Sorry but I just can't with this fic. I normally don't make comments like this, but we are 4 chapters in and the supposed MC hasn't even met the Royal Family yet. More than that, his presence is practically non existent. Like he doesn't even feel like the MC at all.
This is not a crossover fic, this is a clopfic with futas, rape, mindbreak and other genres that I don't like. It isn't even mentioned in the summary. The summary is practically false advertisment as it doesn't give any indications or warning of what you are getting into reading this fanfic, there needs to be more tags, like the Fetish tag, to indicate that this is directed to a specific audience with this fetish. Most fanfics that include elements like this have Warnings at the bottom of the summary, because most people get uncomfortable when reading stuff like this, if they aren't into it.
You might then think, "Well then, this fic is not for you." And you're right, it's not for me, but when reading the summary, there was nothing telling me what I was getting into. The porn and sex tag was it, but that is not enough. When I read the summary, I was expecting a story about a lost boy getting adopted by the Royal Family and have multiple anthro mares, without dicks, be obsessed with him. We have gotten nothing of that so far.
Done with this fic, have a good day and hope that this didn't upset or offend anyone, because that was not my intention. Just my opinion.
"No we can't. Izak is next door and Sunset told us not to have sex around him till she's able to ease him into how things work here," Ingigo Zap said taking off her clothes.
Even IF Sunset "eases" him. I doubt that Izak will like being in the center of a sex orgy of very giant ponies with huge frickin cocks. That will raise some red flags on the teen himself.
You have read my mind on some of the criticisms that this story is now starting to have for me. But, I actually not bailing out yet. I still want to see where this goes. To to the author himself. I think you should listened to KarasAdamas's amazing criticism.
I mean, this is more Sunset's, her horny guards ( The Shadowbolts ), and her very super horny royal family's story than Izak's ( The human kid that is SUPPOSED to be the MC or the most important in here??!! ).
Okay, teen! Maybe that's because you keep saying "boy" or "young man", instead of a guy, teenage boy, or a young adult. And he literally has a mentally of a young child, because he doesn't know certain things. ( Then again, he is from a very isolated village, but still. )
PLUS, you didn't actually tell us his own age or anything.
And despite being a bit older like you said. That still doesn't change that being in a middle of very huge ponies with massive dicks can raise huge red flags in his brain!
P.S. What do you have against the Dazzlings?! I mean, this is like the second time you turned them into mindless sex slaves, and be brutally raped a lot. I am not ignoring that they tried to do a "bitch move" against Sunset and her family.
But for one: I THOUGHT they were best pals with Sunset before?! Why the Hell did they betray her, and her rather OP royal family by trying to mind control them??!! I mean, facing SIX Alicorns ( Three of them the "dark" counterparts, and the other three "light/normal" versions. ), and a powerful Unicorn ( Sunset ) that is highly intelligent, and even has a practical view and a common sense mindset for her own good.
This is a no brainer that trying to "control" this kind of ponies is such the most idiotic, and stupid thing to do. And the Dazzlings aren't THAT f******* stupid or dumb to do that. Alas, you made them do it anyway. They obviously lost, and got severely punished that I think is just too much for even them.
I mean, it doesn't help Sunset's moral character or her royal family by constantly raping Sunset's former friends ( The Dazzlings ) to sexual oblivion. Again, I am not ignoring that the Dazzlings tried to stupidly betray them.
I just think that what Sunset and her own Alicorn Family is doing to all three of them is no different to what King Dainn and his nasty Caribou are doing to the Ponies themselves, and other Non-Pony females in "Fall of Equestria" universe. Or the Zebras in the "Zebra Dominance" version of it.
You didn't think about that, huh?
Plus, is Twilight and the rest of the Mane Six gonna be ignored, becoming side characters, or even downright hated by Sunset for petty reasons again?!
11039170 Also the fact that in the anime of To Your Eternity the young boy that appears is called young boy even if he does look to be old enough to live on his own and that seeing how long ago in the past the setting takes place in. What we consider to be the right age to be having sex and stuff isn't what happen back in the past seeing how hard it is to live to your 20's and parents having lots of children is needed as you didn't know if all of them could live to their adult years.
Okay, good points. And I didn't even watch that particular anime or read the manga anyway. So, I don't actually know what Izak really looks like. ( Until I googled and also look at the wiki today, and finally saw him what he looks like. ).
