The end and yet the beginning...
Hello and welcome. You are about to enter into a whole new world of knowledge, one of wonderments and others a bit unnerving.
That’s right, as you read on you shall be learning of the peculiar creatures known as Arrancar’s. Don’t worry though. If you’ve haven’t or have already meet some before reading this. They may look and sometimes act scary or mean or… never mind. Just don't be fooled by that, they are more than you’d first expect. Which is why when you delve deeper into your studies on Arrancar’s. Remember this. Never judge a book by it’s cover, who knows. Maybe you will even become the best of friends with one.
With that said, enjoy and learn what knowledge there is to come.
-Introduction to Arrancar’s- By Princess Twilight Sparkle-
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“How long….have I’ve been here?”
A woman wondered that, wondered and wondered. She had no idea why it had happened. No… she did. She and her race without even realizing until it was too late. Had been betrayed. Backstabbed, used. Thrown out like yesterday’s garbage. But THAT…man.
The man who gave them hope, gave them shelter, power and the needs to shape their lives for the better. All of them, even the most stubborn of them all had taken his words in the end as truth. But because of that, this woman now realized something. They had all died for no reason. Each of them were simple pawns for a cruel and manipulative monster.
“I should have seen it… I…. no, maybe I didn’t want to…”
Indeed. The woman knew she could yell and scream all she wanted to in her blinding fury. But in the end of it all, she knew that she’d deep down inside what she could call a soul. She prayed and wanted to believe in the man she’d pledged herself and her fraccion’s to. But it was to late and she feared for her fraccion’s life’s.
Even if they had been beaten down already when she’d last saw then. She had also felt their reiatsu. There and alive, if not weak. Now, the woman feared that without her there. Her dear fraccion’s would perish from their wounds or worse from the man who’d betrayed them. To be honest she’d hope if they did die it would be from their wounds. As she could only imagine what that man could or would do to those three. It was a harrowing thought.
Still the woman knew that worrying on it too much wouldn’t be helping her. No because right now she was still trying to figure out where she was at. Her eyes closed in some sort of instinctual fear of the unknow even to a being such as herself. It was understandable too. As she could feel her body floating like a leaf in the wind. She felt cold and warm all at once. She felt, well to be honest she couldn’t find the proper word. If anything, she’d say tranquil almost.
“If only I could move my body, that last battle took a lot of out of me. Though my stomach wound isn’t much help either. Damn him.”
So, as she floated and floated in the ever so unknown with her eyes closed. She did something she didn’t think she’d ever do, she prayed. Prayed like those humans in the early years of their races life did and even now so often. Using all she could to move her hands into a praying motion. Which she quickly learned was surprisingly painful. But the woman ignored the pain and cleared her throat. Doing the best on what only she thought would work for this prayer.
“I’ve never done this before. Why should I, for I feel as if a god or god’s were out there. They abandoned the humans so long ago. Us in turn before we had a chance to try and worship them. Still I… I don’t know who or what I’m praying too. If it’s veil in nature or pure. But I just…I…. I want some to hear. I hate to admit this but…. I don’t want to die…. I don’t. I don’t want them to died either, my dear girls. They did nothing wrong. Only what was needed to survive. By my teachings they did these acts… what I’m trying to say is that. Someone… please… save us….”
The woman though felt herself slipping out of it. Feeling her body getting somewhat colder even. Then colder and colder. Before feeling like she was sinking, her breathing getting harder and for her once she began to tear up. Tears of fear, confusion and even some acceptance.
“I guess this the end… the end of my path… I’m sorry girls… I should have… I…” The woman said through her breaths before her world went nearly dark. Her body sinking more and only her right arm left to sink. But as she was so close to the darkness overcoming her. She felt for a moment another’s hand grab her hand
Quickly feeling the sensation of being pull out and up. She coughed for moment before feeling two hands, a man holding her in bridal style. Then she finally opened her eyes. Seeing some much black and dark grey above her, but seeing the shadow of her savior looking down at her.
“W…Wh…Who….”
But the woman was near out of it by this point once more. Though she only got a vague if barley an answer at all from this enigma.
“Do not worry child. Rest and be ready. Hm… you my dear and your girls will sure make interesting ally to them. I can’t wait to see.”
With that the woman was out of it fully, darkness was the only thing she could see and the sounds around all but mute. She wondered though in the last seconds before she passed out, what was going to happen now…
-Everfree Forest-
It was another lovely night, the star shined above like a million night lights for the residents of this world. Though to those who do not know, unlike what some may think. This was special, a land of peace in many ways even if small battles and dangerous catastrophes occurred. All in all it was still such a wonderland.
A land full of mystical beings of many legends, all living with on another though some having more trouble the others races at times. Again it was at the core, still a land of true peace. Though out of all the races, one stood above as the most powerful. A race simply known as the Ponies. Three kinds know as the earth Ponies, the Unicorns and Pegasi. Creatures who most were more prone to love, acceptance and the magic of friendship. But they and the races though part of this world’s history in many wonderful ways. We’re not our hero’s. No our hero’s to be were right now walking through the dark Everfree forest. A group of six children of these various races, who’d become quite close in the short few weeks they’d gotten to know each other.
One was a Hippogriff, another a griffon, the third an earth pony, the fourth a being known as a changeling, the fifth a Yak and the last being a dragon. An unlikely group most outsiders would say upon seeing them, but a group of friend’s no doubt. Though as they walked down the grassy ground of this forest. Aside from a few, the others were less than thrilled.
“C-Can we please go back now. Please…” The changeling asked, that of it being female
She was the smallest of the six creature group, with a light sky blue shell. Small red wings like a lady bugs and big blue bug eyes. She also had a transparent man of sort and a tail looking more bug like then anything else. This was Ocellus, a shy but sweet child. Who mostly liked to read and was what most would consider so far the logical one of the group. Mainly in situations like these, situations the young Changeling had no idea how she was coaxed… again into going along with.
“Y-Yeah. This place is giving me the creep more than ever and we’ve been in here before during the day.” The Hippogriff quickly pleaded a girl herself and was in total agreement with Ocellus
This Hippogriff was one of the average sized of the group. Her purple-pink feather coat stuck out in the darkness, along with her purple eyes, aqua blue and sky blue tinted mane. Her tail sporting the same color. But unlike the others, she had a set of clawed hands, talon feet, a small break and feathery ears. This was Silverstream, a sweet and gentle soul if not… well she was also a bit of an airhead. But a well-meaning and loving airhead.
