5 years have passed sicen the hero of Toki Toki City/Conton City had dealt with Mira and has continue to train and had become strong enough to rival and even surpass the one and only Goku. But what happens when you put someone that strong in MLP?
A bit of work on grammar and usage of some words, like you used deer, instead of dear, and shocked her head, instead of shook her head, but overall a good story, i hope you continue this story :)
"Is it discord? No, this is more than anything we have ever seen, it is even almost as big as NIgh... I must know what this power is and see what this..."thing" is"
Almost as big as who? Nightmare Moon? Actually, Celestia and Luna aren't even 139 in terms of power levels, and neither is Nightmare Moon. Roshi is, and he blew up the moon. With all Equestria's magic, Tirek was stated to have only been capable of being able to blow up the continent of Equestria in the comics.
A bit of work on grammar and usage of some words, like you used deer, instead of dear, and shocked her head, instead of shook her head, but overall a good story, i hope you continue this story
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thanks, my dyslexia get's the best of me some times 😅
It's alright man, i like the story so far :)
Almost as big as who? Nightmare Moon? Actually, Celestia and Luna aren't even 139 in terms of power levels, and neither is Nightmare Moon. Roshi is, and he blew up the moon. With all Equestria's magic, Tirek was stated to have only been capable of being able to blow up the continent of Equestria in the comics.