Revisions

As I mentioned in the previous blog post, I had made revisions to the prologue of Dusk. Well now I've gone and redone chapter one. And I'm particularly proud of it this time around! The plot twist doesn't feel like it's out of left field anymore, and I've made "Twilight's" banter a little snappier, so as to match the picture of her I have in my head.

Why am I doing this, you ask? Well, half of it is because I'm procrastinating.

The other half is that I want to make a bid to submit it to EqD. But I feel like it needs more polishing before I do so.

So, please. If you haven't done so, re-read the prologue and Chapter One, and let me know what you think. I've thrown the original versions into Sta.sh links in the author's notes on each chapter so you can compare.