“Well I’m not scared. Big stupid forest doesn’t scare me!!” Another of the females cheered instead of feeling the dread this particular forest usually gave it’s intruders
She was Yak, the largest of her group. She oddly gave of an aura of innocents. Rather from just how childlike she still was or maybe she wasn’t the brightest tool in the shed. Either way she despite her large frame covered in brown thick long fur, braided brown mane, big brown eyes and her two small horns. She was a gentle as they came, she even wore a little green scarf, only adding to her innocent appearance. She was Yona, again one of the sweeter; but also braver of her friends.
“Yona’s right. This forest ain’t nothing. I’ve seen bugs back at home scarier than this place!!” The last of the female’s boasted, like Yona had
She was a dragon. With orange scales, a pale orange under side, pretty aqua blue eyes, a purple fin, a purple fin at the end of her tail, wings, claws, a small tooth poking from under her upper lip and two large pale orange horns coming from the side of her head. This was Smolder, the more sarcastic and even at times blunt friend. But so far she’d showed in her own way she cared for the others dearly. Even if she would always tease them or even insult them at times. It was a gesture of affection.
“Yeah Smolder and Yona are right girls. Nothing to be worried about so just chill.” The only one of two males replied kindly
He was the only pony of the group, an earth pony to be exact. With a lime green coat, a seaweed green semi-grown out mane, short sea weed green tail, light green eyes and an image on his flank of three sea turtles. This was Sandbar, the chill and calm one usually of the group. Along with the one to so far keep everyone from arguing with each other whenever it came to that.
Silverstream herself seemed to calm down a little from that at least, looking around and having to admit. The forest even though having a not so great reputation. Could see, with the full moon shinning over them and the forest; it looked rather peaceful.
“Hehe… I guess so. Gallus a-are you feeling okay?”
The other male that Silverstream addressed, was a griffon. With a yellow beak and clawed hands. He was a shade of ocean blue, blue eyes, with a tanned under coat and three pointed feather hair piece with yellow tips. He also had a pair of dark navy blue wings and a large navy blue patch of fur on the tip of his tail. But that was because of his half lion appearance from the back with a set of two paws for his legs. He was what most would call the male version of Smolder when it came to sarcasm and bluntness at times. But like Smolder, he’d showed so far in his own way. Did it as a show of affection towards his friends.
“Yeah totally cool. I mean not like this place scares me or anything. Beside like Silver said we’ve been here before. So why should we be scared?”
Though Smolder and Ocellus at least noticed his hands were slightly shaking as he addressed them, maybe it was because he was bit nervous being in the famed Everfree forest at night again. Though neither wanted to bring it up. Gallus they knew was proud one in his own way and they respected him enough to not try to shatter his confidence.
Sandbar himself, wondered though on why they were even out here like Ocellus was. He remember coming back to the room with Yona, Ocellus and Smolder walking alongside him. All of them ready for bed after a long day of helping their professors after class. Only for the to enter their dorm room to see Gallus and Silverstream had started saying something about going into the forest on the outskirts of the town of Ponyville.
So now, looking to Silverstream at least. He found it a bit amusing that she was one of the more scared of their group even if now she seemed a bit calmer. Thanks to his helpful words he’d guessed. “Hey Silver, can I ask. But why are we out here?”
“Well… Gallus?”
“Right.” Gallus replied waving her off as they just kept on walking down the pathway before them “Why you ask. To be honest it’s because of an indecent an hour ago me and Silver had witnessed.”
The others just looked at one another, confused by what Gallus meant by incident. Then looked to Silverstream who sighed a bit.
“Well it’s was more of a surprise. It’s started like this…”
-1 hour ago: The School Of Friendship-
It had been a slightly longer day than usual for Silverstream. Who was tired more then she usually was around this time of day. Granted school was so much more fun now in the few weeks they’d been back. Well that and their teachers were super cool too. Though it did help that they’d been able to stop a possible war of nations thanks to their little stunt of running away. Long story… but why Silverstream was more tired today. Was because she’d actually help one of her professors. Professor Fluttershy with demonstrations with some of the animals she brought in today.
It was fun she wasn’t going to not deny that, but Silverstream never realized that making sure the animals behaved could be so tiring. Didn’t help with a bunny Fluttershy called Angel making it a bit harder for her too. She swore that rabbit was just messing with her for fun, that or maybe it was because she’d accidently stepped on him when she and Professor Fluttershy were taking the animals from her cottage to the school earlier that day. It wasn’t like she meant too, but it seemed she’d made an enemy. A small, fluffy enemy out of the bunny.
Still she couldn’t wait to get back into her room and relax. Though unlike the other students. She, Smolder, Ocellus, Yona, Sandbar and Gallus all shared on dorm room. Girls on one side and boys on the others. Though there were some obvious worries having two boys and four girls living in the same room. The six youths had convinced them that nothing would happen. I mean sure they were getting close to becoming adolescents this year. But it’s not like they would do anything like…that with each other. Silverstream a few moments later finally getting to her dorm, grabbed the handle and couldn’t help but chuckle a bit at that thought.
“I mean we usually are in the room together in threes, fours or all. So what are the chances I’ll end up alone with one of the boys. That’s just-” Silverstream muttered in amusement, opening the door only… only to see Gallus in the room reading a comic book “Silly…”
Gallus meanwhile having been reading his comic, heard the door open and looked up seeing Silverstream. Who was wide eyed, before he became wide eyed himself.
The sudden realization coming to him like a Griffon to an all you can eat meat buffet. He was alone…ALONE in a room with a girl. His friend yes, but a girl…a cute girl he’ll admit too. Gallus knew he to act quickly if not to be overcome by the curse he’d called his early stage of adolescent hormones. He didn’t want to do something he’d regret. –“Okay, okay what would um…um… what would Grandpa Gruff say in a situation like this!!!”-
-“Gallus, just remember if you ever meet a female you feel ahem…special towards. Just walk up to her, turn her around, bend her over and f-“-
-“No, no, NO… why Grandpa Gruff did you even suggest that!?… Alright ah… um… oh what would Gilda say!!”-
-“MATE, MATE WITH THE FEMALE. DO WHAT I CAN NEVER DO TWERP. SO FU-“-
-“NO, GILDA WHY. WHY DID YOU TELL ME THAT… man not good either. Okay um… Gabby, Gabby I’m sure she’d had some good advice for me…what was it again??”-
-“You can do it, do it. Love that girl and do it. I know you can yay!!”-
-“Okay despite the good natured advice. NO… and now I’m just realizing I may have not had the best influences in my early life. Aside from Gabby.”-
Though as he thought and though, hoping to Celestia that he’d been able to figure out how to deal with this situation. He felt a quick tap on his shoulder, flinching as he looked seeing Silverstream looking back at him. Smiling a bit awkwardly. Gallus doing the same a second later.
