City in Her Chair Rewrite · 4:49am Aug 8th, 2023
I almost doubled the word count so it is no longer just a bloated flash fic. It is now a proper short story with a much better flow! I added a lot of detail to the city, had Green tease them much more (including a short booty dance), and in general slowed the pace of the action way down. This time it is a FAR more exciting story and definitely worth reading if you haven't already or were a bit disappointed. Beware the first 5 or 6 paragraphs, and the last 2 or 3, are MOSTLY unchanged beyond simple grammar updates. The real meat is in the middle.
Hopefully this makes up for my shameful rush to toss this story to the public. Honestly, it really wasn't ready and should have gotten this much love from the beginning. I apologize for that.
In other news, I found myself a decent text-to-speech program that is absolutely wonderful for editing my stories. I really put it through its paces when rewriting "The City in Her Chair". Man that was a lot of work. I must have spent a week straight editing four hours a day! It was so tedious. Getting it right was a nightmare and I couldn't stop second-guessing my choice of words for every single sentence. If this isn't the most perfectly written thing I've ever produced I'd be shocked.
Compulsive perfectionism really is a curse. But all I did was follow a simple personal rule: "If I can't read it one time all the way through without finding one thing I should correct, I don't publish." Is that a good policy? It sounds fair to me. Oh well. Thank you for reading my stories and I hope you enjoy them!
Random factoid:
As a flash fic ~700 words
First Release ~1500 words
Rewrite ~2500 words
