*Sigh* Why am i proofreading this... BECAUSE I LOVE PROOFREADING! Error in title, should be "The Cake's Special Treats"
Pinkie Pie woke up for the on the rock farm for the last time. She smiled as saw her sisters sleeping in their beds. She sighed and thought happily about how much she would miss this place. Pinkie Pie had decided to leave the farm and head to a city called Ponyville. It was famous for being full of smiles and joy, the perfect place for Pinkie Pie.
AAAAAAAAH Pinkie Pie woke up or the day on the rock farm for the last time. She smiled as she saw her sisters sleeping in their beds. Also, I'm pretty sure that Ponyville is a town and not a city
Choose is present tense, chose is past tense.
“Hi...” the filly said absentmindedly. Her dark red mane falling in her mouth, causing her to cringe and spit it out. She was sketching what appeared to be a dragon-chicken hybrid.
Her dark red mane fell in her mouth, causing her to cringe and spit it out.
“I like your drawing! Can you tell me about it?” Pinkie said hoping to strike up a conversation.
Pinkie said COMMA hoping to strike up a conversation
The rest is just a heaping pile of wrong tense and need of commas. ... Nice first story
*Sigh*
Why am i proofreading this...
BECAUSE I LOVE PROOFREADING!
Error in title, should be "The Cake's Special Treats"
AAAAAAAAH
Pinkie Pie woke up or the day on the rock farm for the last time. She smiled as she saw her sisters sleeping in their beds.
Also, I'm pretty sure that Ponyville is a town and not a city
Choose is present tense, chose is past tense.
Her dark red mane fell in her mouth, causing her to cringe and spit it out.
Pinkie said COMMA hoping to strike up a conversation
The rest is just a heaping pile of wrong tense and need of commas.
...
Nice first story