“S-So Gallus…um w-what are you doing here?”
Silverstream gave him a big smile, which made it even more awkward as she grabbed Gallus other shoulder; her right eye twitching just a little.
“Me oh ah….ah…reading, reading a lot. You know first test of the year coming. But I thought I earned some time to read a few comics before bed and ah…” Gallus replied. Trying to find the best way to get out of this. But it was late at night and he knew they couldn’t be out of their dorm after 10:00. “I um… hey where are the others?”
“Oh them ah… coming here I’m guessing. I mean it’s I think 9:39 so you know.”
“Yeah…yep…”
Silverstream did hope though the others would get here soon. Her mind was already filling with questionable scenarios that could happen right now. She could feel her face warming up from how perverse her thoughts were becoming. She may not have been the smartest and an air head, but she wasn’t that foolish. That and her parents were smart enough to tell her the acts of sexual intercourse. Mainly so she wouldn’t try to figure it out here at the school, which was understandable.
Still, Silverstream was just doing her best to not blush or make a face that would give Gallus the wrong idea. Not that she though he’d do anything unsavory to her. But she just didn’t want to make things awkward, well anymore awkward then it was right now. Especially since they’d only meet a few weeks ago. But as she was internally freaking out herself. Gallus noticed her lack of focus and saw this as he chance to book it, at least until he knew the others were in the room.
“WELL… I’m going to go for a quick walk so see you in a-” Gallus had begun to quickly say, doing his best to push back Silverstream who was snapped out of her trance. Feeling Gallus grab her left arm, which in her current mind set did not help with her worrisome assumptions since again she had no experience in these situations at all.
“BAD TOUCH!!!”
Silverstream quickly grabbed Gallus and threw him over her, but she wasn’t adept in the arts of hand to hand combat. So her attack was more of a sloppy grab as the two crashed into one another. A few books on the edge of the bed Ocellus slept in falling over on the ground. A few seconds past as silence took over the room, but only for a few moments.
“Jeez, Silver what was that foooo…..r…” Gallus asked having rubbed the top of his head as he pushed himself up a bit. Only to realize what had just happened, as he found himself on top of Silverstream
But it wasn’t that simple. No Silverstream was below him, facing him as she’d landed on her back. What made it worse, was that Gallus accidently looked down and caught quite a sight of Silverstream’s… privates. Also it didn’t help that his crouch already was against hers. Gallus didn’t feel any better when he looked back at a for once silenced Silverstream who was red in the face from embarrassment. which in turn only made him feel even more embarrassed himself.
Gallus though was too shocked to think of just moving off, as his mind was flooding with way too many private thoughts right now. He cursed these hormones of his, cursed them as he tried to speak. “S-Silver um I ah… oh…”
Gallus quickly stopped as he felt something beginning to react to this situation. The worst kind of reactions from his ‘little’ buddy. –“No, no, no stop. Stop bad hormones no!!!!”-
“G-Gallus what’s…” Silverstream asked, a bit worried seeing Gallus pupils shrink from some form of fear. Until she felt something down there start pushing. She went wide eyed too realizing what was possibly going to happen, but in her own shock she couldn’t move or push the shocked Gallus off
-“No. No not like this with a guy I’ve only know for a while!!!”-
-“Come on stop, stop you stupid pecker. STOP!!!”-
-“Oh god, oh god why is my heart starting to race am…am I liking this?!?!”-
-“Why am I not moving, why. Move, move before I do something to Silver I don’t want to do!!!!”-
But despite this, their bodies weren’t moving. As their minds were in too much of a panic to realizing the simple solution to this. The very… VERY simple solution to this.
-“No!!”-
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-“No!!!”-
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-“NO GALLUS STOP!!!/ NO SILVER I’M SORRY!!!”-
(WHOOSH!!!!!!)
A loud shockwave echoed passed their room, shocking the two off one another. Both of them quickly looking to the window seeing a blue fire ball crash down somewhere in the Everfree forest. Right past Professor Fluttershy’s cottage. As a small fiery boom exploded, before the blue flames disappeared from sight. Gallus and Silverstream staring at where the ball of blue fire crashed, then back at each other. Then two quickly flinched away from each other.
“S-So did you just see that?” Gallus asked nervously, hoping Silverstream didn’t think he meant for THAT to happen; he wasn’t that kind of Griffon
To his credit, Silverstream just rubbed her left arm shyly looking at him and closing her legs a bit. But not in a way that told him, she didn’t think he was trying to do that to her. But more that she just need some time to get passed what just happened. That it was an honest mistake between them, but that again she wasn't accusing him of anything.
“Silver?”
“Y-Yeah… what was it?” Silverstream asked in a slight hushed tone, which in a sense made Gallus uneasy. Even if she didn’t blame him for what could have just happened seconds ago
But Gallus quickly began to ponder on Silverstream’s question. Mostly so he wouldn’t have to deal with the uneasy feeling in his gut. Still to be honest he knew already, that he couldn’t call it a meteor. No it was a ball of blue fire, pure blue fire that had kept itself together long enough to crash “To be honest Silver. I don’t know…but we should go check it out.”
“Yeah…maybe we should.” Silverstream replied sweetly. In a way to help her slowly get past her own uneasy gut feeling. Smiling a bit more at the idea “You know what that does sound fun. Yeah, but maybe we should-”
Though as she was about to say more, Silverstream was interrupted as Ocellus, Yona, Sandbar and Smolder came in looking a bit tired themselves. Smolder being the first one to immediately notice the odd tension in this room. She couldn’t help but smirk a bit.
“Hey you two… what’s up?”
