You had a couple of errors, once I get to an actual desktop I can start quoting them for you, and the whole author note thing broke tone and immersion, but the premise is really cool, and I love the plot so far. If you just had a prereader to help you catch the tiny errors *ahem*me*ahem* it would really help the story go from good to great with just that little bit of polish. All in all, I love it, just wish I could help with the little things.
You had a couple of errors, once I get to an actual desktop I can start quoting them for you, and the whole author note thing broke tone and immersion, but the premise is really cool, and I love the plot so far. If you just had a prereader to help you catch the tiny errors *ahem*me*ahem* it would really help the story go from good to great with just that little bit of polish. All in all, I love it, just wish I could help with the little things.
Ha I liked it I been waiting for more chapters to be released now I see it's worth the wait
7764862 sorry for the wait its kinda difficult for me to do.
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Your fine it's the anticipation that kills me lol I was always thinking they were a good ship and I love the development of the story
Oh, the dirty little thoughts that went through my mind at reading that.
7777345 lol
7777298 they are in it's own universe