It looks like you had a great idea that failed to translate into a good story like one of mine did.... Pity because it's a great idea. You just needed to give it more thought and development....But I've read worse fanfics.. Heck I've wrote worse.... Also you might want to spellcheck....
Shame. Concept is Ok, but execution is not Ok. If it was a parody, then I would understand, but since it's not, along with a TON of spelling mistakes, I have to give this a thumbs down.
It looks like you had a great idea that failed to translate into a good story like one of mine did.... Pity because it's a great idea. You just needed to give it more thought and development....But I've read worse fanfics.. Heck I've wrote worse.... Also you might want to spellcheck....
Shame. Concept is Ok, but execution is not Ok. If it was a parody, then I would understand, but since it's not, along with a TON of spelling mistakes, I have to give this a thumbs down.
7516241 Thanks for the feedback
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7516478 You're Welcome. And I'm glad to know that you take criticism well.