Gallus credit to him again could tell what Smolder was gunning for. Raising an eyebrow at the dragons subtle question of insinuation. “Nothing much. Just talking Smolder. That and star gazing.”
“Really?” Smolder quipped, looking at Silverstream “Silver?”
Silver for her part also was quick enough to realize Smolder was already wondering and was able to answer appropriately “Oh yeah totally. Just that nothing else honest silly!!”
Smolder just raised an eyebrow, the others giving her a slightly confused gaze at what was going on with her. But just let it be, learning already Smolder was just Smolder and that was that.
Sandbar himself just sighed, feeling his own fatigue starting to catch up as he really needed to go to bed. Like he really…REALLY wanted to just lay down. He decided to take control so he could get just that “Look, let’s just get to bed. It’s getting l-”
But Gallus quickly cut him off by placing his clawed hand over the ponies mouth. Smiling and doing a quick chuckle. “Sorry Sandbar. No can do. Me and Silver are going out for a bit.”
“Out, out where at this time Gallus?” Ocellus asked curiously as Silverstream move up closer to Gallus
“The Everfree forest.”
The others let out a quick gap’s at the statement. They all knew that they were not allowed in the Everfree forest. Especially at night and especially without any of the professors to act as a guide when they had to go in for one reason or another. So why now of all times was extremely confusing. Yona being the first to express this.
“Why friends Gallus and Silver go to forest at night. Forest not scary to me, but we may get in trouble. Big, big trouble!!”
“Yeah and not even including all the creatures that lurk in their at night. Are you two crazy?!?!” Ocellus added in. As she just wanted these two to forget the idea and stay safe, Smolder herself even felt the same way
“I gotta agree. Look I ain’t scared of that place myself. But I’d rather not get in trouble at school or at least deal with getting scolded. That can get really irritating.”
But before anymore objections could be said, Gallus and Silverstream just made their way passed by them, then out of the door. Ocellus, Yona, Smolder and Sandbar quickly following as they watched the two walk further and further away down the dark hallway. But Gallus knew a good trick to get at them to come along.
“You know, I get what you mean by you don’t want to get in trouble. But me and Silver would feel much safer if you all came with us. I mean how fun can it be just with two of us.”
“Yeah. We’d have a higher chance of making it back here too if you came with us. But if you all want to stay here…”
Silverstream surprisingly caught on and played along, shrugging as seconds later. She and Gallus could hear the others quickly catching up.
Though as that occurred, Gallus couldn’t help but smile at Silverstream for her daring move. Silverstream smiled back, already taking a guess that Gallus liked what she did. But they all stayed in calm silence, continuing their way off to the Everfree forest.
-Present-
“And that’s why we’re out here. Simple as that.” Gallus finished explain to the others, though leaving out the more…private parts of what had occurred between him and Silver before they arrived. No need to start any sort of rumors
The others just let it sink in. They hadn’t realized that a ball of blue fire crashed into the Everfree forest. But were more confused on how none of them or anyone else had heard it pass by. Though those question were best saved for later. Sandbar being the first to reply back from this news.
“Okay. That makes sense I guess. So what do you think it could be?”
Gallus and Silver stream just shrugged. Honestly having no clue on what it come be or even begin to figure it out. It was just a mystery they’d need to figure out before they got there. Smolder though felt the need to answer.
“Personally Sandbar. I’m thinking it’s aliens from another planet. Super cool aliens or better yet a alien super hero!!” Smolder exclaimed with a wide smile of held back excitement, that got a laugh of the other’s; but Ocellus felt the she need to put in her own two bits now
“You’re reading way too many comics Spike leant you Smolder. Still if you want my opinion I think it’s just a space rocks. Nothing more, nothing less. Just nature.”
“Yona find your answer silly. Yona agree with Smolder. It must be aliens!!!”
That got another small laugh in the group. It helped with the fact they were in a forest notorious for danger, still it became silent once again. So very silent. But a comforting one as they walked on and on. Happy the moon shining above gave them natural light along with the stars. Though after what felt like another hour. Suddenly Silverstream stopped, making everyone else stop all of sudden. Yona being the first to ask.
“Silverstream are you-”
But as she asked, they heard a growl. A low, primal and vicious growl. The six youths looking slowly to their right. Looking into the darkness of the forest in that direction. They just stood still. Hearts racing and fear slowly arising as they saw a pair of green eyes pop within the darkness. Then looking to see a wooden wolf walking slowly to them. It was a Timberwolf, usually an easily fought creature alone. Unless it was in a pack.
Unfortunately for the six youths, as their fear only increased . Why, because they saw behind the first Timber Wolf. A second pair of green eyes pop up, then a third, fourth, fifth, sixth, seventh and eighth. Eight Timber wolfs in total. Each one looking hungry, extremely hungry. The six youths moving back slowly by pure instinct to survive, as the Timber Wolfs closed in.
“W-What do we do??” Ocellus whispered in a plead. Praying to whatever would listen to save them, tears of panic threatening to follow as her heart beat went faster and faster by the second
“Run…” Sandbar quickly replied, as he’d heard stories of survivors when it came to Timber wolf pack encounters… at least what he could remember that is
The others quickly looked at him, wide eyed at the suggestion that they should run. All the while they were realizing they’d be hitting the forest brush to their right if they backed up anymore. Which would make it even harder to for them if they did. Smolder being the one though to address what they all were feeling.
“W-What are you crazy Sandbar?!?!”
But the Timber wolfs growled even louder and fierce. Barring their wooden fangs now and looking like they were getting gutsier. The fact was clear to the six youths, if they didn’t do anything. They were going to be eaten alive and die most likely a horrifically slow death. Sandbar though didn’t know what else to say back to Smolders question.
“I SAID RUN!!!!” Sandbar screamed, as the first Timber wolf being the alpha lunged at them. The six youths quickly running down the pathway they were following anyways. Yona being the last t run, barely dodging being mauled by the alpha who feel into the bushes instead as she ran with all her might
Quickly getting out the bush, the alpha growled before commencing the chase. The seven others in the pack following behind not even a second later.
“CRAP, CRAP WHAT WE DO!!!” Smolder screamed as she, Ocellus, Gallus and Silverstream were gliding. Most would say they could just lift up Sandbar and Yona. But they knew even together they weren’t strong enough to lift up the two in their current state of fatigue. Gliding was all they could really do. Gallus was the only one to give Smolder any sort of answer
“Just keep running and don’t look back!!!!”
