This is a story about a sheep. A little sheep, locked deep in prison, put there by ponies. He doesn't want to be there, but then he's had to do a lot of things he doesn't want to. It's a shame he deserves to be in there.
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A whole lot of interesting and fun things happened in this chapter, and its among my favourites so far, but what really stood out to me was this:
A solid blow against the notion of Equestrian superiority was made on the day two ponies agreed that Carton Juice was a good name for their child.
Kinda wondering when lily is going to get her vibes checked
Ah. I never thought I'd see the day when I caught up with the latest chapter. And by god, it has been an epic so far. This has certainly been a most interesting chapter too.
You've certainly captured my sense of unease as well. It is not often that I find a story that does it, seemingly, so effortlessly.
I avidly look forward to the next and wish you well. Good luck.
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I'm picturing a young pony getting her cutie mark for putting empty juice boxes in a blender. And I can't help but think that's the most pony thing ever.
Absolutely amazing chapter as always 😊👍
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Looks like he have a winner. Even if only partially correct. You were incredibly close.
deer;s—>deer’s
I was only partially correct. I guessed deer because... I don't really know, really. It's been a fortnight. Deer are fun, and I like this bunch. Wonder what'd happen if a holt wandered into Equestria, where there totally is land ownership and everything's been cultivated to the point that even the skies are farmed.
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I don't think you made it obvious. I've read works with deer before, and they're a woodland creature that we know exist; Prey mentioned some being in the Resistance. So... I guess deer are kinda the obvious choice, if your mind thinks along the same lines mine does. Not everybody's does; somebody thought it'd be ponies.
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Thanks for the chapter :>
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How did I even do that mistake so many times!?
"Duh" is me. Thank you for pointing it out. 🤡
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Well, they're also dumb enough to use names like "Cheese String", I guess there's no parent police to ensure your foal won't live a life of merciless teasing at school.
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Thank you for the good wishes of luck. It is nice to hear that you've been enjoying it. It is certainly a large commitment to read. (Nearly at 500K words now! 😆)
Hope you like where this Arc goes in the end, 🍎
Yet another amazing chapter, agonisingly inching closer to ever more intense stakes
Prey showing of his skills as crimson put it is always a treat. And knowing this wood he just might have to do so in the future aswell.
Also, as we learned that you have to speak the mind readees language to properly read their thoughts, would it be wrong to assume that Prey can speak Griffin aswell, if there is such a language, as he read Garrows mind aswell.
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Really, it's my pleasure. And though a commitment it's been, I have enjoyed every step of it. Nor, would I have it any other way.
And again, I look (eagerly, might I add) ahead for the next chapter, friend!
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You are welcome for the chapter and thank you for keeping to spot and point out the mistakes.
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Well, Prey knows how to speak Zebrican from absorbing Snake's mind, (since he's always curing in zebrican), and he absorbed Garrow's mind too, soooo.... 😇
Gloom insisting on his non-malicious racism even when it's pointed out so bluntly is about as infuriating as it is realistic. Unbelievable and completely unsurprising that even after the interaction with Bale, Gloom doesn't see how problematic and exclusionary pony-centric language is. You've also done a fantastic job capturing the oppressive, dangerous vibe of the forest! I'm super curious as to how well Prey copes with being in an environment so similar to his trauma, and how well he'll be able to continue to keep up his multi-levelled facades to the rest of the guard because of that. Even if a bunch of them die soon, I've really been enjoying the different levels of intersectional privilege/etc that having Lily and Scenic around provides. I've been trying to leave comments a little more to show how much I appreciate the work that goes into this; super keen for every chapter!
Another very good chapter, a little respite from this big monster waiting for them.
I'm really curious to see how you'll manage to fit the villagers in the whole scheme.
I do hope Prey will have some rest afterwards, the poor lamb is always thrown into the action.
Thanks again mate.
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Yes, it is very constant 'go go go'! Never stop. One disaster after another, no rest, just constant fatigue grinding the ISND down, wearing on their sanity.
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Well then thank you, really, than you. I'm also happy to hear that you think I managed to capture the creepy suspenseful vibe I was going for with the forest. I thought and planned for quite a while (and discarded quite a few failed attempts) to try to make it at least passable to my own review before putting it up. 😂
Read through up to this in a few days, damn what a story! Can’t imagine my disappointment when I saw there wasn’t a next chapter yet!
I enjoyed this chapter immensely. Everything from how you build the world to how the characters interact. You have an amazing talent when it come to story telling.
I know that I don’t comment every chapter, partly because I fall behind, partly because I have nothing more meaningful to say then just ‘I enjoyed this chapter.’ Just know that I’ll always appreciate the effort you put into your stories.
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Ah, well the next chapter will be end of next week. I manage to make them about every 2 weeks. It is nice that you enjoyed the story so far, thanks. 🍒
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Same. Kinda sad this story isn’t better/more known, and despite the questionability of Prey’s actions and self centered nature. I hope he actually does free himself so he may deliver his own brand of justice on those he considered had done him wrong.
Though, I do wonder if Prey is overreacting in thinking unicorns as being ‘op’ and it’s just him afraid since they can do stuff from afar or some capable of doing stuff that is considerable as unnatural.
Also this is my first comment ever, read a lot from fimfiction but never went around to making a account until now.
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Yes, Prey is certainly not a "nice" or "good" person. He has a lot of flaws, many of them quite serious. But that's part of the story! Will he get better? Will he redeem himself? Or just find like minded individuals and finally get his revenge? Or, you know, a third option.
Anyway, I'm glad you liked the story so far. As to Prey being overly afraid of unicorn's, he is a bit, isn't he? Most unicorns are quite normal. But Prey remembers the unicorns from the Border Guard and the Resistance war. He's perhaps just a little traumatised by that.
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Prey has PTSD from his fight against the unicorn who unleashed the fire storm, that’s all he thinks about when he sees a unicorn, he thinks all unicorns can do that.
And with that, I'm caught up with another long story and must now wait for the next chapter. ⏳
Decided to rewatch "Post content" now that it's ended (really recommend if you're into YouTube arg's). Then I saw the indifference tutorial and just couldn't not notice the similarities.
Not that relevant, but still kind of interesting.
Hey so do you have a discord I would love to join it, if it exists
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Uh, sorry no I don't, but thanks.
It's alright love the chapter can't wait for the next one!🙂
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I'm pretty sure a previous chapter said that she's about to/ had died.
I think it was chapter 40.3.
There was a chase scene, followed by the current story arc.
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From what we can tell Snake, the voodoo zebra, has been clawing his way to the front ever since he set good in the forest.
yes.
believe it or not, dying is bad for your health.
has luna visited preys dreams yet and I just missed it some were? I know that he himself has had at least a couple of nightmares and that was the only time she would force the issue of being in his head so she could do her job.
I might be overly suspicious or paranoid, but this marefriend of scenic sounds like it would fit a changeling in a way. Being loved and asking lots of questions like a foreigner. There is also the anger from being away.
There is also the random though of what can we find in pinkie pies mind?
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He sensed her presence while he was sleeping in the jail cell (that's how he got into the night guard), and when he had a nightmare back at the palace after killing that griffin I believe, but he forced himself awake.
i've always loved your perspective <3
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As maaaaaay have come through in the story, I am a bit biased against the Equestrian culture portrayed while there exist other races, (griffins, minotaurs), but are excluded in favour of everything 'pony'. Personally, I was much more interested in what could have been a story about the griffins than anything to do with Ponyville etc.
“Out here by the fire”
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Oh, oops. Thanks for the correction