This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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I hope Luna removes the trackers on them after this, they've earned it fantastic chapter fantastic arc
I wonder if Crimson will remmeber what prey talked about, maybe he will, and not talk about it cause of mutual respect, or maybe he wont
Wow, well I wonder if discord has happened yet?
spontaneous kaiju battles are tight!
This is one of my favorite chapter's by far, the action was nice and very well done, but the conversations and mini-reflections that prey have near the end of the chapter are fantastic.
I'm very excited for the next arc to begin, if it has half the quality that this one did I'm sure it'll be great
warlock finds out that prey was the bigger monster hiding in sheep clothing
great arc cant wait to see them pick up the pieces from this
Hmmm, was wondering what Prey was thinking about when his regret was mentioned previously, I suppose feeding around 40 Ponies, donkeys etc. To his scaly friend explains that.
Some great development for Prey I figure with seeing himself in the horrible Warlock. Maybe something will come of it, probably...
And personally I hope that Prey tell the surviving members {fingers crossed for Gloom an Scenic, mainly Gloom} that the Warlock is dead, or that they at least find out some other way. Might make a hundred or so cold Villagers easier to work trough.
And who knows, maybe there is another pit of half-alive villagers as a consolation price, they would deserve it.
After all life is not always fair.... But sometimes it is. Right?
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No, this is still late fall, Season 1. Discord isn't until Season 2 (Return of Harmony). Discord is still just a statue & the changelings are still in deep cover, plotting their invasion (A Canterlot Wedding)
Well, Prey didn't see any dead deer in those piles, so there is at least a chance that they got away.
Well, I personally would've been happier if there was at least a bit of foreshadowing for the veropedes, like a single scene of Prey finding the actual pit o' people, or somesuch, this way it feels a bit "Oh right I can use these too" moment. Also, would be quite funny if the added necromancer would be enough to finish that ritual.
If it wasn't for you, meddling kid.
Erm... I mean 'lamb'.
What a great chapter. A great climax and an awesome kaiju moment.
The veropedes were an incredible payoff, but sadly I doubt Prey would be able to keep it as a pet. At least Lemon would probably keep them.
Speaking of Lemon, whatever she's hiding worries me. To think that even his closest comrade, a tool of his own creation, is still not as trust worthy as Prey wanted. Her emotions seems too developed, and that can't be good.
That ritual Baked attempted to perform. That door/bridge he tried to open, that not even Prey attempted. I'm sure has something to do with that thing Prey found in a cave a long time ago, that portal or whatever to pure madness, to unreality. That thing that Prey kept a sliver of in his mind. I hope we'll find out more about it.
I so eager for the next chapter. In stories like this, the only thing more fun to read than the climax is the cleanup, and ow boy, there sure is a lot to clean up. So much trauma to unpack, so much to do and say, so much to explain, especially for Prey. He sure has a lot to explain, from his knowledge to the bonerot mines, And it would only be made worse if Crimson remembers what Prey just mumbled to himself.
Cheers to another masterpiece of a chapter.
I think you had the wrong word there.
Toos twos and tos!
I was wondering when the veropedes would come out to play. Also, like, fuck. That's some dark shit. Prey gotta do what he gotta do but that's no guarantee it's not at a terrible price. Also, the fact that the warlock had underestimated Prey this entire time and yet still he almost died a million times just really goes to show how unfair it is to fight the enemy in his own house, with his own giant scarecrow demons.
Wh-whaaaaat?! This is early! Oh, never mind that!
Epic close to a fantastic arc. Kaiju fights, a final unmasking, and a dramatic reunion! All things I love.
... and I guess I kinda like Crimson again.
AAGGGH MY HEART!!! I feel so bad for those two..
The ribbon has been imbued with the Dark Powers, has it not?
Ranting huh, that's dangerous Prey, you're letting your guard down.
I think we can hardly blame him for that.
Now I wonder, how will he spin the truth on this ? How can you explain the warlock just killed himself ?
I'll guess I'll know it later.
Excellent chapter, as always.
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Clearly he tripped and fell into the pit of death
Heck yes.
Anyways; a few notes--more musings than anything else: I, for some reason, keep imagining the veropedes as some unholy amalgamate of the real-life Bobbit Worm and Hollow Knight's Garpedes. Needless to say, sleep shall not be had. The fights were, for lack of a better word, awesome. Nice emotional beats there. I genuinely thought it would be the end of the two after the Balroth's death, but the veropedes, it would seem, made mincemeat of the Reaper King.
