A long forgotten element has been brought back, but for better or for worse?
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I love this story. Are you going to do anything with Tempest?
10840586
Not until the sequel.
10840593
Okay
I hope they pick up Gallus on the way home, it's not right that these two get somewhere safe to live, and he is stuck out here.
With Ocellus, that only leaves Yona left out of the Young Six who have yet to make at least a passing appearance.
This was a good chapter rife with cute love bug. It seems like until she gets more comfortable he's just going to have a changeling attached to his hip. It's also pretty obvious to see why Chrysalis has such big plans for him, plans that will probably grow more elaborate if she ever catches wind that he can show mercy to her kind. Speaking of which, having a friendly changeling around would be extremely handy for when something eventually happens with them.
Now he just needs to find Thorax again and have them hug each other.
I wonder how you'll be characterizing Chrysalis, and how James will react/interact with her, considering he arrived after the attempted invasion. Definitely looking forward to that whenever it comes.
Can't wait to see how Twilight and friends are going to react to James becoming so friendly with a changeling, and what they'll think about her in particular!
10840586
Actually, there is something on his fanfiction account, but I'm not sure if it's Canon to this or not.
10842035
He already responded, I'm ignoring this
10842119
Eh.
10842119
Heβs not wrong.
10842181
How did I never know about this
10842181
Read it. Loved it.
10847245
Glad you like it
10842181
I always loved the effort you put into making this great story with such summary and literature behind it and I still keep coming back for it just because I love it and that's why I believe that is why I keep coming back to Fimfiction to read and relax and enjoy this amazing insurmountable fantasy novel of a human protagonist About the human soul itself which inspires me to move forward I thank you πβ€ππ
10851553
Thank you. I hope I donβt disappoint.
The element of inspiration was originally planned to be the sixth element but was replaced by generosity
is it possible if you could tell me when the next chapter is coming out?
10861357
Probably this week.
10861365
nice
(Sorry, I wrote this within the night I first saw it, which was the same night you posted it, if I recall right. Hence why some of my wording is the way it is, since I just noticed you say you might upload a new one this week.)
Wow... just. Wow! I have been abuzz with thinking: "Is he going to introduce Ocellus at some point in this story? Since he's already done Smolder, Silverstream, and a chance encounter with Gallus; PLUS a reference to Sandbar on the honeymoon after marrying Fluttershy, even if I didn't get why like that, but maybe he didn't like him as much as the others in the Student Six." (Or along the lines of certain details that you've changed from the movie/series, like the hippogriffs apparently having never been seaponies, and Skystar not being related to Terramar/Silverstream, since unless you forgot or never saw certain eps, Sandbar is from Ponyville even if I get to you maybe, it might seem odd that he was only introduced after seven seasons in the eighth.) And despite wondering if/when you'd do the yaks/Yona (if that is planned even, at least for a chance meeting), I didn't expect Ocellus during this war part! Maybe at some point during/closer to the whole arc with Chrysalis that has yet to happen, but not now! If not after, since we never had her pre-transformation appearance shown in the series, even if she would look more or less like every other Changeling.
This first experience (and the fact that she's apparently already of consenting age), makes me think that he's definitely going to have Ocellus to contend with as another person for his heart, especially once she probably learns the details of James' love life and his family/harem of lovers. And I'm curious of what happens when Ember might pop in next and discover Ocellus in his room (especially wondering if on the first encounter or some other point, she's changed into that dragon form and instead of Smolder, assumes she was the dragon he asked about for dragon courtship, but I doubt that'd happen before Ocellus would change back to straighten it out), if that'll be before other people in the camp learn of her there. Not sure how much time has passed in-story since Ember's last chapter, but feel like she should've been back by now, unless it's cause of the militia moving each day, if they're still doing so by the sounds of it. Or cause the volunteers are giving a hard time with the compensation that Celestia thought of for them, if not more trying to join in cause of that, as I've assumed would happen.
One minor nitpick of what I did read, though: James/you doesn't mention the color of Ocellus' eyes in her dragon form at her first appearance until a later point, when you're waking up with her the next morning. I just bring it up cause I feel like it'd be worth mentioning right away, just cause they are a different color than her natural shade of blue, when it comes to the iris versus being the same as the blue they are in her normal form, unless it was implied to somehow not have been noticed right away. But it's up to you, if going to fix/add that at that point or not. Even if re-reading some of your older Pokemon works in recent weeks, you did seem to sort of not mention details/things like that right away. And anyone who watched that season would know about Ocellus' dragon form that doesn't seem to be a copy of any dragon that was in MLP, unless they didn't watch it. And I had always thought her scales' color as a dragon was more brown-ish versus gold... even if you did reference it as a "dull sandy gold" in that paragraph.
You've been cranking these out lately, keep it up! Unless the next one intends to be a lot longer, if the return of Ember/her dragon militia volunteers is at hand then. And/or I'd definitely love to learn more about some of the other things going on around camp, like with Sunset Shimmer or other things previously discussed.
10861856
Next chapter just got put up, actually.
Oh my word, this whole chapter with Ocellus..... hnnnnng, the cute, it's too much. I have a major soft spot for the lil love bugs!
This is absolutely adorable! And you handled Armours disgust of changelings really well too! The tension levels in the room were so realistic!