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Man....just...what the hell is going on...
I feel the end of an era nearing... Great chapter and great writing as always! I highly anticipate the next chapter.
5620415 If you want a slight hint, I chose the song featured near the end of the previous chapter for that spot because its lyrics carries some heavy relevance. I'll let you put the pieces together from there.
5620419 Maybe the end of this arc's main event. But the end of the story?
I seem to recall titling this volume Mortal Chaos, not Endgame.
Damnit Chrysalis, go away.
I imagine it's the self-loathing and whatever Chrysalis is doing to him that's blinding him to the hypocrisy of thinking it's understandable to not be able to forgive Fluttershy and the others for what they did when they were mentally and emotionally compromised, but they've forgiven him for what he did while mentally and emotionally compromised.
5620446 Never really thought about that to be fair. Mostly just caught up in the emotions of the story...
Get Dr.House he will figure out what's wrong with James in less than 3 days
5620456 It works a bit differently depending on who it was directed to. What they did was towards him while, as you put it, being emotionally and mentally compromised, while what he did while emotionally and mentally compromised was towards Discord and not them, which was a massive backfire on Discord's part. He did not wrong them, but they wronged him. And those who have suffered similar pain before will not be as quick to lower their guard to insure they are not hurt the same way twice. I speak from experience on this. But as this whole debate over this topic already really boiled over in the comments back during Mortal Chaos, I'm not willing to poke the embers again and will leave it at that.
Although I do have to say I find it amusing how many people have kept coming to me claiming it's Chrysalis doing all the mind games.
A new chapter so soon?
COOL.
What can I say other then BROVO you are the pony
Keep it up I am so looking forward to where this go's from here
have 5 hearts on me
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Unless you're creating a brand new villain or bringing someone from G1... this really only fits her MO. Sombra's just straight up dead, or if he hasn't happened yet (I don't remember) he's still locked away with the Empire. Tirek gains nothing from sliding a human into the Matrix, and I'm not sure he could while locked up in Pony Hell and drained of magic.
This is mind-and-emotion-twisty magic at work here, and with Discord dead and this being more grimdark than either whimsical or domineeringly cruel and sadistic like Discord, the only known being who messes with minds and emotions left is Chrysalis, who has already taken an interest in him before the whole Discord business. If anyone would want to go through the trouble of setting up a quasi-real dream world that evokes and provokes emotions in someone, I imagine it would be her. She'd be the only one with something to gain there, and the inclination.
As for personal experience, yes, so have I. Thus why I said it must be the mental occlusion and self-loathing of his situation preventing him from using his reasonable mind to outweigh his emotions. And this chapter and the last one show that his emotions are being -kept- unruly, by some other effect or outside force. Which again only suggests Chrysalis to me. And kind of why I want to put a boot to her ass. Sally forth, Humanity, and write on. If my suspicions are true there's going to be an interesting confrontation at the end of this arc.
Hm, though I suppose it could be some sort of effect of the Element of Humanity going haywire, maybe. I know some fanon tends to project the Elements as being at least semi-sentient.
I really hope James doesn't die! You are really toying with my emotions right now, Humanity! It's driving me crazy!
5620599 Heheh, toying indeed.
May I ask what stood out most in this chapter to you? I've been on a roll lately and have been working hard to get these out.
5620586 Man, I am really pulling everyone around by the nose here. No one can guess what I'm up to. No one!
5620572 Thank you. Was there a part that stood out most to you?
OK, I know I'm no-one to decide on how this story progresses, but please don't kill James. This story has come to far to end so tragically. I mean, this is the greatest thing I have ever read AND it's the 7th longest fanfic on the whole site. Does anyone else really want it to end like that? Now I'm sounding completely melodramatic, aren't I?
Damn, it seems anything that is with the four of the six mane seem to just send him into overdrive. Truthfully though I'm Surpised he hasn't made a thought to think fluttershy cheated to have the kid (even though we know she wouldn't) but in his mind right now , I'm sure he would say anything.
I'm hoping all shall go well for him as many had said I would hate to see him go like this, to 'best' discord only to be ended like this. I and many await the next part of this story.
