Descending the Pit · 4:11am Feb 4th, 2012
I need somepony to give me some advice on my story.
Like certain areas I can improve on.
I really have no clue as to what I could do since i'm a novice writer but the story is setting there glaring at me to be changed, but i'm not sure what I could do to change it.
any advice is welcome.
I AM DEVICE HERETIC
HEED MY WORDS
THE ONE RULE YOU SHOULD ALWAYS BEAR IN MIND AS AN AUTHOR
IS THAT EVERY SENTENCE, PARAGRAPH, AND SCENE SHOULD DO ONE OF THREE THINGS
1. DESCRIBE SOMETHING RELEVANT TO THE PLOT
2. BE DIALOGUE RELEVANT TO THE PLOT
3. BE ACTION MOVING THE PLOT TOWARDS ITS RESOLUTION
IF YOU DO THIS, YOU WILL WRITE ABOVE-AVERAGE FICTION.
SO SPEAKS THE BEY, SO IT IS!
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*bows to computer screen*
Will do Device.
Agreed with Device Heretic,
The only other thing I can recommend is the spelling, it's nothing major just that you used homophones....
yep, the stories' flow & feel are not interrupted by it, it will help to use the correct words however.
over-all not a bad job, in my opinion
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Well, thank you for not hating on my story. I am not a writer by any means but it was something I wanted to try.
But, I have long since moved on from the story, as I have other interests in the fandom that carry me away from fic. (I have 34 unread chapters I still need to read)
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No prob, I'm the same (not a writer), I just haven't had the time to even write one....well a strong enough internet
Just these comments can actually wipe my internet out for a few hours.
It's mostly a one-way type: i.e.
World----->Me vs World<-- / --Me
But I still get my pony time!
You lucky you, such a small number, that is good thing!
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Small number, maybe it's just me, but I don't see how people keep track and stay entertained from 100 different stories.
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I just am lucky, happen to keep it all in my head with very little needed to recall most of the story, don't know how it works but it does :shrug:
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Oh, I can keep track but they lose their entertainment value.
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Ahh, the "feel"/emotion gets lost between them?
If so that is something I have some difficulties with as well. Nothing can really be done there, that I know of
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Yeah, and it doesn't make the story not entertaining by any means, but it has a little less immersion in it.
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In that case I am confused as towards how they lose their entertainment value:
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Well I really need sleep (even though it's morning, ~72+ straight hr's of my job is exhausting), so...night/morning/noon whatever to you!
Yeah I have weird internets, and a rather kind CO on it's use in field
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Yes they lose value but they are still entertaining. Just not as much as they could be.
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Ahh
Well I don't know about wether or not it's entertaining but they this:
I wish I knew more of these but I don't