A Farm boy's Quest For Love
written by Abruptshots
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I enjoy seeing Big Mac and Pinkie Pie paired together and I really like the idea for this story.
However, there were a few spelling errors and a lot of grammar mistakes; both of those really kept taking me out of the story. Also, you were really rushing this story; as though you were in a writing race or something.
Waaaaay too many run on sentances, even the first paragraph was 1 long sentance. Try and break up a few, i felt like i was mentally running out of breath reading them.