Wait, why is everyone suspecting Chrysalis to be the culprit of his conditions? I highly doubt that, and last time I checked, she warned Twi about keeping James safe and alive. Plus, this isn't her kind of style if it means killing off her most powerful food source.
Remember folks, she needs him! That means he has to stay alive, in order for her to gain power from feeding off his emotions!
Obviously.... James is possessed, a host of something far more worser. So he's expendable to whatever this parasite is. I mean, who's to say nothing happens when the gem goes from light to darkness? He could have been more vulnerable to something that can't be seen through normal means in the physical realm.
Emotional instability is a bitch. Also, calling it now; chaos poisoning.
I also like the term emotional entropy.
But seriously, if you're at all empathic and you go through emotional instability like this you can say good bye to the next few days. it feels like your brain is boiling and your chest is being torn apart 24 7. Gets even worse if you're a lucid dreamer. The nightmares you get are soul crushing.
You know James, if you were on Earth with its advanced technology that's far greater compared to Equestria, maybe they'd find a cure for you that Magic couldn't. But since you threw your own home world, species and family under the bus...well, that's just too damn bad. I'm guessing you might want some high tech medicine that Earth could provide now. Everyone looooves being out in the great outdoors and among the "natural" people until they get real sick and need antibiotics and penicillin and heavy duty medication.
Just a theory, does James have chaos magic now from ingesting (parts of) discord, possibly temporary?
Maybe uncontrolled and running rampant throughout his body or running of his emotions or sub-conscious?
He wants to be somewhere where the discord events didn't happen, chaos magic make a virtual dreamworld for him. He wants to go back after waking up or just leave the pain, chaos magic slowly kills him trying to push him back into a coma or death. he doesn't want to deal with the ponies who he fells betrayed by or remember the event. chaos magic causes him pain and to pass out when anything involving them turns up.
Just my thoughts on the matter and where i think the possibly is currently heading to/at now.
5620700 ooeck!
MORE PLEASE!
An amazing plot twist for this story would be a battered chrysalis returns and hears of James' weakness and hopes to take him away for her to recuperate, but when she sees him in the state he is, she recognizes what his body and mind are going through, and helps him through it under the guise of a pony that's new to ponyville, because she went through something similar. . . just spitballin' here
I think I understand now. This is a Shadow Veil. When someone activates their Dark Mode for the first time, they're left open to malignant outside forces who can slip in and corrupt that person's inner dark elemental energy. This often happens, but I've never seen a case like this...
5621164 That's a pretty good theory.
Maybe Discord turned into one of those pissed-off haunt-ey ghosts! I'm remided of the show 'Supernatural'. Call in the Winchesters!
5621125 Wow, that's the most pessimistic and biased reply I've seen in quite a while.
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Yes, I suppose Equestria really must be a backwater world when they have
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X-ray machines
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Hospital beds wired into a mainframe
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Localized intercom systems
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Full-body casts
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Electrical wiring
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Portable electrical devices and communication systems tied into a location's intercom system
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And even psychological therapy.
And yes, this is all being shown in backwater little Ponyville where everyone are a bunch of hicks.
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Now, I normally don't get that snippy with any criticism that has anything to do with my views on the sorry and declining state of Earth right now, but even by the standards of those blinded by varying forms of ideology and patriotism I've seen, this was really really weak. Equestria clearly has some pretty modern medical gear and likely a strong grasp on the workings of medicine. Even Zecora, who prefers to do things the low-tech way, is able to use herbs to develop a tonic that even restores broken teeth, which is a part of the body that cannot be regained when lost.
If James were back on Earth, he'd actually be worse off. Why? Because it is quite clear that something bordering on supernatural has afflicted him. Anyone who was actually reading this chapter can see that. The people of Earth generally don't believe in the supernatural and would instantly dismiss such a notion, especially in the field of medicine. While technology may take a backseat to magic in Equestria, that may be for the best as magic has very few defined limits and can do things that Earth's best medical technology could not hope to match without years and maybe even decades of development. Just because there isn't lots of beeping gadgets and lights everywhere doesn't mean Equestria's doctors are not capable. And with magic combined with medical technology, who knows what they can do that Earth's best doctor's can't?
