Skimming through the story alone made it a BIT unappealing, you have the paragraphs but they don't really show, it all looks connected. Space it out a bit more, skimming makes it look like a somewhat wall of text not even my chopper can blast though. Story seemed to get straight to the point a little too quick. Other than that, the story idea is pretty alright. I'll look into chapter 2 tomorrow. Sometimes some things are predictable, I hope chapter 2 proves me wrong.

I love these kind of stories, but just a few things I think you could improve upon, your story feels as if its fast-forwarded, everything seems to be happening at once. Also you don't seem to describe very many things, the story flows more like a movie script than a story.javascript:smilie(''); So, just make your chapters a bit slower and more detailed, and they'd be perfect!
Otherwise, love the way this story is going!javascript:smilie('');

Yours is better than my zombie story. And I used the same cover photo. Still cool, though.

Noooooooo!!!!! Not the Doctor!!!