Ocellus without even realizing or hearing Gallus warning. Did look back though. Seeing the pack of eight Timber wolf right on their tail and closing in closer by the second.
Ocellus could only scream at the top of her lungs, fear driving her mind now as she looked back ahead “I LOOKED BACK. DEAR CELESTIA I LOOKED BACK!!!”
“THAT’S WHY I SAID NOT TOO!!!” Gallus scolded as just hearing the hunger filled barks was enough to make his skin crawl
But sadly the six youths even with their best to try and find the way back into Ponyville. Having done a few turns and some back peddling even. Ended up at a dead end. Facing a large cliff side that blocked their path. Then seeing it was actually a large circular cliff side. Which had been hard to spot until now thanks to the trees around them. The six youths looking back also seeing they were now in a large dirt field. The Timber wolfs like before slowly walking up to them. Panting a bit from the chase, but even more hungry as they started to formed a half circle around the six youths.
“This isn’t good.” Gallus muttered as he, Ocellus, Yona, Silverstream, Sandbar and Smolder huddled up next to one another. Gallus taking in a deep breath as he looked to his friends “I-I know we only meet a while ago. But… you guys are my best friends and I’m sorry I got us stuck in this mess.”
Silverstream herself tearing up a little, as she found no way out and her wings were too tired at the moment to fly up even if she tried “Same. Super-duper same…”
Yona herself looked scared for once as she knew even with her size and natural strength. The Timber wolfs were smart enough to take her down quickly. Smolder must have though the same, as the dragon knowing she could burn them. Also knew if she tried too much at this current state of being. She would tire herself out, that and like Yona. Smolder could tell these monsters already were planning on taking her out first or second. Looking to her left she saw Ocellus crying now as she was too stunned to use her shape shifting powers to scare the beasts away.
“I…I…I…I…don’t want to die….please no….” Ocellus pleaded in whimpers, fear of the inevitable slow deaths she and her friends would endure now. But out of all of them, Sandbar seeing a sharp branch. Took it in his mouth and stood in front of the others
The others were a bit surprised by the sudden action of the pony, Yona being the one to address it though as she couldn’t help but feel a slight odd feeling all of sudden seeing his brave if not suicidal action.
“Sandbar, no you’ll die!!!”
“Maybe, but if I do maybe you five can get out of here.” Sandbar answered as he was in a controlled panic watching every one of the Timber wolfs
Who all were at this point coming in much slower seeing that one of their meals were actually getting ready to fight back. But Sandbar knew what he had to do, if only to get his friends out alive as he narrowed his eyes, snorting and ready for a fight as he glared right at the Alpha. Who in some way realized Sandbar was challenging it and growled barring it’s teeth fully by this point.
Sandbar for his part scared though. Was happy his plan was already working as he kept his glare on the Alpha who was getting more aggressive by the second “I ain’t got all night. Come on, COME ON YOU STUPID PILE OF TWIGS!!!”
The alpha seeing the aggressiveness of Sandbar growled at its loudest before lunging at the pony. Who himself charged at the same time, ready to kill for the first time in his life if he had too. While the others watched in utter horror realizing that Sandbar was really going through with his suicidal plan to save them.
“SANDBAR!!!” The other five youths screamed as they could see the Alpha was already going to win, it’s jaw closer to Sandbars left side of his neck; then Sandbars sharp branch to its chest to impale the creatures heart. Though they also noticed, Sandbar was looking at them, using his right eye to convey them a message that only made it worse
-“Bye guys, thanks… thanks for being my friends…”-
But as the Alpha was ready to maul Sandbar and devour the soon to be dead pony. Something happened. A suddenly burst of wind pasted in between the two as Sandbar halted just like that from the feeling. While the Alpha flew past Sandbar into the ground. It’s body lying motionless as it’s severed head landed near it. Green glowing blood seeping from the exposed neck wound.
Though none of six youth paid much mind to that. As their sights, along with the now seven Timber wolfs sights; were upon the sudden appearance of the strangest creature either side had seen. The one standing in front of an awe struck Sandbar.
The being was bipedal like minitour. Hairless aside from the blonde braided hair, had dark skin and wore a few different articles of clothing all in white with tinted black on it. The beings back and part of its thighs showed too. It also held a sword in its right hand. One that looked so elegant yet deadly all at the same time.
Silence though shrouded the area for a few seconds. The Timber wolfs backing up just a bit seeing their alpha killed so easily and not able to reform back as their species was known to do. While the six youths just kept staring in awe and shock of the being that just saved Sandbar and them all in turn. Then the being looked back at Sandbar.
“Child.” The being or woman said, as it’s tone was much more feminine then masculine. It was soft, yet stern, gentle yet dangerous all in one. But Sandbar and his friends couldn’t help but see this woman as beautiful. Even if her mouth was covered up by the cloth of its rather somewhat exposing jacket. Her blonde brows could be seen now along with her lovely green eyes. Eyes that spoke wisdom, as she looked down at Sandbar who finally was able to clear his throat
“Y-Yes miss…?”
The women herself seemed to have smiled for a moment, if the slight change in how her cheeks were could indicate anything. While she still stared at Sandbar, before she simply just patting him on the head. Sandbar confused even more by that.
“Good work.” The woman simply said, before looking back at the Timber Wolfs, who had yet to run away. More angered now of their Alpha’s death as they growled once more, about to lunge at this new fresh meal. But the woman seemed unfazed as she huffed “Move back to your kin little one. I will handle this.”
Without a chance to argue, the woman quickly charged at the Timber wolfs who lunged at her. While Sandbar got back up, moving back to the others. All of them too shocked by what was happening now. Though Gallus was the only one to even think of asking Sandbar something.
“Sandbar…”
Sandbar to his credit, heard even though he was already entranced by the fight going on between their savior and the Timber wolfs. “Y-Yeah dude?”
“What… the… heck… is that thing?” Gallus asked. Though got no answer as he, Ocellus, Silverstream, Yona, Sandbar and Smolder simply just watched the battle or to be more honest the one sided slaughter
The women meanwhile, had grabbed one of the Timber wolfs by the neck with her bare hands. Narrowing her eyes before crushing it’s wooden neck to splinters as it’s body feel dead from the immense damage. Then the woman dodged two more of the Timber wolfs that lunged at her. Before pivoting her foot around and impaling a third Timber wolf through its wooden chest and through its beating heart. To make sure it was a solid kill, the women even twisted her blade a bit as the Timber wolf whimpered in agony before falling dead too.
