This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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Another fantastic chapter the cliffhanger gets me every time can't wait for the next one
OH THE DREAD.
That is a terrifying feeling, the exposed back to the darkness. You can only see the fire and the dark, dark, void where anything and everything evil seems to live.
And You can’t hide with your back against anything.
Ugh, the paranoia
(Great job)
Fear
I'm loving this arc. It's just so fantastically horrific,
I really hope Gloom and Scenic apologize to Prey for giving so much shit about not wanting to risk the woods after their experience. Crimson, though... Crimson can go kick rocks. Lilly had the "excuse" of being ignorant and hot-headed. Crimson let his heroic complex guide him to the precipice of calamity and didn't even see what he'd brought down on all their heads.
You can feel the despair towards the end
This is easily one of if not the best chapters, the raw emotion of everyone guilting prey into saving lily really got to me!
The Wolf wood was way scarier than I ever imagined. This chapter completely exceeded all of my expectations. The dread, the horror. Absolutely incredible.
After this gloom would never be the same. I wander how it will affect the way he views Prey. Will he trust him more, or will he simply deny that any of this ever happened, in an attempt to forget.
Crimson is missing quite the show, how will they even explain what happened to them. Will they explain what happened them? What he brought back with him.
Gloom must be so jealous of Crimson right now. Blissfully unaware.
And Prey is sure owed a few apologies. Apologies I doubt he will receive. Not that they would satisfy him. After this he might even consider his debt to Crimson fully paid.
And man that cliffhanger, that's going to bother me for the next two weeks.
Once again another masterpiece.
Don't think you got away with releasing a chapter a day early, we noticed.
This is exactly what I needed to have a nice week end
Thanks for the quality writing, we went from a big menace to an even bigger one, this is dreadful.
Excellent chapter as usual, can't wait to read more, even if I'll have to.
i dont think i can like this chapter enough, everything was intense from them finding out the fate of the villagers to Lilly foolishly running off and getting hurt and even the confrontation and this thing following them back. i was honestly jumping on my chair almost the entire time reading, guess it didnt help that i played new Fiddlesticks theme music in the background
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Right? It seems like they just have to relearn the same lesson over and over again. From the moment they knew the severity of the situation they should have retreated. But no, lets try and fight the mystical magical monstrosities. Prey keeping secrets doesn't do anyone any favors, but WOW does pony naivete seem to lead toward the big dumb. If their commanding officer doesn't have them summarily court-martialed upon their return for Pickett's-Charging into a complete clusterfuck then justice is a lie. This is epic proportions failure that has cost a whole village of civilian lives. Lilly can die in a fire for being terminally stupid. Also, isn't Prey still considered a child? What the actual fuck is their excuse dragging him into this?
Well, you damn well got the dread and terror down.
You know the other characters are being stupid/unreasonable when you want to side with the paranoid misanthrope. Yeah, great, you saved the suicidally impulsive mare with a hero complex, but now all of you are hanging by a very thin and very frayed thread.
God i love this story.
This is so hopeless, i can wait,to see what happens next.
In the other hand Now prey has buddys that UNDERSTAND his ptsd.
The entity follows the ancient laws.. it's the primordial darkness isn't it?
This is pure nightmare fuel. This shows what world Prey lives in at all times. He learned long ago you cannot save anyone you can only survive. If you are distracted for one second you perish.
I think it was pretty clear that was the entity back from chapter 9. But there's still something that bothers be.
What did Prey mean when he mentioned the "hungry thing"?
It could refer to the fact that the entity leaves the hooves uneaten, which means it isnt hungry for sustenance, at least not the kind that a regular creature is.
But considering Prey's reaction to Crimson's riddle (answering "a hungry thing" in a trance without even realising) and how he refers to the "hungry thing" makes me believe there is much more to that. Much much more.
Yeesh.... that was more disturbing than I’d have believed possible. Sometimes the scariest thing is that which is never seen... I wonder if the hungry thing decided to visit the other easy prey collected by the chess master/Sculpter/villainous being
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beep beep beep
! incoming shit english!
I think the list of crimes would be something like:
-Risking your squad
-Lose rationality during a mission (probably never lead a squad again)
-Put a minor at risk
-Endanger an important resource for the night watch (prey)
-Abandon the assigned mission
-Being an idiot
I have no idea how a court-martial is run but that mission was a resounding failure and Gloom is likely to be demoted.
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Could you explain what "The Primordial Darkness" is? I'm very curious.
Tartarus
know how to think for himself
civilization
Prey better hope gloom doesn't get on his case after all this, he's probably gonna know something is up and wont be thrown off by excuses.
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The "civilisation" thing is British.
Outside of Ireland, being British is technically NOT an error
As for the others,....thanks for pointing them out
I try so hard, but it seems like I always miss a few
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Heh well I keep learning new words that have alternate spellings I've never seen.
