think, while I lay on my bed or sit on my chair.
Anyway's I'm going now and here is the story:
The Elements Of Harmony: A Grimdark Fanfiction
Again and as always;
All the best.
Wow... just took a look at that story. I think your review was longer than the first chapter
But seriously don't beat yourself up, it's not like you told the guy to cancel the story. Either what he said was true, and he didn't really care about the story, or he couldn't handle the criticism, if so he shouldn't be writing. That may sound a little mean but it's true
On another note: It's good to hear that you're finally going to try to put that band together.
I understand how you feel after all you wanted to help improve a story that ended up being canceled!
Although some pieces of advice when reviewing:
1) To only use constructive criticism, unless you are reviewing a story to be approved for a database like Twilight's Library you should limit yourself to writing about the things that you could improve if you had full control of the story,
2) Express every form of criticism in the form of advice.
3) If your review is partially negative and so long I would recommend to send it through a PM rather than a comment.
Sorry you didn't had a good experience with your first review, but don't let that get you down you where only trying to help.
If you like I can send you one of my old review to see how is worded.( I tend to us statements like I think, you could, and I would like).
I know you value honesty; but think of the value of your review as an English paper you want it to be as successful as possible and to do that you should make it as easy to swallow for your author(Is generally not easy to take criticism, the least we can do is make it as easy as we can).
I thing that the best place to start reviewing and pre-reading stories is with the stories that are written for a particular story contest. Those authors wish to get their stories as good as possible, so they are generally open to hear all ideas, just don't be disappointed if they wish to not do something that you recommended.
About the sleep scheduled physical activity could help you relax so you can sleep longer at night; but only if you wish to. I had a similar sleeping scheduled for a while a few years ago; but I used that time before going to school to do my homework.
farewell and good luck with everything, I hope I was helpful somehow.
~Leonzilla
Basically what 1540098 said.
But you're getting the band together!
Tell me if you guys ever record what you play, I'd like to maybe give it a listen?
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Man you guys are all helpful. I'm really grateful and thrilled to have find nice people like you all. Damn. I just can't believe you guys have support in me. I mean, wow. That's really awesome of you guys. I really don't have words to describe it, because all in all - you guys are simply amazing.
Oh, and me and my friend are going to be talking about it, in the next few days. Right now, were in the process of discussing what genre's do we want to play!
Again, as always;
You have my support in whatever you guys plan to do and you have my respect.
Thanks, and all the best!
Don't worry about it. He just couldn't take his precious idea being shut down. Whenever I get criticism I don't get sad and scrap the story, I tip my stereotypical, non-existent, ten-gallon hat to them and make it worthy. Either way good luck with your music(not my genre but I'll still give y'all a shot when it happens). See ya around
First of all, I have to say: this story deserved to be canceled. Honestly, I didn't even need to read more than 1/4th of it to see that it was going to be awful.
But your review itself had a few problems.
This is not grammar, it's style. Grammar is related to the sentence structure, not to the actual words used in it. A telly sentence can be grammatically valid.
"Twilight stepped out of the library and she was annoyed" isn't wrong.
But "Door the after slammed Twilight of out the library bolted" is wrong, yet it would show things if it was grammatically correct.
Paragragh.
Try to focus on your writing, even when you're not writing a fic. It'll help you when you actually write a fic.
There actually was nothing wrong with this sentence. Although it was kinda overdone, Rainbow Dash would actually be very prone to exaggerate her feelings and express them through the way she talks. ?! indicates surprise and confusion, and the two ! simply mean that she says that louder and accentuates some words.
And finally, you use too much "fuck" and "shit". It's more of a question of style, but keep in mind that people are much more prone to take such a review as an insult when there's curse words everywhere.
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Oh yeah, the grammar. Well I was trying to follow the Equestria Critics group method. They said something about writing one review a month before submitting to them, but honestly. I can't do it. Reviews, first of all. Take to much time, and secondly. I'd rather leave it up to people who understand and have experience on reviewing people's work. Pretty much, you.
And hold on that thought. I'm still editing that story.
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Oh, hehe. The curses...
On the side note, I originally took you're review as an insult, after reading the whole thing. But I got over it.
So in my defense. Reviews varies on each person. Sure the over abundance of 'fuck' and 'shit' can be harsh. People always look at another persons opinion on their work as harsh or mean or insulting if it speaks negativity about it. Despite that the person who is writing it is in fact, just trying to help them. It still would come off on the author as negative in either, the smallest or biggest amount possible.
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That's because I'm an asshole. Reviewers aren't supposed to be that way if they're serious and professional. Clearly, I am not professional nor serious.
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Yeah I figured that out already.