Clever Metaphor to go Here · 7:25pm Dec 22nd, 2012
Unforgotten by time,
worked at without pen,
hardly seen though the grim,
ten fingers working till the when,
But in sight there's no end.
Howdy. So, Christmas season is in full swing. ’Round where I live, though, there's not much in the way of snow. What have I been up to, you probably didn't ask? Well, between working like all hells to touch up “Kein Mitleid”, I've also been reforging the current sixth chapter. Once the sixth chapter is forged anew, all I've have to do is prowl back on through the muck of other chapters for errors and general ugliness.
Chapter Six, currently known as “Kane”, is getting a major plot overhaul, so when I update it, it'll be worth a second gander, I can safely say. It's up-and-coming working title is “The Girl with the Lyre Tattoo”.
Why that name? Well, aside from the obvious allusion, the chapter now revolves around Lyra, not the original Twilight. This change in the plot was caused by, in all seriousness, the flip of a coin. In the original run-through, whether or not Twilight offered Jericho her basement was based on a coin's flip. This time around, the flip sided against Jericho. As a result, the early progression of what happened and why it did so changed.
Luna won't be in Ponyville as Celestia keeping an eye on a potential Prussian threat; rather, she's there because she's as part of a diplomatic envoy for Chief Thunderhooves, since Chiefs Standing Bull and Crazy Horns has been stirring up a huge fuss on the western frontier. This action is a direct allegory to how the United States invited the Sioux Chief Red Cloud to tour the United States, which was a Yankee attempt to show him the raw power of their nation. When he returned, Chief Red Cloud was so awed by Yankee power that he knew that fighting them was suicide, so he oped to peacefully have he and his tribe put onto a reservation, and urged all other Sioux Indians to do so too. There's also hints that a certain steel-borne dreadnaught might be patrolling the Equestria shelf.
Other than that, Jericho himself really only has one really funny line, I think, which he says for no real reason other than to end the argument he's in. All in all, he's actually rather quiet in this chapter, considering how loud he usually is.
Work is currently at about 85%. I have to finish up the last scene, make sure everything makes sense and is plausible, spellcheck it all, then unleash those who edit upon it.
Well, that it for this brief update. Thine opinions, suggestions, and threats are always welcome in the comments section of yon. And who knows, maybe a brilliant idea from thy head will strike my fancy.
Girl with the Lyre Tattoo.
Did you name it after the fic?
640801
What fic? It was a reference to the book "Girl with the Dragon Tattoo". And it's currently just the working title, so it's subject to change.
640914 Ah. I was just wondering. There's actually a fic here titled "The Girl with the Lyre Tattoo," whose name is also a reference to "The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo."
That's some coinkidink, though.
640919
Sure is! Guess I'll have to swap it to something else, to avoid any sort of confusion. Oh well. It was only a working title after all.