But still, even IF he comes from a very ancient historic earth setting. And he could still have sex to a "young age" due to ancient times and certain "circumstances" back then.
Every human guy/man ( Especially a normal guy/male/man with NO Super Powers, NO Magic, NO Training, NO Special Abilities, NO very OP Spiritual Abilities like KI or Chakra, or even NO Advanced Technological Weapons like Guns, Armor, or even a FRICKIN Military Vehicle that can help defend himself. ) will still be very intimidated, and scared shitless by very huge, gigantic pony ladies that can easily crush him. Has OP Magic Powers that can easily atomized you to death, and they can also create huge humanly impossible dicks/cocks. And they are all SUPER HORNY too, 24/7!!!!
And it doesn't help that since you are a normal human guy in a foreign alien world/land. You got this "mysterious sexual and lustful scent" that make things much worse to your own health and possible virginity. And make them all Super, Duper Horny, just because they are all females and you are just one "exotic" male/guy ( Being a Human ), and because other "reasons".
You know, this very particular "Lustful/Sexual Scent" on the Human Male Protagonist ( Like Izak ) on these "types" of stories in here is a very common, BUT overused, typical, and cliche trope done to death!!!!!! It's like instead of beating a dead horse with a stick or baseball bat. We are now using FRICKIN MACHINE GUNS, GATLING GUNS, TANKS, JETS, ROCKETS, and even NUKES by now on the poor possibly immortal/indestructible corpse of the horse.
I'm sorry if I'm ranting by now. But, why/how/when do certain male characters like Izak for example. Have this particular "scent" when they get teleported to Equestria in the first place? Like they were unintentionally sprayed a permanent love/lust potion on themselves without knowing?!
Is it something in our own human genes that highly affects ponies, and possibly the other races in Equestria or something??!!
This is what I am trying to say the whole time. What do you think is going to happened in these types of scenarios??!!
And finally, considering that Sunset and her own Alicorn family aren't the "best" kind of people/ponies in a moral stand point. And the fact that Sunset didn't think twice to punish her former friends ( The Dazzlings ) of being sex slaves. What's stopping Sunset, the Shadowbolts, and her own royal family do the same sinful thing to poor Izak??!!
P.S. What do you have against the Dazzlings?! I mean, this is like the second time you turned them into mindless sex slaves, and be brutally raped a lot. I am not ignoring that they tried to do a "bitch move" against Sunset and her family.
But for one: I THOUGHT they were best pals with Sunset before?! Why the Hell did they betray her, and her rather OP royal family by trying to mind control them??!! I mean, facing SIX Alicorns ( Three of them the "dark" counterparts, and the other three "light/normal" versions. ), and a powerful Unicorn ( Sunset ) that is highly intelligent, and even has a practical view and a common sense mindset for her own good.
This is a no brainer that trying to "control" this kind of ponies is such the most idiotic, and stupid thing to do. And the Dazzlings aren't THAT f******* stupid or dumb to do that. Alas, you made them do it anyway. They obviously lost, and got severely punished that I think is just too much for even them.
I mean, it doesn't help Sunset's moral character or her royal family by constantly raping Sunset's former friends ( The Dazzlings ) to sexual oblivion. Again, I am not ignoring that the Dazzlings tried to stupidly betray them.
I just think that what Sunset and her own Alicorn Family is doing to all three of them is no different to what King Dainn and his nasty Caribou are doing to the Ponies themselves, and other Non-Pony females in "Fall of Equestria" universe. Or the Zebras in the "Zebra Dominance" version of it.
You didn't think about that, huh?
As for the Mane Six? I just hope that they can actually apologized for the misfire from the elements, and be real friends/allies to Sunset and her royal family.
And HOPEFULLY that some of them ( VERY Specifically Rainbow Dash, Applejack, or even Twilight ), if not all of them DON'T be racist/xenophobic against Izak because of "reasons". You do know what I am talking about?
Because this is another trope done to death in other stories I have previously read in here, and that I really hate to see.
There is one plot hole. If what your saying is "true", and can be that "easily"? Then why didn't that happened with Sunset in your Futa Equestria story?!
Plus, considering that Sunset is still her "naughty" self. I doubt her, or even her royal family will have the necessary time, or make a cure to help Izak. Because they are too horny and RAPEY anyway.
Okay, I read the new chapters to believe it. It's just it doesn't helped the ponies case that the only scenes that we see Sunset and her royal family in. Is making huge giant cocks, and raping their sex slaves. I mean, what makes them all no different than the Caribou or the Zebras that I previously mentioned?