So yeah. Equestria is a world without modern medicine, especially in Ponyville, that cannot hold a candle to Earth?
Don't make me laugh. The jingoists and the haters always have the most hilarious stuff to say.
5620936 Actually, it's currently ranked at #10 right now. But thanks. May I ask what parts really drew you in?
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This from a misanthrope who tossed all of Earth under the bus and acts like EQUESTRIA is a perfect place with no strife, conflict or anything like that when there are hydras, creatures that turn you to stone, psychotic dictators who can mindrape you, beings who can take on your appearance and steal your life, petty noblemen, you get the idea.
A normal person on the edge of Death would at least think about their family. James doesn't seem to care one iota. And don't tell me "oh, but Earth is so violent when compared to Equestria". IN EQUESTRIA, THE SPIDERS CAN GIVE YOU FLOWERS. A third of the population can fly and another third can no do super strength and a final third can do MAGIC. And they've had a thousand years of peace under a benevolent and near all powerful dictator. They have essentially had it EASY compared to Earth, where everything tries to kill you. Your success doesn't matter if you don't struggle for it. Think of Equestria as someone who's in AA, and who says he's been clean and beer free for a hundred days.
"Wow!" Earth, a recovering alcoholic says, "You had a real bad problem, huh?"
"Nope! Never touched the stuff, actually."
So his success doesn't mean anything. If you never had that many problems to begin with, your accomplishments don't mean as much as those who had to overcome worse odds!
5621754 I know I already asked this, but are you sure this is not the end of the story? It looks like its getting close. Again I'm sorry for asking again.
Amazing the chapter is so emotional with the dark and gloom feeling to it. I really enjoyed the psychological harm and emotional pain that james is going through right now as it signifies a really good status of his mental states showing something he went through is not easy for him to encounter and not easy to overcome. I wonder who the two beings are that are going to help James from this dilema. Also the 2 weeks before death show that this part won't be extended too long and we will soon see what happens to James and his love for flutershy and his health. Amazing chapter and I look forward to the next one when it comes out.
5621878 it's getting close to the current arc's main focus, but the story itself is far from over.
5621862 I'm taking that "misanthrope" tag as a compliment. Thank you kindly.
Well, sure. That may true. But at least those are rarities compared to a world where murder, prejudice, sexism, rape cultures, organized crime, etc are daily routine, dictatorships are everywhere in developing countries where the strongest nations in the world do nothing to stop them, child slavery and exploitation is on the rise, genocides have resulted in millions upon millions of deaths for reasons as base as ethnicity or even religion, wars are being fought constantly for some of the dumbest reasons, global environmental degradation brought on by the world just not caring to stop their misuse, many animals becoming extinct by hunting and habitat loss brought on by the homo sapiens master race, and so on and so on and so on. And don't even get me started on the terrorist groups that keep springing up like a fungus because the ones with the power to prevent them keep using the Lysol too late. Cry me a river.
And true, thoughts of family would be common for a dying man. But where has his family been over the last year? Way back on Earth light years away with no way to easily stay in touch. After extensive amount of time away from people you know, you tend to not think about them as often if they have no bearing or presence in your life. That does not mean they are forgotten though. Essentially, James has two families now. The family he has on Earth and his extended family in Equestria, the world he now lives in and will likely continue to live in for the rest of his life. Naturally, his current "family" has a much stronger presence in his life and he will think about them first as a result. It's how the mind works. Also, I find it hilarious you did not even try to counter my rebuttal to your claims on a false lack of modern medicine in Equestria. Missed that episode?
And yeah, did you read the description under this story's title? That events in Season 3 and onward may be uncanon? Yeah, there's a reason for that. Season 3 was where the series started to weaken and Season 4 only added more problems. I mean, yeah. Spiders that give out flowers? That's just silly. How would they pluck them? The show isn't what it once was. And yes, perhaps Equestria does have it easy by comparison. But one can only imagine why, right? The wise guidance of immortal beings who have not let their power corrupt them, a much more pleasant disposition possibly as a result of being herbivores, and relying more on magic than the potentially destructive and environment-destroying technology that Earth has is definitely a plus. And before you forget, Equestria is fictional. Would it be awesome if it did exist? Hell yes. Would it be a better place to live in instead of our world? By comparison, yes. It's certainly not perfect, but it's far better than Earth. And it certainly helps that when a significant crisis does arise, the world's leaders don't sit around wasting time discussing politics. They just get in there and deal with it. Just look at Sombra and Nightmare Moon. They didn't stay in power for very long at all.
