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….wow. That's all I know to say. Wow.
Too much diablos ex machia. Unstoppable evil villain able to kill anyone with a thought. You have just lost a reader permanently! Murdering large numbers of helpless people for effect is the worst kind of lazy writing for someone who sucks at building dramatic tension. Evil villains who have no limits are the laziest form of foil. Take your masochistic depravity elsewhere. It has no place in this fandom.
This is seriously a way overpowered villain. He's got your whole cast dead-to-rights between his powers and his foresight. You're at the point where I've never seen a writer be able to pull out a believable victory.
I'd have to agree with the sentiment that this villain is way too overpowered. It is preposterous that he hasn't already won at this point.
Also, Trojan's dialogue at the beginning was just painful. Maybe a decade ago I would have been gleeful at the references, but nowadays it comes across as lazy and disruptive.