After that, I'd say it became, for the most part, comfortably cerebral: no real need to worry for the characters' lives, able to focus on the story at large and on future arcs, rather than fearing for the characters' immediate future. It's really quite refreshing. You know, like how you feel as you draw to the end of a race: "the end is near and that's good--because I made it" sort of feeling. Like a rush of endorphins, really.
Nevertheless, all in all, an exciting close to a thoroughly riveting story arc and I eagerly await more of this simply excellent writing.
Regards: Laika.
Oh, by the by, I've been toying with the idea of making an audiobook type deal on youtube of this. Originally, I was going to do it for myself, but I dunno. Probably a dumb idea anyways.
Just thought you ought to know; unlikely as it is that it'll come to fruition.
Anyhow, sorry for the smallish review (though I feel "rambunctious old buffer talking at air" is more fitting) and, as always, I wish you well.
Regards (for real this time): Laika.
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Don't remind me of bobbit worms. Still just as creepy as I first saw them. Although I admit, I also imagined the veropedes as a cross between bobbit worms and black house centipedes.
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My apologies. I generally let my train of thought unravel as I write these... Well, they aren't really reviews per se... More like ambulatory verbal splurges.
But yeah, that image works too. Thank you for depositing that little fear coin into my nightmare savings.
As I said before: Sleep shall not be had.
Regards: Laika.
Just two lost souls wandering in an endless dark valley. At least these two can be lost and wander endlessly together. Brotherhood is magic.
I love this so so so much its been a very long time since a book has made me this excited, keep up the absolutely astonishing work!
Really great chapter! I really liked how this arc portrayed horror and pushed character development.
I particularly like how different this arc was from previous arc(s) in theme and tone. I guess it wasn't too different from the begining memory chapters, but being in the present with characters that have been developed brings everything to a new level.
This story is a serious contender for my favourite dark fanfic and stands strongly up against my current favorite The Immortal Game.
Really looking forward to the next arc! ❤👍
A bit of foreshadowing on the velopede would have been appreciated.
Overall an excellent chapter. Now I am really looking forward to the cleanup when Prey and Crimson rejoin the rest of the squad and when they eventually make it back to Canterlot.
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I must admit that having no foreshadowing on the velopede was actually quite different. Sometimes, foreshadowing is far too heavy and you can just know what is going to happen, kind of like a spoiler, really.
I greatly enjoy your writing, and I am not even certain why. The content here is quite original, deviating away from the Mane 6 and typical content alterations. I greatly await the next interactions between Prey and Crimson. Their dynamic is one of the more interesting ones I have seen in a good while.
And that's it for this arc! I have to admit this finale didn't pack as much of a punch as the previous arc, but I think that's appropriate considering the emotional beating that was this arc. A little more foreshadowing about the veropedes would have been nice, but that's all I really have in the way of criticisms.
Lemon Pink is a little too emotionally mature for Prey's comfort. Perhaps Lemon isn't as dead as Prey thinks she is? Being shredded by whatever eldritch abomination Prey has locked up in his mind may have wrecked her, but not destroyed her. Lemon isn't gone, merely changed/suppressed as signified by her lingering admiration for Luna and her desire to please her new master. Will she turn against him? ... I don't think so, but it will certainly keep Prey up at night.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/395988/40/prey-and-a-lamb/403-a-flower-forest-in-may
Glad to see we finally came to this tidbit. A nice callback to Chapter 40 where we were teased. Only thing now is left is to count their losses. I for one am hoping that the rest of the ISND will make it out fine. Lilly included. I want to see her reaction after all to what she would have learned here.
Bowel-loosening shriek, not bowl-loosening shriek. The baloth is missing a 't' at some point, too. Search baloh and you should find it, maybe- I don't know, I've not written anything but a comment on this site.
Great combat scene. The vorapedes were a surprise, but I like them that way- of course he had those, though I'm not sure when in the timeline he got the chance to release them. Was really happy with the baloth, that thing was awesome.
That arc was freaking amazing!
Your writing never ceases to amaze me and your characters have so much life in them.
I'm very much looking forward to next chapter and to see what happens next.
I hope you have a great week :-)
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Thanks for pointing out those mistakes so I can correct them. 🍎
In answer to the question of when Prey got time to hatch his veropede: When Crimson went off to kill a bird in the baloth's territory and use it to leave a trail of blood to lure the baloth to the reaper king. While Crimson was doing that, Prey was off killing his own 'birds'. (Lemon Pink sacraficed her Diamond Dog guides)
But if you meant: When did Prey get the veropede in the first place? Then: You remember that time in the underground market in Canterlot when Prey went plant shopping? He found the two veropede eggs in the plant seed bin, the shop keeper mistaking them for plant bulbs.
