4662251 eh, expected. I like building up the story behind the transportations (how they actually got there instead of just a flash of light) before beginning the actual story. I think it adds more depth.
But stick around, around chapter 3 I predict shit getting real.
4662267 Alright. We will see how the next Chapter will change my mind.
The Story lost a bit of it's mystery as you explained how and why he was brought to Equestria. It's different from other YHAY stories but it's not automatically a bad thing.
I just have to wait for the next chapter(-s) to give my final judge. But as I said, the different with the explanation of his arriving is not totally a bad thing.
Hm... Not really much action happens here and I can't really tell what the actually Story is. This is like a second part of the prolog.
I will give it a thumb up, but it is not enough for a fav so far. Sorry.
4662251 eh, expected. I like building up the story behind the transportations (how they actually got there instead of just a flash of light) before beginning the actual story. I think it adds more depth.
But stick around, around chapter 3 I predict shit getting real.
4662251 Also, there is a reason why I write these parts. You just don't now it yet.
4662267 Alright. We will see how the next Chapter will change my mind.
The Story lost a bit of it's mystery as you explained how and why he was brought to Equestria. It's different from other YHAY stories but it's not automatically a bad thing.
I just have to wait for the next chapter(-s) to give my final judge. But as I said, the different with the explanation of his arriving is not totally a bad thing.
4662385 It's your choice. Go for it, and thanks for the critique.