Does it work?

One of my biggest fears concerning my work is that, well, does it work? Does the writing flow? Or not? Do the sentences conjure imagery or nausea? So, I would be eternally grateful if those who read it could leave some feedback. I need to know what's wrong, so I can correct it, and what's right, to both drive away the constant nerves and prop up my fragile ego.

If you are at all reading the damn thing, you are officially a splendid person. Thank you.

Comments

[Doomande]

one thing I would like to say, don't ask yourself if it worked, but how well it worked.

you have a published story in here, so it does already work.

do you have readers and commenters? yes, well then did it work.

maybe can you do better, but all can do better after all. Kkat wrote god knows how many double and triple spaces in her chapthers, and buck is not a real name for a male horse.

so don't ask if you can, ask how it can be better