But as she quickly straighten herself up. One of the reaming five Timber wolfs was able to get a bite on right her arm. The six youths gasping a bit, not from the attack itself. But the fact the woman seemed unharmed and unfazed by the fact it’s teeth had broken slightly while others barley were embedded in her flesh. The woman only could scoff as she brought the now terrified Timber wolf closer to her face.
“Pathetic, Starrk the lazy oaf he was. Was ten times the wolf then you will be foolish creature of wood. May this give you a swift death though. That much you’ve earned for being so daring.” The woman calmly stated, raising her left hand that began to form a blue glow. Before a beam of pure blue energy shot out. Burning the Timber wolf alive, but so quickly that once the beam was gone. The remains fell over, a large charred hole where the poor Timber wolfs head, neck, left side of its heart and left leg were gone just like that. The woman then looked at the last three now cowering Timber wolfs, slowly backing away in fear of this monster as she stared at them “Leave now or you will suffer the same fates as your kin.”
The three Timber wolfs though scared, were also still so hungry. But they couldn’t find the strength to attack as the woman’s glare sent fear through their animalistic minds, even if they stood their ground still. The woman seeing that these last three were stubborn. Just raised her left first and took a step towards the three Timber wolfs. Who quickly bolted away knowing they had failed. After a few seconds, sure that the were safe. The woman turned around. Looking now at the still in awe six youths. Sighing a little as she was worried she’d broke them, seething her sword. She cleared her throat.
“Are you okay?”
It was a simple question, but the six youths finally snapping out of it quickly flinched some. Almost freaking out, before calming down enough for at least one of them to respond. That one being Ocellus around this time. Who slowly moved a bit closer to the woman.
“Y-Yes miss…um…t-thank you…but who or what are you?” Ocellus asked in a fearful whisper, as the woman didn’t say anything. But knelt down suddenly, as Ocellus closed her eyes and feared the worst. Only to be surprised and confused when she felt a gentle pat on her own head
Opening her eyes back up. Ocellus noticed the woman was so calm still and patting her head for a few more seconds before standing back up. Letting out a small amused huff.
“Do not worry little one. I mean you and your kin no harm.”
Smolder now finally getting back to her sense, needed to reply back. She need some answered like right now after what she just saw “Well if you aren’t… then what are you to us??”
The woman just let out another amused huff, then a bit more of a laugh that was oddly cute despite what the six youths had just witnessed.
“Your guardian.” The woman simply answered, much to the confusion of the others at what she even meant by that or why. But before any could ask, the woman suddenly felt off and fell onto her knees “Damn..”
The others seeing this, quickly moved right up and around their savior. Concerned for her, which only got worse when they saw some blood pouring from her stomach.
“Oh my gosh. You’re injured. We need to get you help right now!!!” Silverstream stated in a panic, before feeling the woman hold her clawed hand all of sudden. Looking down, she saw the girl was now focusing on her
“I’ll be fine… the others though… over to the right of us they…. I….”
The woman though began having a hard time even speaking as she seemed to be going in and out of it all of sudden. But again it was probably because of that slowly bleeding wound she had on her stomach. Yona was the first to move to where the woman had said, pushing past a few bushes seeing to her shock three more beings just like their saviors.
Yona quickly looking back seeing the others coming up already to her, with Gallus and Smolder helping their savior back on her feet. “Friends, Yona found more. Just like lady said there would be!!!”
As the others though got to where Yona was with their savior. They six youths indeed could see, these other three were just like the woman who’d saved them. Granted they all were different in height and size; but all female from the looks of it. They all sported outfits different from one another too, but still in that white and black tinted color scheme. A scheme now the six for a moment wondered if their Professor Rarity. The fashionista she was, would either approve of or find not to her liking. Still aside from that after though, they could see these new three females also had swords.
Though also on their heads and even around one of their necks. Bone like armor and masks. Heck the biggest of these new three had hold through her stomach like it was supposed to be there. Looking at their savior. They suddenly noticed popping from under the high collar of her jacket. Bits of bone like armor around where her mouth would be. But no hole to the six youths personal relief.
But none of them said anything, as their savior motioned that she wanted to be seated near them. Though the best they could do, was lay her against a small rock. All six youths getting a bit more concerned now on the woman’s condition.
“A-Are you going to be okay. Please tell us you are miss.” Sandbar hopefully pleaded, as the woman yet again let out an amused huff as she patted his left shoulder blade gently “Miss?”
“I’ll be fine little ones, I…I just need some rest. Please…please keep an eye one me and my girls here… I promise I’ll tell you what you want to know… when… when…”
Though as the girl explained, she could feel her fatigue really starting to kick in as her vision blackened a little. The six youths seeing this, knew they had to get at least one more answer out. Thankfully it was Smolder who thought of a good one.
“Before you pass out, can you at least tell us your name!!!” Smolder asked as she could see their savior was near out cold by this point, but seemed to have heard the question. As she looked like she was at least forcing herself to hold off for just a moment or two more
“My name… my name is…. Ti…Tier….. Harribel..” Tier answered, before she finally lost consciousness
The six youths looking to one another, then her as Yona felt like she could ask this rather grim question “Is she…”
Thankfully for Yona. Ocellus had already checked her pulse, looking back at Yona with a small smile of relief.
“No need to worry Yona. She’s fine and the others are too. I did a quick check on them when you were talking to Tier here.” Ocellus happily answered, before looking back at Tier “Tier Harribel. That’s a pretty name if you ask me.”
The others couldn’t help but agree, she was both beautiful in appearance and name. Even if they had no idea what she was and had to admit were a bit nervous seeing what she’d been able to do. Gazing upon the other three girls, they wondered if they were like her in that regard when it came to pure raw strength. But as silence came in again. Smolder cut in once more to break the ice on the newest of many questions.
“So…what should we do. If we stay here. The school will be on a search for us. Then on the other hand, if we leave them here. That would just be low to do, after Tier saved our lives. We should I guess do the same….you know. So again. What in the world are we going to do with these four??” Smolder asked as she was at a standstill with coming up with any plans, especially after experiencing a harrowing near death experience. For a few seconds, no one answered before Silverstream beamed up “Silver, got a plan?”
