A long forgotten element has been brought back, but for better or for worse?
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Good story. Keep up the good work.
Where is my cup? Ah, here it is!
CHANGE PLACES!
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Low and behold, the Great Wall of Text. Very nice text but still holy hell.
Squeeeeree. You updated!!!
Shit's about to go down it seems.
-yawns deeply- finally after nearly three hours, I'm done. I don't care what time it is, when I see a chapter from you, I read it. No exceptions. And as per usual, your writing was spectacular, there were a few times that I was tearing up badly (mainly whenever I read the words "so far away" as it reminded me constantly of the song "so far away" by avenged sevenfold), but strangely my tears never spilled over once this chapter. It was immense turmoil reading it, (and I'm sure writing it was the same) with such a cliff like this I'm going to have to force myself to be patient for the next chapter. Oh well, I guess that's what I get for loving a long read XD. Keep up your spectacular and utterly amazing work, I will be patient for the next release and will comment on that one when it comes out too.
Excellent work on this chapter, dude. Nothing is standing out as usual... Although, you did misspell "finish" at Twilight's POV. I have a sneaky suspicion about Fluttershy's condition... but I'll wait until my assumptions are confirmed in the next few chapters.
I know this is completely off topic, but here's a man that is passionate about America. I know you don't exactly share the same pride and Love for the United States, but this guy sings country music for the people who have loved-ones out on the battlefield. Here's two of them. One is the complete version of the song I love and the second one surprising a soldier's wife at a concert.
I nearly died when I saw that you updated. Loving the Fact that Fluttershy is pregnant, but I'm surprised the baby in the dream wasn't an anthro-style baby, y'know, genetics and shit. But dreams are dreams, right?
Amazing chapter, Humanity. It took me nearly 2 hours to read, and I adore every word. I'm glad to see that James is still alive, and Fluttershy being pregnant is quite the cliffhanger for the next chapter. Can't wait to read more!
All the perspective changes this chapter were confusing. It was hard to tell who was narrating in each part. Maybe put the narrator's name when it changes to them?
Well... I guess it's analysis time... I feel the need to analyze what's happening with James, particularly with what Luna found. As I've stated before, the form he entered during battle was a sort of Dark Mode. A Dark Mode will often manifest itself in your psyche as your innermost demon, like Grima for myself. I believe his inner darkness has achieved a sort of sentience and is what is manipulating his mind.
Also, Flutters is pregnant. I noticed the moment you brought up morning sickness.
I honestly got a little creeped out at the "But he hasn’t said anything to me at all. All he’s been doing is…..glaring at me." Perhaps its all those horror movies and what not but that just made the hairs on the back of my neck stand up. As always I cant wait for next chapter. So many revelations and cliffhangers await.
Bookmarks? How could anyone not read it whole in one breath? ... That waiting for new chapter tho... unbearable...
anyway...why do I have that feeling that Discord have something to do with that dream? Like making it too good for him to wake up?
and why do I think the one who woke up gonna be Discord?
a new chapter give me a bit to stop jumping around the room.------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ ok I think I am calmed down a bit time to start reading.
wow over 43k words and this is a grate chapter. the pane every one is going threw and for fluttershy to find out she is caring her beloved's foal just amassing.
now the big question now that James is awake is he still James?
will he be able to forgive every one or should I say will he forgive him self.??
your long time fouler
harts fire.
PS I must thank you agene for showing me this site xd-385
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I don't think its Discord. I have a feeling that James is now host to 2 personalities, his and Dark James.
This coma might be a way for his mind to fight the influence of Dark James off.
I really hope things don't go back to being fine and dandy too quick.
I really hope James leaves Equestria for a while to rediscover himself or something, perhaps out of hate to begin with.
Also, fuck celestia. She acting like James is too broken to be of use anymore and is considering throwing him back to where she got him from.
Ps. Wasn't that chapter that was split into two like 70k words long?
Okay, NOW I'm worried for them all, especially James...
PS: Is it me, or did it felt like NM wanted to steal both James and his daughter away from Fluttershy? Sorry if it sounds too stupid.
5338685 Yes, it was. Although the bookmark function wasn't working properly at the time, so I decided to throw the readers a bone that once while hoping the function would've been fixed by the time I uploaded another large chapter.
5336810 Thanks. It was a bit of a challenge for me. May I ask which of the ten days in it stood out to you?
5338763 No, it was just both jealousy and adoration. It's no secret how Nightmare Moon feels towards him, but can anyone help finding Fluttershy's kid cute?
Thats one heck of a chapter, what with ameoba Fluttershy.
