Slow down, chief! You raced through this story, moving events and interactions along so fast that they ended almost before they began. This isn't even quite what I'd call a story, moreso a blisteringly brief summary of a collection of events. It needed more substance to sustain a narrative, and you unfortunately did not seem to be able to provide that. Even still, you earn points for a good ship that really hits on the types of things I like.

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