First, when it comes to the tags up on top, especially on the ones that preface this particular story, I am going to air on the side of caution. I dearly hope that I will be able to drop several of them as the story progresses. Maybe even take this down to teen. But I want them there in case they're needed. I would rather someone turn away from something I wrote out of caution, rather then read something they were unprepared for. I do not plan on placing anything resembling rape within this story. However, I do plan on discussing the subject of impaired consent, as well as the appropriate response, and that is something I am treating with a great deal of caution. Especially with its importance in my life. If you are uncertain, read something else. I have already descended into one scene of public cannibalism. It was entirely unplanned, but it was something, in that instance, that the character would've done. As of now I am proceeding cautiously. Especially with that last chapter laving a rather bad taste in my mouth, just from the dialogue and the exposition. I understand nervousness, I'm the one writing it and this story makes ME nervous. However, I happen to have Nightmares I want to get rid off. So again Nova, if nervous of Uncertain, don't read this one.
8991665 Damn it all! Forgot to hit reply. What I get for doing this after being up for over 24 hours. So, besides what I write here, the comment underneath is a reply for you too. I do not know your particular reading or writing experience. So forgive me please if I get a bit pedantic or sound like a jerk, I promise I'm not trying too. My experiences though, well, lets just say that for a long time I read every damn thing I could pick up. So while I and the educational institutions of this world, frankly have a poor relationship, unless they need something cleaned, I do have a good understanding of more than I perhaps should. So to hopefully answer a bit more of your questions, how about this.
!. I love Constructive Criticism, and by that I mean that I'm well aware that I suck and that I will always suck, especially compared to any other writers. I'm an awful writer. But I really can't stop, so I'll continue. So all I ask is that whenever someone wishes to tell me that I stink, tell me what particular written vile odor you wish me to address and I'll endeavor to do my best to learn from the mistake.
2. I know I sound like I am taking this story seriously, and I am, to a point. The rest is me doing something I've wanted to do since I read my first FOE story. I realized quickly that the whole genre is based on a template for a series of fantasy stories written, I want to say back in the 60's or 70's, called the Gor series. I picked a whole bunch of them up at my library one boring summer for .10 a piece. I wish that I could have those dimes back. The Gor books are the equivalent of Misogynistic romance novels that frankly were abohorent when I read them, let alone now that I know that such things have contaminated something I take great pleasure in, namely the Brony fandom. So this story is a gigantic rewrite of how I wanted those books to go. In short, themes and cliches will be made fun of or at the very least reversed.
3. God yes! I know that this story has been done completely and utterly to death! I wish they would stay dead. However, this is one of a set of stories I'm doing that are going to be crossing the genres, for lack of a better term, of the fandom. My assassin-verse story was in fact the first. This is the next and I'm brainstorming the third. They will connect cross-universal at the end. It's a massive present to Gundamhero96 for his help in both encouraging me to write on this site and for bouncing Ideas around with me. All the stories will feature Trixie in a very important, major role as that is his favorite character.
4. The reason this is a DISPLACED FOE fic is that I happen to not like either of those genres. Displaced for the aforementioned Mary Sue/Deus Ex Machina crap, and of Course FOE because most are excuses for Male Chauvinism. So I'm attempting to kill two birds with one stone, that way I can move on to something I would rather do. The fact that me obsessing about doing this led to some rather unpleasant nightmares has made me want to get this done. Although this is not my favorite, or even enjoyable, I have set myself a task and I intend to finish it to the best of ability.
So in short, I understood the comments, and I will be attempting to incorporate what I can into this tale, but I am uncertain how much will come through.
Allowing himself to be helped to his feet he followed the older male out into Ponyvile, occasionally pausing as Dagur would point out various places of interest.
The tags make me really nervous. Can I please have proof that you read and understood stupidhand14 and Hamster_Master's comments?
First, when it comes to the tags up on top, especially on the ones that preface this particular story, I am going to air on the side of caution. I dearly hope that I will be able to drop several of them as the story progresses. Maybe even take this down to teen. But I want them there in case they're needed. I would rather someone turn away from something I wrote out of caution, rather then read something they were unprepared for. I do not plan on placing anything resembling rape within this story. However, I do plan on discussing the subject of impaired consent, as well as the appropriate response, and that is something I am treating with a great deal of caution. Especially with its importance in my life. If you are uncertain, read something else. I have already descended into one scene of public cannibalism. It was entirely unplanned, but it was something, in that instance, that the character would've done. As of now I am proceeding cautiously. Especially with that last chapter laving a rather bad taste in my mouth, just from the dialogue and the exposition. I understand nervousness, I'm the one writing it and this story makes ME nervous. However, I happen to have Nightmares I want to get rid off. So again Nova, if nervous of Uncertain, don't read this one.
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Damn it all! Forgot to hit reply. What I get for doing this after being up for over 24 hours.
So, besides what I write here, the comment underneath is a reply for you too. I do not know your particular reading or writing experience. So forgive me please if I get a bit pedantic or sound like a jerk, I promise I'm not trying too. My experiences though, well, lets just say that for a long time I read every damn thing I could pick up. So while I and the educational institutions of this world, frankly have a poor relationship, unless they need something cleaned, I do have a good understanding of more than I perhaps should. So to hopefully answer a bit more of your questions, how about this.
!. I love Constructive Criticism, and by that I mean that I'm well aware that I suck and that I will always suck, especially compared to any other writers. I'm an awful writer. But I really can't stop, so I'll continue. So all I ask is that whenever someone wishes to tell me that I stink, tell me what particular written vile odor you wish me to address and I'll endeavor to do my best to learn from the mistake.
2. I know I sound like I am taking this story seriously, and I am, to a point. The rest is me doing something I've wanted to do since I read my first FOE story. I realized quickly that the whole genre is based on a template for a series of fantasy stories written, I want to say back in the 60's or 70's, called the Gor series. I picked a whole bunch of them up at my library one boring summer for .10 a piece. I wish that I could have those dimes back. The Gor books are the equivalent of Misogynistic romance novels that frankly were abohorent when I read them, let alone now that I know that such things have contaminated something I take great pleasure in, namely the Brony fandom. So this story is a gigantic rewrite of how I wanted those books to go. In short, themes and cliches will be made fun of or at the very least reversed.
3. God yes! I know that this story has been done completely and utterly to death! I wish they would stay dead. However, this is one of a set of stories I'm doing that are going to be crossing the genres, for lack of a better term, of the fandom. My assassin-verse story was in fact the first. This is the next and I'm brainstorming the third. They will connect cross-universal at the end. It's a massive present to Gundamhero96 for his help in both encouraging me to write on this site and for bouncing Ideas around with me. All the stories will feature Trixie in a very important, major role as that is his favorite character.
4. The reason this is a DISPLACED FOE fic is that I happen to not like either of those genres. Displaced for the aforementioned Mary Sue/Deus Ex Machina crap, and of Course FOE because most are excuses for Male Chauvinism. So I'm attempting to kill two birds with one stone, that way I can move on to something I would rather do. The fact that me obsessing about doing this led to some rather unpleasant nightmares has made me want to get this done. Although this is not my favorite, or even enjoyable, I have set myself a task and I intend to finish it to the best of ability.
So in short, I understood the comments, and I will be attempting to incorporate what I can into this tale, but I am uncertain how much will come through.
Isn't it ponyville?
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Yes, Yes It Is. Habitual Mispelling.
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One that my spell check doesn't catch anymore. I have no idea why