Nicely done. However I think it needs more to it. More build-up. As is it's just Nightmare Rarity comes in, does some shit and turns the Princesses into diapers. Chapter 2 was a bit better but it still could use some more depth, Rarity puts Shining in a diaper force feeds him till his bowels and bladder evacuate. I know you have skill, I've seen it in your other work but you have to show more. Tell more.
Comment posted by Darkentrophy deleted Sep 18th, 2017
Nicely done. However I think it needs more to it. More build-up. As is it's just Nightmare Rarity comes in, does some shit and turns the Princesses into diapers. Chapter 2 was a bit better but it still could use some more depth, Rarity puts Shining in a diaper force feeds him till his bowels and bladder evacuate. I know you have skill, I've seen it in your other work but you have to show more. Tell more.
This chapter entertained me a lot.
interesting