Sure, lots of people on Earth have had to endure great trials to reach success. But Earth is a cruel world, sadly. And just because that's how things are there does not mean that all other worlds, fictional or otherwise, have to conform to be like that. Things in Equestria do not have to work the same way as our world and if you don't like that, it's your problem and not mine.
Seriously, these discussions are getting old. Very old. I've been putting up with this crap over and over pretty much since day one and I'm sure this won't be the last. And I don't need you repeating yourself. The comments section of this story is not a place for this. If you really want to complain about what you perceive to be misanthropy and your obsession with Earth's current standards, take it to the forums of the Human's Aren't Bastards and Humans are Superior groups.
So, it's been fun, but this is goodbye. And to all who still don't like me being honest here....
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And if being honest about these things makes me a misanthrope, so be it. I'd rather be a misanthrope than some other things.
5621754 OK, I'll rephrase this; If James dies, so does my reason to continue reading.
5622601 OK then. I could tell you what his ultimate fate is here, but it'll be better to keep you guessing.
5622619 No, don't tell me. That could be even worse.
That note was nasty. The usual thing is trigger command of post hypnotic suggestion. After all, its been prooven the mind can physically break the body. Or heal it. Doesnt help when theres someone else there wanting revenge.
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Sure humans do terrible stuff.
And yet we've got over 7 billion people on the planet. See, all that stuff you mentioned is the exception. Not the rule. People like Superman. Jesus. MLK. Not Lex Luthor and Kim Jong Il and Satan.
5623276 I'm amazed you're still following this story. I thought you jumped ship after A Day with a Derp.
5621125 You know, I would do the same thing James has done. I would leave Earth behind for a place like Equestria. Wouldn't have to hear/read about political bullshit, endless wars, mass murders, etc etc.
And I already know what you would tell me. That if I hated Earth so much, to just pack up and leave. Well, let me be the first to say that if I ever could, I would.
There was a lot I like, but I thank the best parts where between ranbow, twilight, and the CMC's.
I really like when u had her read about his dream and how she fell for him even more then she all ready had.
I don't know how to feel on Fluttershy thow I can understand why she did it but for some reason it just doesn't fit her maybe that's why it sticks out so well and why im mixed on it
Holy fuck on a stick. This is getting brutally awesome.
Keep up this magnificent fucked up trauma coming
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Just because your views are personally reprehensible to me it doesn't mean I don't feel pity for James.
the suspense is killing me I must know what happens next I MUST KNOW MOAR
Welp, I'm going on a limb to say that he's slowly dying of a "broken heart" (legit, it can happen), otherwise, you sir are evil, very evil. I love you and hate you at the same time. keep up the amazing work and I'll be waiting with bated breath and hugging my plushies (my profile picture).
You know, I was thinking about giving up on this story last summer because it seemed like all the chapters coming out were fluff, and then things got intense. Great job on the last few chapters, and I look forward to where this story is headed.
5621051 I'm curious to hear more of this entropy you speak of. Almost sounds supernatural.
5629568 Um... Yes.
5629393 Entropy has three rather unique meanings, one of them being a bit of an offshoot of the first. The first meaning is a physics definition, "Entropy is a thermodynamic quantity representing the unavailability of a system's thermal energy for conversion into mechanical work, often interpreted as the degree of disorder or randomness in the system." In short, when a system turns energy in to something other then what you want it to be used for, that is entropic energy.
The second definition is much more simple, Entropy is also a lack of order or predictability. In other words, a gradual decline in to chaos.
The third and final definition, the one I'm using in this case, and the offshoot definition of the first, is that Entropy is the loss of energy in a system. This third definition is actually a metaphysical variant as it mostly applies to magical, emotional, and spiritual systems.
Used in the confines of this story, emotional entropy is the loss of emotional energy; death because you lose the will to live.
5629985 That is EXACTLY what is going on here. Bravo.