Silverstream on her part calmed down in joy at the plan she suddenly came up with. Not only was it the best choice, but they could make more friends with these four. She already knew they could. “You bet ya Smolder. Let’s take them back to our dorm!!!!”
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Silence was the only response that Silverstream received. Well that and the stares her friends were giving her. The blank stares at the mere mention of that suggestion. Silverstream would have said something, but someone else had before she could.
“Are you freaking crazy Silver?!?!” Gallus screamed, making Silverstream mostly flinch back from the sudden change in tone. The others just decided to stay silent as they felt this was going to get into a big argument that none of them would be able to stop
“W-What do you mean Gallus??” Silver asked, a bit hurt from Gallus yelling
Gallus just sighed, pinching the bridge of his nose at Silverstream’s lack of understanding on what she was insinuating.
“Silver look. Yes Tier saved us and yes we owe her. But I think bringing her and her friends back to the school would be a horrible idea. I mean what would happen if someone caught us with them or found them when we were in class. No offense Sandbar but you ponies freak out way too much!!”
“Eh none taken.” Sandbar quickly replied, as that was kind of true. Ponies tended to jump to conclusion a bit to quickly at times, some more than others. But still he could see where Gallus was coming from
Silverstream though huffed a bit with her friend. She knew that leaving them out here would be a death sentence. Though she also knew none of the other ponies could find out. They really were a skittish race at times from the stories she’d been hearing around the school. Still, they had to take Tier and her friends back to the dorm. Narrowing her gaze at Gallus, she was ready to make her stand on this.
“I know that Gallus. But they’ll die if we don’t take them back to our dorms. I know that head mare Twilight keeps a medical kit in her office. I’m sure one of us could get in there and get it in secret.”
Though suddenly Yona was going to suggest something, but was quickly stopped by Silverstream. Before she could even voice it.
“And no. That Zecora lady lives deeper in the forest. We wouldn’t be able to get these four there in time.” Silverstream explained, keeping her gaze on Gallus. But softening it just a bit to pull at his heartstrings “Please Gallus…please…” she pleaded, tilting her head a little to the right and quivering her lip as well to add to her persuasion
Which seemed to be taking quick effect. As Gallus being the recipient of the gaze, could feel his stubbornness already diminishing. That and the fresh memory of what almost happened in their dorms made him feel even more guilty. Like she was saying mentally 'Do for me.' Gallus knowing he couldn’t last longer from Silverstream's gaze, sighed and slumped his shoulders.
“…Fine. Fine, we’ll take them back to the dorms. If that’s alright with everyone else though?”
To his slight relief and worry. Sandbar, Ocellus, Yona and Smolder agreed. Relief because they were a bit hesitant before agreeing, but worry also because they were well…agreeing to go along with this insane plan of Silverstream’s. Then again maybe this was karma already for almost getting everyone here a one way ticket to a slow and agonizing death viva being eaten alive. Silverstream though seemed to be the happiest at the outcome.
“Great!!!” Silverstream cheered as she clapped a bit. Before looking at Tier and already lifting the Tier up by her right. Looking back at the others moments later “Well come on. We need to get going.”
The others didn’t reply. Just walked passed Silver. Aside for Sandbar. Helping out Tier who saved his life. By holding her left side up using his back. Yona able to pick up the largest of the other three women against her back, even if she seemed to be struggling just a bit. Smolder and Gallus picking up the most average sized of the women. Then finally Ocellus able to lift up the smallest of the other three woman easily over her own back as she hovered in the air with her wings. Mainly because this woman in particular weighed not too much from how the other two and Tier looked.
With that the six youths silently began their way back to the school of Friendship. Glad they had the rest of the night to get back. Because they could tell it would take a bit longer to get them all back and safely hidden in their dorm. But as the walked back, none of the six could get this nagging feeling all if sudden.
A feeling of slight uneasiness, like one way or another their happy school day’s wouldn’t last too long. The thing was, none of the six youths here. Knew how right they were and how it would all start with the four women they were taking away to their dorms. None of them could realize how much this would change the world as they knew it for years to come…
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i'm not one to read barely started story and i did notice some thing i dislike in the first chapter but, i like this first taste and i love arrancar so~~
i'm tracking this and leaving a like for motivation.
hope to see more of it, not immediately or even often but from time to time just to read some potentially good fic.
what i liked
-arrancar
-original characters since most story use ulquiora or stark and lilith.
-good sized chapter.
-not frequently used mlp characters as focus.
-relatively easy to follow dialogue between multiple characters.
what i didn't like
-some phrase just sound wrong when said out loud especially when you take into account who said it.
(“Well… Gallus?”
“Right.” Gallus replied waving her off as they just kept on walking down the pathway before them “Why you ask. To be hones it’s because of an indecent an hour ago me and Silver had witnessed.”)
without counting the indecent/incident mistake, those two words just don't fit gallus and are too formal between friends.(in my opinion.)
-some cliche: appear in everfree forest? check
unknown disembodied benevolent voices? check
sudden inner monologue/emotional characters?check
-deus ex machina, she just happened to 1:be close of the kids and 2:go out of her way to help them, she only helped her fraccion’s because they were female hollow, which is rare. also she still has the very same wound that paralyzed her moments before but suddenly can sonido around and fight? even do a cero?
still, the bad points aren't as massive as they appear, they are easy to fix or gloss over since they are only isolated event, while the good points can be built upon , all of them.
wish you luck and hope to see more of you and your story.
Dude you really need to rework the main description of your story, it is so incredibly choppy.
The ENTIRE second paragraph, even though it has several periods, doesn't contain a single sentence!
Right now I'm too scared to read your story because of what may be reflected in the main work.
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Well, in all fairness, descriptions are a bitch to write compared to main stories. If I was better at writing my own descriptions I'd have far more stories published than I do presently.
MLP X Bleach? Great, I'm interested
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First of thank you for taking the time to read my story in the first place. It is much appreciated. Also yeah I can see the points with the con's here. I appreciate your honesty on it. Though I will say. Some of the oddities are there for reasons, only some. What they are I will not say, but hey one point of my story is to get readers to questioned it. Make's what I have planned later all the more fun to write.