Have you also seen what I said with the Mane Six? Or read KarasAdamas's comment? Because I did comment back to his too.
11039407 As for the deers and the zebras completely different setting and Sunset is making the ponies wear clothes to cover themselves so that there wouldn’t be as much sex going on. She and her family having sex with the dazzling is them taking care of all the stress of ruling
Love it keep it up
Sorry but I just can't with this fic. I normally don't make comments like this, but we are 4 chapters in and the supposed MC hasn't even met the Royal Family yet. More than that, his presence is practically non existent. Like he doesn't even feel like the MC at all.
This is not a crossover fic, this is a clopfic with futas, rape, mindbreak and other genres that I don't like. It isn't even mentioned in the summary. The summary is practically false advertisment as it doesn't give any indications or warning of what you are getting into reading this fanfic, there needs to be more tags, like the Fetish tag, to indicate that this is directed to a specific audience with this fetish. Most fanfics that include elements like this have Warnings at the bottom of the summary, because most people get uncomfortable when reading stuff like this, if they aren't into it.
You might then think, "Well then, this fic is not for you." And you're right, it's not for me, but when reading the summary, there was nothing telling me what I was getting into. The porn and sex tag was it, but that is not enough. When I read the summary, I was expecting a story about a lost boy getting adopted by the Royal Family and have multiple anthro mares, without dicks, be obsessed with him. We have gotten nothing of that so far.
Done with this fic, have a good day and hope that this didn't upset or offend anyone, because that was not my intention. Just my opinion.
hoping to see new chapter in the near future
Even IF Sunset "eases" him. I doubt that Izak will like being in the center of a sex orgy of very giant ponies with huge frickin cocks. That will raise some red flags on the teen himself.
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You have read my mind on some of the criticisms that this story is now starting to have for me. But, I actually not bailing out yet. I still want to see where this goes. To to the author himself. I think you should listened to KarasAdamas's amazing criticism.
I mean, this is more Sunset's, her horny guards ( The Shadowbolts ), and her very super horny royal family's story than Izak's ( The human kid that is SUPPOSED to be the MC or the most important in here??!! ).
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he's not a child or the kid from my hero
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Edit: Okay, I'm finally finished.
Okay, teen! Maybe that's because you keep saying "boy" or "young man", instead of a guy, teenage boy, or a young adult. And he literally has a mentally of a young child, because he doesn't know certain things. ( Then again, he is from a very isolated village, but still. )
PLUS, you didn't actually tell us his own age or anything.
And despite being a bit older like you said. That still doesn't change that being in a middle of very huge ponies with massive dicks can raise huge red flags in his brain!
P.S. What do you have against the Dazzlings?! I mean, this is like the second time you turned them into mindless sex slaves, and be brutally raped a lot. I am not ignoring that they tried to do a "bitch move" against Sunset and her family.
But for one: I THOUGHT they were best pals with Sunset before?! Why the Hell did they betray her, and her rather OP royal family by trying to mind control them??!! I mean, facing SIX Alicorns ( Three of them the "dark" counterparts, and the other three "light/normal" versions. ), and a powerful Unicorn ( Sunset ) that is highly intelligent, and even has a practical view and a common sense mindset for her own good.
This is a no brainer that trying to "control" this kind of ponies is such the most idiotic, and stupid thing to do. And the Dazzlings aren't THAT f******* stupid or dumb to do that. Alas, you made them do it anyway. They obviously lost, and got severely punished that I think is just too much for even them.
I mean, it doesn't help Sunset's moral character or her royal family by constantly raping Sunset's former friends ( The Dazzlings ) to sexual oblivion. Again, I am not ignoring that the Dazzlings tried to stupidly betray them.
I just think that what Sunset and her own Alicorn Family is doing to all three of them is no different to what King Dainn and his nasty Caribou are doing to the Ponies themselves, and other Non-Pony females in "Fall of Equestria" universe. Or the Zebras in the "Zebra Dominance" version of it.
You didn't think about that, huh?
Plus, is Twilight and the rest of the Mane Six gonna be ignored, becoming side characters, or even downright hated by Sunset for petty reasons again?!