To me, between the dreams and violent barrier of James, the way the dreams are seen, the way all his freinds and aquaintances are responding. Discord is an absolue Master <Who?> at totally screwing with peoples minds.
what better way to destroy your enemies, than to make them destroy themselves in guilting at their success.
Pyrra, meet Medina (?)
Think about it. He just took out Pinkie, without her noticing whats going on.
5339032 I guess. But I don't think I can handle that much cuteness, it just...more to the point it curing my Uh... Insanity? I don't know, I'll end up running away, screaming at the top of my lungs and bashing my head against a rock.
But I can't help feel like something is going to happen. Something that James would never commit doing, the outcome is losing it all for real this time and won't be getting it back for the rest of forever, you know.
5339041 Not entirely certain what you meant by that last line. You mean with her "hearing" James during that game of chess?
Holy hell... I'm genuinely amazed at the 10K plus update. Flutters is with foal and Scoot is looking to be a big sister. And now he wakes... What's going on with his new attitude? Is it even him? I look forward to finding out.
5337815 probably... but I would like if Disco was little more involved... well, but its not me who is writing the story so... time will show, what dark shadow is lurking around
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All of them did, I can't really say that one stood out to me more than the others, there were certainly varying levels of emotion from day to day, because there are ponies like Scootaloo, Fluttershy, Rarity, Nightmare and Rainbow, some of whom almost need him in their lives, whilst others do need him in their lives and rely on him to be there in their lives. almost like he brings a balance to them that they feel they desperately need. at least, that's what I feel. but even so, it doesn't make the others any less important, and doesn't mean the others rely on him any less, I mean, Pinkie as we saw, is effectively going down the dark spiral, driving herself lower because she feels responsible for his condition and is punishing herself because she cannot hear him forgive her or accept her apology.
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Discord id keeping James in a coma, because his freinds are tearing themselves apart beleiveing its Their fault. Pinkie, despite scene jumping, hasnt jumped into his James dreams, bypassing Discords barrier, or more simply, hasnt read the script.
5339513 I'm pretty sure Pinkie's got limits. She may also be refraining from reading the script because she's afraid of finding that he would die.
If someone dear to you was going to die soon, would you want to know when or choose not to know and keep hoping that he will live? Reading the script could become Pandora's Box to her.
5338890 I think james being awake is only going to take a turn for the worst. Now don't get me wrong I liked this chapter, but are things EVER going to be fine? The fact that james was angry when he woke up makes me think that there is going to be even more bad things happening in the next few chapters. I hope things go back to normal soon... ...so much drama!
5339747 I'm looking forward to things getting back to normal too. Got some fun chapters in the pipeline, but the Mortal Chaos arc is just simply the darkest part of the story.
Gpop
good god that was long i loved it
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Even if this event isnt according to Discords plan, he surely will be making good use of it.
As for the second part, I decline to answer to protect your psychological stability.
I wonder if the evil dream-cloud thing is Chrysalis trying to control his mind...
His tallent is literally 'love' and he doesn't naturally have magic.
This cant end well...
The place looks real and the eyes are flashing?
…Chrysalis, you bastard. Well, crap.
*Casual hint towards Fluttershy being pregnant*
*Hopes she is*
*Wanted James to be in a coma for 3 years, so when he wakes up, suddenly foal*
5373752 Not sure. At this rate, I doubt Equestrian Publications are ever going to give The Lost Element a chance. I may end up resorting to putting them up on Lulu as suggested by an earlier reader, though the price is unknown right now.
Guys, can someone give me a couple of nice, hot-flavored spoilers? Like what are the main shippings and what is the main storyline? You know, just give me the most interesting plot moments to advertise the story, I would really appreciate this.
Cos reading a story of this size just to realize that I don't like its premise would be a huge disappointment and a waste of time =\
5455447 I'm not sure if I'm the best person to answer this question, but I'll try.
A recurring theme is a building romance between Fluttershy and the human protagonist, who is written as closely to being a real person as possible while not necessarily a person every other person can relate to. Juicier aspects include an appearance of the setting and characters of the oft forgotten Story of the Blanks, an emotional and action packed return of Nightmare Moon, and an extremely dark reversal of events in the third volume (the one currently underway) with the return of Discord as the chapter Mortal Chaos even goes so far as to make the reader wonder who the actual villain is. There are numerous little hints that pop up at times hinting at a big event further down the road, and one reviewer from offsite claims the story "delivers in spades on the feels".
While I personally feel the first volume could have been done better in hindsight, I feel the following volumes make up for it.
5455447 Actually, if you want input from an outside source, I found this on a forum under "Your top 5 favorite MLP fanfics?" with The Lost Element ranking at #2 for the poster.
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Hm, that guy can write good descriptions... Though I can't help but wonder if the comedy in this story is so good, then why don't you have it in the tags?
