Mistress's Downfall is live!

Hello everyone! I am very pleased to announce that my first ever MLP fan-fic has finally gotten through moderation and is now live!
I would like to say, I am VERY open to re-writing parts of it if a majority of readers think it needs it.
I am primarily an animator and game maker, and so I am not really used to exclusively using text to tell a story.
Please feel free to criticize my work, but also please remember that I am fairly new to the fan-fic scene.

I should also clarify that 'Mistress' and most of the other OC's that appear in my story are mine, meaning I did not steal them or use them without permission.

I also understand that this story will likely not be for everyone, since it involves potentially OOC moments for a few MLP characters, and technically, they aren't the 'real' versions of said characters, but rather Mistress's interpretation of them.

I only ask that you at least give me a chance^^