11039170
Also the fact that in the anime of To Your Eternity the young boy that appears is called young boy even if he does look to be old enough to live on his own and that seeing how long ago in the past the setting takes place in. What we consider to be the right age to be having sex and stuff isn't what happen back in the past seeing how hard it is to live to your 20's and parents having lots of children is needed as you didn't know if all of them could live to their adult years.
The dazzle sisters did try to take over as for Twilight and the gang, I'll get to them when I get to them
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Edit: I'm done.
Okay, good points. And I didn't even watch that particular anime or read the manga anyway. So, I don't actually know what Izak really looks like. ( Until I googled and also look at the wiki today, and finally saw him what he looks like. ).
But still, even IF he comes from a very ancient historic earth setting. And he could still have sex to a "young age" due to ancient times and certain "circumstances" back then.
Every human guy/man ( Especially a normal guy/male/man with NO Super Powers, NO Magic, NO Training, NO Special Abilities, NO very OP Spiritual Abilities like KI or Chakra, or even NO Advanced Technological Weapons like Guns, Armor, or even a FRICKIN Military Vehicle that can help defend himself. ) will still be very intimidated, and scared shitless by very huge, gigantic pony ladies that can easily crush him. Has OP Magic Powers that can easily atomized you to death, and they can also create huge humanly impossible dicks/cocks. And they are all SUPER HORNY too, 24/7!!!!
And it doesn't help that since you are a normal human guy in a foreign alien world/land. You got this "mysterious sexual and lustful scent" that make things much worse to your own health and possible virginity. And make them all Super, Duper Horny, just because they are all females and you are just one "exotic" male/guy ( Being a Human ), and because other "reasons".
You know, this very particular "Lustful/Sexual Scent" on the Human Male Protagonist ( Like Izak ) on these "types" of stories in here is a very common, BUT overused, typical, and cliche trope done to death!!!!!! It's like instead of beating a dead horse with a stick or baseball bat. We are now using FRICKIN MACHINE GUNS, GATLING GUNS, TANKS, JETS, ROCKETS, and even NUKES by now on the poor possibly immortal/indestructible corpse of the horse.
I'm sorry if I'm ranting by now. But, why/how/when do certain male characters like Izak for example. Have this particular "scent" when they get teleported to Equestria in the first place? Like they were unintentionally sprayed a permanent love/lust potion on themselves without knowing?!
Is it something in our own human genes that highly affects ponies, and possibly the other races in Equestria or something??!!
This is what I am trying to say the whole time. What do you think is going to happened in these types of scenarios??!!
And finally, considering that Sunset and her own Alicorn family aren't the "best" kind of people/ponies in a moral stand point. And the fact that Sunset didn't think twice to punish her former friends ( The Dazzlings ) of being sex slaves. What's stopping Sunset, the Shadowbolts, and her own royal family do the same sinful thing to poor Izak??!!
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For the Dazzlings:
As for the Mane Six? I just hope that they can actually apologized for the misfire from the elements, and be real friends/allies to Sunset and her royal family.
And HOPEFULLY that some of them ( VERY Specifically Rainbow Dash, Applejack, or even Twilight ), if not all of them DON'T be racist/xenophobic against Izak because of "reasons". You do know what I am talking about?
Because this is another trope done to death in other stories I have previously read in here, and that I really hate to see.
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Nothing that some magical potions canr fix.
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There is one plot hole. If what your saying is "true", and can be that "easily"? Then why didn't that happened with Sunset in your Futa Equestria story?!
Plus, considering that Sunset is still her "naughty" self. I doubt her, or even her royal family will have the necessary time, or make a cure to help Izak. Because they are too horny and RAPEY anyway.
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Different setting and that Sunset was trying to become a alicorn not getting some other improvements
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Okay, good answer on your other story. But in this story?
I think you can read my comments again to get the full picture here. Because, I'm finally done typing and editing by now.
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They can control themselves with others who aren’t their sex toys. And with the only human in the story just wait to see
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Okay, I read the new chapters to believe it. It's just it doesn't helped the ponies case that the only scenes that we see Sunset and her royal family in. Is making huge giant cocks, and raping their sex slaves. I mean, what makes them all no different than the Caribou or the Zebras that I previously mentioned?
Have you also seen what I said with the Mane Six? Or read KarasAdamas's comment? Because I did comment back to his too.
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I get to them when I get to them
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As for the deers and the zebras completely different setting and Sunset is making the ponies wear clothes to cover themselves so that there wouldn’t be as much sex going on. She and her family having sex with the dazzling is them taking care of all the stress of ruling