Sadly I am kinda put off by the main pony character of this fanfic... you see, I've been having issues with Fluttershy and her over-the-top confidence and importance after reading several fanfictions not too long ago. If I read something where she is used as a trump card or as a Mary Sue that acts not-so-timid and causes major effect on the majority of important events I just flip the table. I dunno why but it happens... And I have a suspicion that that's exactly what she'll be doing here. It is not as bad as if you were using Rarity-bi*ch or Derpy-better-than-everypony-else-since-she's-so-special instead, but it's still a major factor so I'll see when and if I get down to this story. Sorry if I disappointed you but please do keep in mind that it has nothing to do with your writing skills. It's just that not every premise clicks well with me. Gotta keep searching on =)
P.S. Why can't everyone use Rainbow Dash and Twilight Sparkle as main ponies? XD
And why Sci-Fi is the least popular genre (data from a survey)? It's pretty much the only thing I enjoy... That's not fair folks =/
P.P.S. Yes, I know that what I said above is stupid, but if it were to become true my life on this website would become so much better.
5457934 I would have that tag used, but Tragedy and Comedy cannot be used together. Though maybe I should adjust that.
5457934 Actually, comedy and tragedy can be set. It's sad and comedy that aren't allowed to mix. Kinda pointless, if you ask me. Life isn't constant comedy or sorrow. There will always be fair amounts of both.
Though to be fair, the romance between the protagonist and Fluttershy isn't a constant focus. The story only occasionally has it as a main point with all six members of the mane six having just as much importance and presence in the story. Much like the show and life in general, it goes in lots of different directions and focuses on various events, such as Nightmare Night, the Grand Galloping Gala, a surprise visit from Trixie, or even just a day of fun with friends along with occasional surprise appearances from fandom favorites like Doctor Hooves and Button Mash. I'm especially looking forward to writing a Power Ponies themed chapter titled Project H, as well as Maud Pie in A Stick in the Maud, and... Well, here's a joke I came up with to give you a hint.
Six mares walk into the library. Six stallions walk out. Before the mares went in, there were no stallions. What does that mean?
Punchline: Twilight was trying something weird today.
5457934 Also, no worries about Fluttershy becoming, as you say, a trump card or Mary Sue. I go to great lengths to keep every character in the story as close to canon personality as possible. She certainly is important, though no more important than the rest of the Mane Six. The equality between them in this story is just as important as it was in the show once upon a time and it is made very clear every now and then. As one reviewer put it;
The characters were wonderfully relateable and believable in the show, and I go to great lengths to reproduce it in my writings.
4745731 Now, I know that we buried this discussion quite a while ago and while I have accepted your apology, I still am not willing to unblock you. However, I never forgot about your responses and clear obsession with military might being the "proof" of superiority. This is not directed to just you, but to everyone with that type of mindset. It is not a healthy mindset and now I will explain why.
My my I was thinking we'd be ending the chapter still comatose, that was a pleasant surprise. Now to begin the long, arduous road of recovery and repair. Oh what will I do with myself until the next update!?
I'll figure something out. Great work as usual bud, looking forward to the next installment.
5522998 And what about griffons??
5520128 Thanks. Nothing wrong with being honest.
5554922 You can just google it:
>Fimfiction living in equestria<
Otherwise >click here<
This reminds me, there was another story I read, where the human actually explained to Diamond Tiara that being a bully is bad, as in actually make her realize why it's so bad, and what consequences that would have for her reputation throughout her life.
That shocked her into agreeing with him not to bully anyone ever again.
It was in a very good way how he explained it to her, asking her questions on self reflection while leading her to the conclusions, but sadly I forgot the name of the story.
But even in "Living in equestria" the human chose a much better and mostly PEACEFUL way to resolve the conflict with Diamond Tiara.
The human in the lost element though, did no such thing, instead he pushed her down with his heel, abused a child with his superior strength in other words, 'erased' her mark while touching her flanks, and threatened not to give it back if she doesn't learn.
Is that how you're supposed to treat a child? Nope!
Is that how you resolve conflict peacefully? Nope!
Would the other elements and Celestia, who is extremely protective of her subjects, ever agree with him to treat a little filly like that? Not in Tartarus! Still, they support him for doing so, even the gentle 'good with kids' Fluttershy.
And then...
Despite doing something so very wrong here, he gets a cutie mark for 'resolving conflicts peacefully'.
Sorry to say, but that is simply illogical and untrue, it destroys the credibility of this story.
Oh my god you actually made me lose a few tears. This is a first dood. I never cry when I rad! I tear up at parts but I never cry!
What are you doing to me man!!? Staph! I dun Liak it! I don't!!!!!
I feel really stupid because I might have looked here... XD