Nicely done

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pardon, old habit. but the cat, this is what i meant

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OMG yes the last narrator bloopers are awesome! That's where we got the idea from.

Also, why don't you PM I can help you with Boo as a character it depends on where in the timeline you wrote your story. Boo was basically like Scotch tape age wise mentally through the last 3/4 of PH. In the epilogue she becomes an adult.
I do a study of characters so I understand them and their motivations. It's easy for characters like BJ because the abundance of material. Boo is a little less defined because her personality is basically a copy and paste job of both BJ and discord. The best parts of both. I've been role playing as the boo character for the last 2 years. She's been my favorite character to work with. So a lot of the information that you don't have yet about Boo is stuff that's happened in role plays with her or tabletop role-playing games with her that I done with friends.

I also, have a head cannon for PH which I think is pretty interesting that kinda ties my oc version of Boo's story into this. So, there was a part in PH where blackjack meets boo where rampage and P21 are making their way through Saugines base (Hippocratic research I think) there was a part where they hear blackjack talking to them (after she fell down the elevator shaft) but she never did and it was never explained in the story. So I figured it was setup as a possible sequel where she goes back in time and sets up everything for all the heros, before her timeline ends and she ends up becoming the big villain for another future wasteland story yet to be written. To go with the trope "you live long enough that you see yourself become the villain." But I think before Somber could do that he got burnt out on life and all the negativity that comes with writing stories on the Internet as you can see with my reviews. I'm not writing for other people I'm writing for myself and the story I want to tell. I can't be bothered with unconstructive criticism such as an up and down thumb system. If people enjoy my story then I am happy to continue writing it. And even if they don't like my story well they don't have to read it. But I'm going to write it anyways.

As a writer that's all you can do. You'll find the people who like it and then you'll get trolls. Or you'll run up against people whose head Cannon is a lot different than yours and dislike it because it's different than theirs and that's fine too. Just tell the story you want to tell and if you have questions about characters then you know you can ask the original author or you can make s*** up.

I'm going to get a lot of hate for the latter part of this story I know already from the hazbin hotel/hellva boss fans because we (my group) RPed and messed with shit from that universe. It all stems from a TTRPG called tales from the floating vagabond. We took ideas from all these things we love and mashed them together to the best ways we could while trying to keep characters as cannon as possible. At least I try and keep the group as cannon as I can. Sometimes for the story you gotta go a little off the rails ina believable way.

Sorry if I went a bit overboard here I tend to ramble on when Im tired.

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okay. Frankly, with how long it is, I kinda struggle anyway to remember what happens when in PH

not gonna lie i saw the name boo and thought it was the mario ghost

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Ah, hahah. But yeah I might throw in a mario reference too. Boo was named for another reason though.