Our heroine gets sent to an alternate Equestria where things are not what they seem. Watch as we see our favorite characters react to human culture, food, and technology. All while ignoring the Demon Lord that is taking over the world.
10498473 I don't want to spoil so say what you want to see in spoiler cover and I'll give answer in spoiler cover. To use spoiler you click on the symbol with three lines where your typing settings are in the fimfiction type box. The grey box with SP is spoiler. Here is an actual spoiler for example: Alice will be able to craft potions for specific transformations using crafting and poison joke
Good lord this moves fast. We start with a small intro to the character, to isekai time, to introduction to royalty and the world, for the most part, being told all about her powers, and then to being handed a high position on a dime... and that's all in ONE CHAPTER!!! And then this one is intro to Dashy, party time, new home, then discovering how to use said abilities all within a couple of hours by the looks of things... Tip for everyone's sanity, slow down a lil bit, might keep more people on board. I know this may come out as rude, but I do not mean it that way, this is my opinion on the story and that the first chapter and this one had a lot of things happen, and not a lot of time to explain anything really... Hope you take this into consideration! I will keep an eye on it to see how it progresses though!
10498696 Just reread and you are absolutely right. I might go back and add some descriptions of surroundings. I'll keep my pacing in mind for other chapters. Thanks for the feedback and you were not rude, the pacing is to fast. I guess I'm to eager to get to certain parts of the story.
What kind of transformation?
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Right...
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Good lord this moves fast. We start with a small intro to the character, to isekai time, to introduction to royalty and the world, for the most part, being told all about her powers, and then to being handed a high position on a dime... and that's all in ONE CHAPTER!!! And then this one is intro to Dashy, party time, new home, then discovering how to use said abilities all within a couple of hours by the looks of things...
Tip for everyone's sanity, slow down a lil bit, might keep more people on board.
I know this may come out as rude, but I do not mean it that way, this is my opinion on the story and that the first chapter and this one had a lot of things happen, and not a lot of time to explain anything really...
Hope you take this into consideration!
I will keep an eye on it to see how it progresses though!
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Just reread and you are absolutely right. I might go back and add some descriptions of surroundings. I'll keep my pacing in mind for other chapters. Thanks for the feedback and you were not rude, the pacing is to fast. I guess I'm to eager to get to certain parts of the story.
I already like this because mc is a heroine. Iffy on the bdsm. I'm hoping for some yuri
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The bdsm will be consensual and there is definitely going to be yuri