But again thank's for the feed back, hope to keep you entertained with the future chapters!
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Thank you and I hope to please Lord Aizen!!!
What happens next pls tell me
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You shall see one way or another, I hope you'll enjoy what's to come next!!
Are you going to incorperate any of the of the new stuff from "Can't fear your own world" novels in the story for Harribel? Just curious.
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I'm half, half on that actually. I may, but I'll see when I get into the later chapters. Right now is just the slow start.
Okay! Hi!
Let's get down to business. Overall, great love it. Takes a lot of imagination to write, and you've got that in spades. Even more so to publish it for the world to see. You've got something interesting going on here, and I hope you can keep it up. Would hate to see another writer suddenly stop. I did a big cleaning of my tracking and read it later lists.
Let me start off with my nit picks and pet peeves:
Personally, not a big fan of location/time stamps. I find them lazy, though I think one of my story uses them and I regret that mistake. Use that ability I see you already have to create almost seamless transitions. That stamp can be jarring. Again personal preference.
Next is the syntax and semantics. You've got grammatical errors going on, do you edit your own stuff? If you do take your time, don't get caught up in the excitement in uploading a new chapter. A thing I like to do is I write maybe half a page to a page. Stop. And then read what I've written so far and see how things are. Repeat this process making sure to start from the beginning. That repetition will solidify the setting in your head, and help you catch any errors you may have read. These could be grammatical errors or plot inconsistencies.
You also got a word you can't help but want to use and that's "though." Though I am a huge fan of compound sentences and such, I found your utilization of the word confusing. I'm not saying don't use it, just be more aware of it. My previous tip helps with this issue. Reread slowly, and out loud if possible. You'll start to realize that some phrasings sound weird when heard. Don't worry too much though, I have my word too. I can't help but over use "as" as well as an abundance of commas.
Lastly, can't you call the "six youths" a "group?" Sure, it lengthens your word count, but you can easily one word. Reading the same phrase or word over and over again gets tiresome, especially if you're not doing it for a creative reason to drive home a point. For example, you decide to describe the same thing, it could be a place, a period of time, or a character. You describe it from different points of view using the same structure for each. This emphasizes a juxtaposition.
Let's get on to the good. It's hard to talk about good for me, I'm a negative person.
I love your description. In that fight scene I really felt myself seeing and imagining those motions happening. You descriptions also leave enough room for the reader to imagine. You could try and pump every detail out, but the reader will see what they see. Can't control that.
I love your characters. They have there personalities from the show, and you add to that. You didn't take away from it, and I felt as though you didn't try and change them.
I love the concept. It's been a while since I finished the Bleach series. And this makes me want to rewatch it!
(Just noticed I used a bit of repetition.)
Keep up the good work, I'll be following along this adventure. If you need an editor, I'd love to give it a shot, but you might want to check out my work beforehand. You wouldn't want my style of writing to ruin your's. I wouldn't want that either. Instead it should add, and make it better.
Anyway, that's enough over analyzing a fanfic for me. I'm not a pro, just someone who needs a creative outlet. Toodles!
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Hello back!!
Okay so read your comment and first off. I do thank you for having taken your time to read this first chapter of my story. I appreciate it.
Now then I do admit, I agree with your con's on this. I've have been doing what I can to do a new writing style. Just here and there you know. But I do get where you're coming from with them.
Also I think I'll take your advice on stopping on a page and re-reading. I tend to go into like overdrive once I start writing. Which can tend to give me too many pages to feel like re-reading until I'm at the end of said chapter. Oh and yes I do my own editing. I'll say at the moment I'm not looking for an editor mainly because of my odd scheduled this past year. But I shall keep you in mind if I do start looking, I thank you for the offer either way.
Finally thank you for the good points too. I tend to do what I can best when it comes to character's and their personalities. Sometimes I do fear the worst, but I'm glad they seem pretty spot on from what you've explained. Oh also yeah I do like to add onto the personalities more, give them a bit more when or if I can. Give the characters reasons behind their actions too when I can at least.
What I'm just trying to say is that. Thank you for the honest and civil comment. Also thank you again for taking your time to read this and leave a helpful comment. Then lastly I do hope I keep you entertained in the near future of this story.
Until next we speak, I wish you great day's ahead!!!
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Hi again!
It's always nice to hear back from writers who want to improve in any way. Shows their want to improve, as well as their acceptance of criticism.
I can't imagine rereading a whole 9,000 word chapter to edit without already having read it and edited as I wrote.
A few more tips:
I've already mentioned start from the beginning and read out loud as much as possible. But rereading from the beginning everytime can be cumbersome, especially if you continue to write 9,000 words a chapter. So if you have any major time skips or setting changes, you can start there instead. But if you do mention anything in reference to previous sections, make sure everything lines up. And also, don't forget about that Kirchoff's gun stuff too.
I've said take your time when editing, but more importantly, take a break. Don't look at what you've for a day or two. Comeback to it with fresh eyes and a fresh mind. You'll notice things you haven't noticed before if you were to just keep looking at the screen for hours on end. (Also helps if your a student writing an essay, so there's that too.) And that's all I got at the moment.
Keep up the good work, keep up the open mind! Don't let any criticism chip at you negatively. As writers, we are the most critical and the most harsh when it comes to reviewing our work. Good luck!
Toodles!
(For the sake of consistency, I have resigned my self to this sign off that is nothing like my actual personality. I cringe.)
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Hello once more. : )
Well good to hear from you and thank's for the advice. But yeah I actually do other fics on Fanfiction.net. Those are usually around 28,000 to maybe if it comes to it; 40,000 words per chapter. Those, oh those can be tiresome to re-read over, but I still enjoyed writing them. Still these chapter are pretty long too consider most stories I've seen when it comes to word count. Not meaning that in a bad way. Just something I've always notice.
Also thanks for the word's of encouragement, I do appreciate them and I will try to start doing some of the suggestions you gave me. I believe it will really help me out now that I'm thinking about it more.
Anyway's again thank you and I hope to keep you entertained in the later chapters!!
What happens next please tell me
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Oh don't worry, I'm working on the next chapter. Just been more busy this past month since the virus started. Like IRL stuff, that and a heat wave were I live at made it hard for me to concentrate on writing.
BUT, the next chapter will be up as soon as possible.