Working at the carwash
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I was really looking forward to Sunsets chapter, though im a bit torn on how it turned out. The biggest problem i have is the 2nd act regarding the portal and what happens there but other than that the rest of it is fine, and compaired to the previous chapters this one has the most "action" between the characters. Even though i dont like the middle part id say this is the best chapter so far imo.
The only thing that annoys me is the fact that you keep putting did in front of names like did sunset shimmer, did pinkie pie