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The British are the exception to Mark Twain's famous comment
"Foreigners always spell better than they pronounce"
Separate spelling dates back to the late 18th century & nationalism after the Revolutionary War
Blame Noah Webster (founder of Webster's Dictionary)
Big differences:
"s" instead of "z"
Putting in extra letters "colour", "armour" "aluminium"
Plus, a few weird words like "tannoy"
How in the world is your writing this insanely good? I mean no joke every time it is just a masterpiece.
Do you write professionally? Because that's the kind of quality I'm seeing, and I don't normally enjoy horror.
My words FAIL me I can't express my enjoyment of your story. I don't know when you plan to finish it but I will be here till the very end, even if it never happens.
I would love to have this book physically on my book shelf and would gladly pay money for it. On that note is there a way that I can show my support of this story because I absolutely would love to do so.
And last but not least I don't want to stress you out or put pressure on you I understand that this is probably something to do to relax or is a labour of love or a personal challenge of some sort. As such I hope that you enjoy writing this at least a fraction of how much I enjoy reading it and don't want to take that away from you.
Have fun, stay awesome. - One crazed fan.
Wow that chapter was freaking amazing. Your descriptions of everything that was happening sent shivers down my spine.
As always I can't wait to see what happens next and I hope you have a great day! 😊👍
Is the wood wolf monster based on SCP 575, the predatory darkness? I wanted to ask because I’m curious of where you got inspiration for the wood wolf monster.
I enjoyed this chapter greatly, I like how this situation has forced Prey to be more open with his true self. The skill set they have seen him display is a combination of a witch doctor and a combat medic. The background for such skills in someone so ‘young’ points to very unpleasant circumstances that likely lasted years.
Prey’s medical skills this chapter reminds me of this quote, “A doctor heals people, a medic just makes them more comfortable as they die.” I think Prey resonates with the second half of this statement really well. Lily is and likely will die from her injuries, he’s just prolonged that death over an uncertain amount of time.
Given meld wood was valuable to the Rebellion I’m kinda surprised they didn’t use prisoners to harvest it. When Prey was talking about it, I figured the Rebellion would’ve purposely infected captured prisoners or crippled members that way they could have more of it.
Lily’s world view was shatter in this chapter and it was shattered hard. I hope she’ll be strong enough to learn from it and grow as a person. I feel bad for Scenic he has had it pretty rough so far. While he can come off as being the most innocent or fragile of the group he managed to last this long despite being in a real life horror movie. Crimson’s self-sacrificing hero streak has landed them in a terrible situation. I don’t really blame him for what happened, as a character I like Crimson, I like the dynamic he has with Prey. He’s been around Prey long enough, that he seems to know how Prey ticks, at least superficially. Gloom has once again failed to heed Prey’s warning until it is too late. I like Gloom as a character, but I think his biggest flaw is that he lacks adequate leadership experience. He’s made bad decisions time and time again, and he’s failed to listen to the concerns of those around him. As inexperienced as he seems he is learning, his decision not to pursue the Scarecrow army shows that, but he’s still going to stumble every now and again. To be fair to Gloom and his squad, their luck is so bad when on duty, they actually might be cursed.
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Hello. That is a kind and very generous offer, but really, it's fine. 😉 As you said, I do this for fun. It's a hobby I do outside of working my actual job. (Real Life sucks like that). But thank you again, that was very flattering.
I hope you like the rest of the story by the time it's done. This chapter was particularly fun to write, I must say. 🎃
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I am going to ask the same as MyLittleTimeLord about the primordial darkness? Is it from Lovecraft or from a game? Sorry, I don't know the reference Sounds creepy though.
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Ah, thanks as always! At least there weren't so many this time for you to have to point out. My editor did a great job that means.
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You're right, I very much decided to follow the route of the unknown is the scariest thing out there, also mixed in with a bit of made up folk law.
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Yes, they don't quite seem to be the same thing, do they? I'll say no more.
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Thanks, I'm glad to hear it worked out. This chapter was a lot of fun to write and experiment with to get the feel of. I'm going to have to think of something to make sure the ARC after this one isn't boring after all this.
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Very much so. People are scared of the dark for a very good reason, because it's scary! There's the saying, 'You're not really scared of the dark but what's in it'. I don't think that's quite true. The sentiment is correct, but the dark itself makes whatevers hiding in it twice as bad and scary as it would be in daylight. Therefore, the dark is still scary. 🎃🎃🎃🎃
But anyway! Glad you liked the chapter.
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Yep, Crimson was very much, "Hi guys, I'm back. I'm gonna' crash now, you guys deal it. m'Kay? Thanks" *Snore*
How will the ISND resolve this between themselves in the future? Who will they blame? Who will break?
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Hello! To answer that question; Their excuse for having a minor like Prey in the Night Guard, (even if he really is much mentally older than a child. He was locked in Dreverton for fifty-seven years after all. More on that coming later), is becuase, quite simply, "Luna decided it would be so."
She was the one who visited Prey's dream, decided he'd be a good candidate for her new pet project, and conscripted him in. Equestria is ruled by the two monarchs, Celestia and Luna. What they say, goes. 🤣
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Thanks. I really enjoyed it too.
