Friendship is dead part 2 : A stallions redemption

by ALoneWolf

Bonus: Deleted scene

Heres a deleted scene that i was originally gonna add onto the current chapter, but decided not to as it would have made it way too long

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“UGH my head” Gladmane groaned as he began to compose himself. “Just what the hell was……………” But before he could say anything else, the stallion and his aids who have also regained consciousness found themselves face to face with not only a trio of royal guards, but the sun goddess herself, who look all kinds of furious. “ Oh uh……….Princess Celestia, it’s ……an honor to finally meet you , your even more beautiful in per…………

“SHUT UP!!!” Celestia interrupted sending shivers down the trio’s spines. “ I have a mind to set you ablaze after what you tried to do to my niece and her husband, but I’ll let the court decide your punishment. Your so damn lucky my sister isn’t here cause she wouldn’t be as merciful as I “ She then turned her attention towards Gladmane two aids who had nervous sweat all over their faces.

“So this is where you two have been hiding, if I had known you’d get rid of your guard uniforms and high tail it to Las Pegasus to escape your punishment, I would have retrieved you sooner”

Cadence raised an eyebrow after hearing her Aunt’s statement. “ Wait, you know these two auntie?”

“indeed” Celestia replied. “ Chris Peterson and Lang Magnum, these two were royal guard who have been on the run for a couple of years after sexually assaulting a few of my female guards and even getting some of them pregnant. And they thought they were smart by escaping their punishments by ditching their armor’s and start over in Las pegasus under the wing of this idiot. Not to mention they’re also responsible for giving me that ridiculous nickname “SunButt”.

One of the crystal guards tried his hardest not to giggle, lest to feel the wrath of the sun goddess.

“Well for what it’s worth Celestia, you are pretty thicc, can you blame us?” Lang replied.

“SHUT UP!!!” Celestia boomed shutting the stallion up completely. “ Take these idiots back to Canterlot to await their trials.

“No please, I can’t go to prison!” Gladmane said frantically as one of the guards grabbed him. “ Do you have any idea what they do to rich guys there?!”

“Well you should have thought about that before molesting my niece, not to mention kidnap royalty which is a very serious offense in Equestria” Celestia replied. “ Get these idiots out of my sight”

“Yes your majesty” The crystal guards said in unison and proceeded to drag the trio away.

“You can’t do this to me, no prison can hold Gladmane ya here me?!!!!!!” Gladmane shouted as he was being escorted away.

“Lang?” Chris said nervously.

“Yes Chris?” Lang replied.

“I heard about prison” Christ said.

“Yeah?” Lang replied and waited a few seconds for his friends reply.

“It ain’t fun!” Chris said frantically before being escorted out of the room alongside Lang.

Comments

[Starlight Nova]

Why didn’t you capitalize the a in Shining Armor’s name? It’s suppose to be capitalized.

[NewUser]

The Sparkle Family is clearly falling apart and things are going from bad to worse for everyone in general, if Twilight Velvet ends up passing away I doubt that N̶i̶g̶h̶t̶ ̶L̶i̶g̶h̶t̶ Crescent Moon will be strong enough to withstand all that, in case Crescent decided to do something unthinkable, the legacy of the Sparkles would die with Shining Armor. (and cheerilee? lol)

Just in case, does Spike know about Twilight Velvet's cancer? Honestly, it would be tragic in the hypothetical case that Spike had considered Velvet his "second mother" and now he would have absolutely nothing. It is already tragic that his last interaction with Twilight was violent and that he is indirectly to blame for Rarity losing her horn.

Honestly, regarding Twilight: From the beginning she consciously did things out of hatred and resentment, without being sorry or having any ounce of regret for hurting her friends and outside people (along with psychotic Trixie) just for being betrayed. you also emphasized that in this alternate universe the amulets did not turn their bearers evil, which is why I don't believe that "Twilight wouldn't like us to be blaming ourselves for her death" thing when in reality, under analysis of the previous story, she would be blaming them for their actions, it seems more like a way to deal with the guilt that the Mane 5 have for the events that occurred at the wedding.

Gladmane's "revenge" plan doesn't make much sense in my personal opinion, since Twilight was murdered and Trixie is in jail, so justice would have been served, but I guess this character is clearly sick in the head for his terrible actions towards Cadance.

I feel like Cadance and Shining were nerfed, it's understandable that Cadance can't handle the polymorph queen, but a princess alicorn is easily weakened by a regular unicorn?

In general, I find this story extremely interesting, despite notable flaws, and I feel that this alternate universe should be explored further, greetings!

[ALoneWolf]

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Oh yeah, thanks for pointing that out, I'll fix it.

[ALoneWolf]

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1. Don't worry the Sparkle family along with Velvet is gonna be fine, you'll see their fate later on

2. Spike still lives in Ponyville so he wouldn't know about Velvet's cancer, especially given that the couple was still furious at him, the main 5 , and Celestia. Shining was just lucky to be able to have a conversation with his father.

3. Twilight did let her anger get the better of her, especially given that she's been tricked by false friendships int he past ( Comet Tail and his peers in high school for example) And didn't wanna go through that pain again. If she hadn't have teamed up with Trixie, there could have been a chance it would have been different, she wouldn't forgive them right away but would have given them a chance to prove their friendship to her.

4. Gladmane was still furious about the humiliation that Trixie and Twilight did to him last year with that little torture gameshow session. even though they received their punishments, he wasn't satisfied as he wanted revenge on both of em in his own hooves, so he decided to take his anger out on those close to the pair in a way to get closure.

5. Remember that a dispersion band was place on both of em rendering her unable to use magic to escape

But i appreciate your feedback, and that your enjoying the story👍