I need somepony to give me some advice on my story.

Like certain areas I can improve on.

I really have no clue as to what I could do since i'm a novice writer but the story is setting there glaring at me to be changed, but i'm not sure what I could do to change it.

any advice is welcome.

WOOHOO today I put out my first new story I hope it does ok but i'm kinda expecting it to crash and burn

I just so enjoy the holiday season. It is just the most awesomest time ever.

And, I wish for all of you to have a very special holiday season as well.

One thing I do hate about the holidays is the Christmas lights, why do they hate me so?