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Perhaps but I don’t think Cthulu’s great-grandpa Magnum Tenebrosum is going to be wondering around random woods eating creatures. Unless you mean in essence the literal primordial darkness of their dimension. That which is the source of all things dark and malicious.
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Thinking on it further, part of the encounter reminded me of Grimm’s work “Don’t open the door” which was creepy in its own right. However this one is definitely more disturbing... for a variety of reasons. Once again, well done. Let’s see if the hungry one gets distracted, or decides to fixate on those that trespassed
Ps: I don’t know how difficult it would be, but I definitely think the cover photo should include his bow
You know, for some reason, I'm getting a serious SCP vibe; especially the kind involving cognitohazard--the best kind, as you may know. Another phrase, from the ever so prestigious book series, 'A Song of Ice and Fire': "The Night is Dark, and full of Terrors". Just feels oh-so fitting for the situation at hand, no?
Anyway, I knew that the silly ass would get herself killed. Not that she's dead, but I assume you take my meaning.
Yet again, the ISND has pushed Prey into an almost unsalvageable situation and expect him to right all wrongs, just because he knows things. It's ridiculous. I'm starting to think that the idea of just saying, "take your redemption organisation to hell with you, send me back to jail" is becoming more and more alluring to little old Prey (I am just realising how fitting that moniker is for the lamb).
I can't help but feel that Crimson has betrayed Prey's trust somewhat in this chapter too. It is ridiculous how they can tell him to save her, no matter what, in such an impossible situation. Not only that, but they seem to judge him, no matter WHAT he does. It's just a positive feedback loop of cluster-fuckery, if you'll pardon my French.
Anywho, this has, by far, been one of my favourite chapters so far, and I look forward to the next!
Regards, Laika.
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Hello. To answer your question, no, whatever the entity was in the Wolfing Woods, I didn't base it off any SCP monster stuff. (I don't really know much about that fandom, just the basics) It's great that you enjoyed the chapter too.
As for your second point about the Resistance farming meld wood, I, err, didn't think about that. My bad.
What will happen to Lilly in the future and will she survive a few years? Or just even days? That's going to be revealed in the rest of what happens next. 😄
And yes, the whole mission has been one disaster and poor decision after another. How much of it can really be blamed on Gloom though? And how much of it will be blamed on Gloom? I mean, they've mostly just been trying their best, and it could be argued Gloom was trying to preserve his squad at all costs, hence the desperate measures he resorted to with Lilly and forcing Prey. All that remains to be seen!
This chapter was great, i loved how it dipicts prey's fears and how lilly was bit by the mama'duke, it was rather satisfying to see her unicorn mentality almost get her killed, if she lives she is likely going to get court marshalled for endangering the lives of her squad mates
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I can't wait to see how the PTSD might effect Gloom.
Can you imagine it? A thestral that's afraid of the dark.
An excellent read as always. Cant w8 for the next chapter.
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Neat, now I can’t help but speculate what it might look like and what other powers it might have, it seems ti be capable of generating a supernatural darkness around itself, and it might have the ability to manipulate the minds of those around it.
Huh, I’m not entirely surprised that, that’s the reason. I though maybe their was another reason they couldn’t do it, like the Rebellion has to be mobile and the meld wood can’t be properly harvested until it is full grown. Prey did specify he need the top branches. Regardless you are an amazing writer and are exceptionally good at writing a Dark story.
I’m definitely looking forward to the next chapter, as well as the resolution of this mission. Whatever reinforcements they receive likely won’t be enough. In my opinion his situation would warrant mobilization of the military. The more I think about it, who ever this Warlock is, he has been carefully bidding his time until he had an overwhelming force to work with. In hindsight it should have been obvious a single scarecrow and a Warlock wouldn’t have been enough to capture a whole town.
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Most attribute it to Lovecraft, but no, the idea of the Primordial Darkness is far older than that. It's the idea that the darkness that existed before creation is in itself some sort of entity. Lovecraft and various other authors have created their own interpretations of it, and the Lovecraft one is by far one of the more popular variations, but he did not make the idea.
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Gave the response to the author as well, but basically it's the idea that the darkness that existed before creation is in itself some sort of entity. Lovecraft is the most famous author to use this idea in his works, but it's one that dates back basically to the beginning of mankind.
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Basically yes, I mean the literal primordial darkness, the idea that most Lovecraftian monsters and various other authors have stylized their versions of it upon. The darkness from before creation.
You know what just hit me? This Darkness is a lot like Charlie from the game Don't Starve.
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Even if he can see in normal darkness, i think his new phrase is gonna be:
"It is not behind me." Follow by tons of paranoia and a real fear of the forest.
AND SCENIC! if he makes it, i don't think he's gonna be the same ever again, poor child.
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In Guns, Germs, and Steel: The Fates of Human Societies (Diamond)
the author spends a lot of time on agriculture. According to him, the answer to "Do people grow it?" depends on "How long until it's useful?"
For example apple trees take 3-8 years to bear fruit (depending on type)
& they were one of the last food crops to be grown
If Meld Wood takes, say 20-30 years to become useful that's just too long, it won't be grown.
& that ignores the question "How dangerous is it to grow?"