War is what made Earth and Humanity, what it is today. War is not strange to us. We are use to the Gore, the Weapons of Mass Destruction, the Death. But Equestria is not, they don't know what War can really feel like, and Twilight is the first.
He makes a sprint towards the opening,
She.
When passed through the bush,
Missing 'she' (though I'd replace the whole thing with "Passing through the bush," since there's a following 'she' in the next bit).
Her eyes slowly ignores the heat and smoke,
I think a word went missing, there.
Also, mind your tenses. The chapter starts in present tense, then switches to past.
Have to say, Twi can be pretty annoying... this only strengthens my argument against her
The grammar needs to be improved
She.
Missing 'she' (though I'd replace the whole thing with "Passing through the bush," since there's a following 'she' in the next bit).
I think a word went missing, there.
Also, mind your tenses. The chapter starts in present tense, then switches to past.
Have to say, Twi can be pretty annoying... this only strengthens my argument against her
The grammar needs to be improved