you can hate this fanfic all you want, you can dislike it. but i poured all my effort into it and nothing you can say, will make be believe this is not the best of my abilities now

I think this story has some great potential.
Something about it clicks in a good way with me.

Can I give you some tips to make your story better?
I write original horror stories and a few mlp horror stories.

I can PM or tell you the tips here.