... I don't like this. I don't like how she randomly found the book, I also don't like Bill being more powerful than Discord. Bill has done some crazy stuff (annihilating the time baby for one.) But the reason Discord never did anything of this scale is because he isn't that evil. (Although he did casually lift the sun and moon every minute... which would actually require more strength than killing time baby did.) But, you can fix both these problems with one simple change: Discord should be lying about not being able to see Bill. He should also be the one who put the book there in the first place. and all he wants is to see all the beautiful chaos from the encounter. (It doesn't explicitly say that he's less powerful than Bill, but rather that he just can't be bothered interfering, and it's certainly more in character than just rolling over and dying like he did here. It also makes him seem more cunning and manipulative, as well as giving the plot some complexity. You could even have the story narrated by Discord, which would make it more interesting overall.) All in all, great idea. I will favourite this, and remember: I'M WATCHING YOU
Ooooohhh cant wait for the next one!
7704183 Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
The name's Bill Cipher, and I do not approve of this story!
... I don't like this. I don't like how she randomly found the book, I also don't like Bill being more powerful than Discord. Bill has done some crazy stuff (annihilating the time baby for one.) But the reason Discord never did anything of this scale is because he isn't that evil. (Although he did casually lift the sun and moon every minute... which would actually require more strength than killing time baby did.) But, you can fix both these problems with one simple change: Discord should be lying about not being able to see Bill. He should also be the one who put the book there in the first place. and all he wants is to see all the beautiful chaos from the encounter. (It doesn't explicitly say that he's less powerful than Bill, but rather that he just can't be bothered interfering, and it's certainly more in character than just rolling over and dying like he did here. It also makes him seem more cunning and manipulative, as well as giving the plot some complexity. You could even have the story narrated by Discord, which would make it more interesting overall.) All in all, great idea. I will favourite this, and remember: I'M WATCHING YOU
7704502 You may not approve of it, but do you like it?
7704573 Wow, that's....actually an idea I was toying with. I didn't expect someone to actually suggest that, so PLOT TWIS!
7705045 ... If you do that, I can guarantee I will unconditionally love this story.
7705878 Good, because that idea is a good idea.
I believe it's I am not I have.