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I remembered when he got the eggs, yes. But I hadn't figured out when he'd hatched her out. She's an adorable giant death myriapod of blades and spikes.
I can't wait to see what comes next. I've been dying to see how this shakes up the group dynamic when they finally get back to Canterlot. Also does this mean they are going to make it back for the gala?
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🍎 Glad you enjoyed it, but no, the Gala was already scheduled to happen the very weekend they first arrived on the train. That's kinda' the reason they were sent out here on a "no-where" mission, to keep the ISND away from the Royal Inspectors. 😞
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I forgot about the inspectors. Boy will the fallout of this debacle be a delightful thing to read. That's what I like about this story, Prey, being who he is, insures that even the subsequent aftermath and procedural parts will be suspenseful and fun to read.
2nd. "First story, please tell me what the heck I am doing wrong and point out grammar and stuff."
...How is this your first story?!? This is amazing!
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Thanks, it's nice to hear you think this is a great read. 😃 It is my first story, but I like to think I put alot of planning and attention into it. 😅 (i.e. Try to emulate the best fictions I've read and leave out the bad points)
Question
Knowing that your already a chapter and a half ahead always, how do you plan out everything so well. The most recent example being Prey and Pink's eggs. Do you have a laid out plan for the whole story, or do you just make things up as you go and store it in your mind and bring it up for later?
Otherwise, great chapter! And if scheduling is right, the next chapter should be released around my birthday. *cough* *cough* June 11th *cough* *cough*.
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It's not always a chapter and a half ahead. More like, a chapter or a half ahead. 😆
In answer to your question about planning: Sometimes I do as you say, include some set up and store it for later. Usually though, I have a pretty good idea what scene I want to write with it, I just need to get to that scene in the story. As the example you used with the veropede eggs, that one I did have planned out. (I am a smart person! S-m-r-t! No wait, S-m-a-r-t I mean!)
I was always planning to make the veropede and reaper king scene, it's one of the things I had in my head from the start of this story.
Anyways, i don't see why the follow up chapter shouldn't be done on time, so hopefully.
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Happy birthday, man. I hope you still found a way to enjoy even in these trying times.
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Your writing is seriously impressive. I am honestly still shocked that it's your first story. The sheer quality of the writing and the rate you upload chapter can put many experienced writers to shame.
Do you at least come from a background that involves writing, storytelling, etc?
I'll be honest the first few times I've seen Prey and a Lamb pop up In popular or updated I'd pass it over, but last week I finally decided to give it a read and was pleasantly surprised and can't wait to see where the story will go
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Anyways, i don't see why the follow up chapter shouldn't be done on time, so hopefully
You DO realize that the site going down is All Your Fault!
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He Jinxed it. 100%.
Had nothing to do with hardware failure. The God of fortuna just wanted to prove you wrong.
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*Cough* I uh...Uh... I can explain? Maybe?... Okay, I've got nothing.
Not sure if someone asked before, but it keeps nagging at the back of my head.
Was this first part that was used in Chapter 40 changed?
I was pretty sure there was something about villagers being saved by Gloom and Scenic. Or something. That is why I wonder if originally some villagers were supposed to be saved. I had it in mind the entire time reading and wondered which ones would be saved.
Now as none were saved I wonder about it. I was pretty sure I did not misread, though maybe I did and am wrong. So, clarification would be nice.
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Yes that is back from Ch. 40 but I, uh, I don't think there was any mention of saved villagers? 😅
There has been speculation by Prey about whether the deer holt got out or not, (and it looks 90% like they did but there hasn't been any definite proof they survived), but nothing about surviving villagers I don't think, sorry.
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My mistake then. I was sure I read something about villagers being led to safety (by Gloom and Scenic mayhaps?). Just something I wanted to have clarified.
I was completely surprised by the twist. I actually forgot about the veropedes. Well done, I don't usually forget stuff like that. O-O
Whoa. that was... That was something. Prey is both an easy to hate and easy to love charachter, and this is going in directions i didnt even think it could. I wonder if Gloom will survive this.
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Yes, Prey isn't exactly the "good" guy. 🙃 He's not even just a "grey" character either. And yet... When seeing it all from his perspective, it's much easier to sympathise. 😇